Part 1
Giám khảo
Did you have a bike when you were a child?
Thí sinh
Yes I do when I work try I used to ride my bike in the park with my parents on the weekend and after school day I often ride my bike with around the neighborhood with my friends and I love this activity so much because it active for me and for.
Giám khảo
Do you think bikes are popular in your country?
Thí sinh
Yes, I think so because in my country many people often wake up early to do exercise in the morning on the in the park and many people love this activity because it's active and healthy in.
Did you have a bike when you were a child?
Điểm: 48.0Gợi ý: Bạn nên trả lời rõ ràng bằng một câu chủ đề ngắn gọn, sau đó cung cấp 1–2 chi tiết cụ thể. Tránh lỗi ngữ pháp thì quá khứ/hiện tại (ví dụ 'used to' vs 'do'), sắp xếp ý mạch lạc và dùng liên từ hợp lý (e.g. 'and', 'so', 'because'). Giữ độ dài tối đa 5 câu và sửa những cụm từ sai như 'it active for me' thành 'it kept me active'. Ví dụ các điểm cải thiện: 1) Bắt đầu bằng câu khẳng định ở quá khứ: “Yes, I did.” 2) Nêu khi nào và với ai bạn đi: “I used to ride with my parents at the park on weekends.” 3) Thêm 1 chi tiết cụ thể ngắn về tần suất hoặc cảm xúc: “I often rode around the neighbourhood with friends after school and enjoyed the freedom.”
Ví dụ: Yes, I did. I used to ride my bike with my parents in the park on weekends, and after school I often rode around the neighbourhood with my friends. I enjoyed it because it kept me active and gave me a sense of freedom.
Do you think bikes are popular in your country?
Điểm: 56.0Gợi ý: Bạn nên mở đầu bằng một câu chủ đề trực tiếp, rồi dùng 1–2 câu hỗ trợ với thông tin cụ thể (ví dụ thời gian, nơi, tỉ lệ hoặc thói quen). Tránh lặp từ và sửa cấu trúc như 'on the in the park'. Dùng liên từ để nối ý rõ ràng (e.g. 'because', 'for example'). Thêm dẫn chứng cụ thể sẽ giúp câu thuyết phục hơn (ví dụ: 'many people cycle to work' hoặc 'parks are full of cyclists in the morning').
Ví dụ: Yes, I think bikes are quite popular in my country. Many people wake up early to exercise in parks, and you can see lots of cyclists there every morning. For example, it's common to see families and groups of friends cycling together because it's a healthy and affordable way to stay fit.
× Yes I do when I work try I used to ride my bike in the park with my parents on the weekend and after school day I often ride my bike with around the neighborhood with my friends and I love this activity so much because it active for me and for.
✓ Yes. When I was a child, I used to ride my bike in the park with my parents on weekends. After school, I often rode my bike around the neighborhood with my friends, and I loved this activity because it was healthy and active for me.
The original sentence contains multiple sentence structure problems: run-on sentence, incorrect tense sequence, and missing or wrong articles and adjectives. Split the ideas into separate sentences to clarify time frames. Use 'used to' for past habitual actions and past tense 'rode' for actions that occurred in the past. Replace 'on the weekend' with 'on weekends' or 'on the weekend' consistently and remove redundant words like 'work try'. Use 'was healthy and active' to describe past state. Suggestions: break long sentences into shorter ones; choose consistent past tense for childhood habits; remove unnecessary words. Grammar problem type ID:26
× Yes, I think so because in my country many people often wake up early to do exercise in the morning on the in the park and many people love this activity because it's active and healthy in.
✓ Yes, I think so because in my country many people often wake up early to exercise in the park in the morning, and many people love this activity because it is active and healthy.
Problems: awkward word order and unnecessary repetition, plus minor preposition issues. Use the infinitive 'to exercise' or simply 'exercise' after 'wake up early to'. Place time and place phrases in natural order: 'in the park in the morning'. Remove trailing 'in'. Use 'it is' instead of contraction if formality desired. Suggestions: simplify phrases, avoid repeating 'many people', and keep time/place order consistent. Grammar problem type ID:6