Bike— Part 1 Báo cáo

Gợi ý: Снижение балла обусловлено неестественной речью, частыми паузами и повторениями, а также нечеткой структурой ответа. Следует начать с прямого тезиса, затем добавить 1–2 конкретных деталей (например, кто купил велосипед, как часто вы ездили, где) и избегать слов-паразитов («uh», «and» в начале фраз). Также сократите ответ до 2–4 предложений и используйте связки (because, so, for example) для логики.

Ví dụ: Yes, I had a bicycle when I was a child. My father bought it for my seventh birthday, and I rode it almost every day around my neighborhood. I enjoyed cycling because it gave me freedom and helped me make friends.

Gợi ý: Низкий балл из-за неопределённости, сильных пауз и неоконченных мыслей. Нужно чётко высказывать мнение в первом предложении, затем привести 1–2 конкретные причины (например: недостаток велодорожек, климат, удобство автомобилей) и завершить выводом. Используйте связки (because, however, for example) и избегайте повторов и незаконченных фраз.

Ví dụ: In my opinion, bicycles are not very popular in my country because there are few bike lanes and many people prefer cars for convenience. For example, commuting distances are often long and public transport is sometimes unreliable, so most people choose motor vehicles.

× Uh, when I was a child, I used to have a bicycle and, and I like, uh, I like to ride it because, uh, my father bought, uh, it my bicycle and.

✓ When I was a child, I used to have a bicycle and I liked to ride it because my father bought it for me.

The original sentence contains filler words and repetition that break the sentence structure (Sentence structure errors, ID 26) and tense inconsistency (Present vs Past, ID 6 and ID 5). 'Used to have' requires past reference, so 'I like' should be 'I liked'. The phrase 'my father bought, uh, it my bicycle and' has incorrect word order and missing preposition: correct form is 'my father bought it for me'. Remove fillers ('uh', 'and, and') and combine clauses clearly. Suggestion: decide on past tense for childhood descriptions, remove disfluencies, place object and preposition in proper order ('bought it for me').

× In my opinion, uh, bike, uh, bikes are not popular in my country because, uh, very, because many people are, uh, many people choose to. Write a card.

✓ In my opinion, bikes are not popular in my country because many people prefer to drive cars.

The original has repeated words and fillers causing sentence structure problems (ID 26) and unclear ideas. 'Bike, uh, bikes' is redundant; use plural 'bikes' (Singular and plural issue, ID 1). 'Because, uh, very, because' is ungrammatical repetition. 'Many people choose to. Write a card.' is fragmented and lacks a verb linking to an object (Sentence without a verb/fragment problem, ID 23 and 26). I replaced the fragment with a clear reason: 'prefer to drive cars' which fits context. Suggestion: remove filler words, avoid repetition, ensure each clause has a subject and verb, and state a clear comparative activity (prefer to drive cars) rather than a fragment.