Bike— Part 1 Báo cáo

Gợi ý: Be more concise, use correct tense and remove hesitations. Start with a clear topic sentence in past tense, then give one or two specific reasons or a brief example. Use linking words (for example, so) and avoid filler words like "uh" and "umm."

Ví dụ: No, I didn't have a bike when I was a child. I wasn't very interested in cycling, so I never asked my parents for one. For example, I preferred reading and indoor games, which is why a bike never appealed to me.

Gợi ý: Be more precise with vocabulary and grammar (use "popular" rather than "famous," "ride" rather than "drive" for bikes). Reduce hesitations and organize ideas with linking words (for example, moreover). Provide one specific detail or statistic if possible, and finish with a short opinion sentence.

Ví dụ: Yes, I think bikes are quite popular in my country. For example, many students ride bicycles to school and tuition classes, and many older people cycle in parks or for short errands. Moreover, cycling is seen as a healthy and environmentally friendly option.

× Umm, actually, no, I do not have uh, sorry, I did not have a bike when I was a child.

✓ Umm, actually, no, I did not have a bike when I was a child.

The student initially uses present tense 'do not have' when referring to the past. The correct tense for a past time reference is the past simple 'did not have'. Suggestion: maintain past simple when talking about childhood events (e.g., 'I did not have').

× Umm, because I don't know, I was uh, not very fond of bikes when I was young, so I never asked for a bike from to my parents.

✓ Umm, because I don't know, I was, uh, not very fond of bikes when I was young, so I never asked my parents for a bike.

The phrase 'asked for a bike from to my parents' has incorrect preposition order and unnecessary words. Use 'asked my parents for a bike'. Also, maintain past simple 'never asked' for past reference. Suggestion: place the object ('my parents') immediately after the verb and the preposition 'for' before the thing requested.

× Bikes are, uh, famous in my country, for example, I see most of the young people, uh, driving bikes to their schools, to their tuitions.

✓ Bikes are, uh, popular in my country; for example, I see most young people riding bikes to school and to tuition classes.

'Famous' is not the appropriate adjective for a mode of transport; 'popular' fits better. 'the young people' is unnecessarily definite; 'most young people' is natural. 'Driving bikes to their schools' is awkward—use 'riding bikes to school'. 'Tuitions' is nonstandard; use 'tuition classes' or 'tutoring'. Suggestion: choose correct adjective 'popular', omit unnecessary articles, and use 'ride' for bicycles.

× Umm, apart from that, uh, even I see older people, you know, uh, doing cycling in the park or if they have to go somewhere nearby.

✓ Umm, apart from that, I even see older people, you know, cycling in the park or going somewhere nearby.

'Doing cycling' is incorrect; use the gerund 'cycling'. Also 'or if they have to go somewhere nearby' is clumsy; use 'or going somewhere nearby'. Suggestion: use verb+ -ing forms correctly ('cycling', 'going') and simplify clauses for clarity.

× So yeah, it's a good thing. It's environment friendly people.

✓ So yeah, it's a good thing. It's environmentally friendly.

'Environment friendly people' is ungrammatical and confuses noun/adjective roles. The intended meaning is that cycling is good for the environment: use the adverbial adjective 'environmentally friendly' to modify the activity or thing. Suggestion: use 'environmentally friendly' to describe objects or actions that benefit the environment.