Bike— Part 1 Báo cáo

Gợi ý: Be more natural and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Correct grammar (e.g., “when I was a child,” “its brakes were rusty”). Avoid filler phrases like “some kind of” and redundancy.

Ví dụ: Yes. I had a bike when I was a child, but it was quite old and its brakes were rusty, so it didn’t work properly. Because of that, I often had to walk it home or have my father fix it, which made riding less fun.

Gợi ý: Give a direct topic sentence then support with two clear, specific reasons using linking words. Eliminate hesitations and informal fillers. Improve vocabulary (e.g., "two-wheeler" instead of "two Wheeler") and grammar ("can't afford a four-wheeler"). Keep to two or three sentences max.

Ví dụ: Yes, bikes are very popular in India. Firstly, many people cannot afford a car, so they choose affordable two-wheelers; secondly, because cities are densely populated, bikes are more convenient for navigating traffic and finding parking.

× Yeah, when I was child I had a bike, but it was some broken and it didn't work well.

✓ Yeah, when I was a child I had a bike, but it was somewhat broken and it didn't work well.

Missing article 'a' before 'child' is a singular/plural/article issue; 'some broken' is incorrect collocation — use 'somewhat broken' or 'a bit broken'. Suggestion: include the indefinite article with singular count nouns and use appropriate adverb 'somewhat' or phrase 'a bit' to modify 'broken'.

× So it's brakes were like some kind of rusting or something.

✓ So its brakes were kind of rusted or something.

Use of 'it's' (contraction of it is) is incorrect; possessive pronoun 'its' is required. Also 'rusting' as progressive is unnatural here; 'rusted' (adjective/past participle) or 'kind of rusted' is better. Suggestion: use 'its' for possession and 'rusted' to describe condition. Note: 'kind of' or 'a bit' can soften the statement.

× So it was not properly working.

✓ So it was not working properly.

Adverb placement: 'properly' should follow the verb or be placed after the object. This is an adverb placement/present tense usage detail. Suggestion: place adverb after the verb phrase: 'not working properly'. Also tense 'was not working' is past continuous acceptable for describing the bike's condition.

× Yeah. So basically, uh, I am from India, so people are there not, uh, uh, most of the people are not very rich and they can afford, they can't afford a four Wheeler.

✓ Yeah. Basically, I am from India, and most people there are not very rich and cannot afford a four-wheeler.

Problems: word order and redundancy ('people are there not' is incorrect); double modal/auxiliary confusion ('they can afford, they can't afford'). Also 'four Wheeler' should be 'four-wheeler' as a compound noun. Suggestion: place adverbial 'there' after 'people' or use 'people there', remove redundancy and keep a single modal 'cannot' or 'can't'.

× So most of them have, uh, two Wheeler.

✓ So most of them have two-wheelers.

Number agreement and compound noun: 'two Wheeler' should be plural 'two-wheelers' when referring to many people owning such vehicles. Also use hyphenated compound 'two-wheeler'. Suggestion: pluralize nouns when speaking about many people owning items.

× And another reason is that India is a, uh, highly populated country.

✓ Another reason is that India is a highly populated country.

Unnecessary filler 'a, uh,' disrupts sentence flow and punctuation. Structure is otherwise acceptable. Suggestion: remove fillers for clarity; 'India is a highly populated country' is a correct clause.

× So, uh, most, uh, mostly people prefer like, right.

✓ So most people prefer them, right?

Redundancy: 'most, mostly' is unnecessary; 'prefer like' is informal/slang and unclear. The sentence likely seeks confirmation 'right?'. Also 'prefer them' refers to two-wheelers. Suggestion: use 'most people prefer them' and add a tag question 'right?' if confirmation is intended.