Bike— Part 1 Báo cáo

Gợi ý: Be direct, organize your response with 1–2 clear sentences, reduce hesitation and unclear words, and give one specific detail. Start with a simple topic sentence (Yes/No + brief statement), then add a concise supporting detail with a linking phrase. Also correct vocabulary (bike/bicycle, toys) and avoid irrelevant digressions.

Ví dụ: Yes. I did have a bicycle when I was a child. My father bought me a small pink bicycle, and I used to ride it around the neighborhood every afternoon with my friend Amy.

Gợi ý: Give a clear topic sentence, then support it with specific reasons and one brief example; use linking words (because, therefore, for example) and correct grammar (people tend). Reduce pauses and repetition. Mention a concrete statistic or situation if possible to sound more specific.

Ví dụ: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country because they are more affordable and easier to park than cars. For example, many commuters use motorbikes to travel to work, and cities have large numbers of two-wheelers on the roads during rush hour.

× OK, so as a girl, I don't like Pike.

✓ OK, so as a girl, I didn't like bikes.

The student used present tense 'don't like' while describing childhood preferences; past tense 'didn't like' is required (Grammar problem type 6: Present tense issue) and 'Pike' is a spelling error and wrong noun form. Use plural 'bikes' to refer generally. Suggestion: use past tense when talking about childhood and check spelling ('bike' not 'Pike').

× Uh, my father used to buy umm, twice like doll, uh, cooking set and umm, something like girly tink for me.

✓ My father used to buy toys for me, like dolls, a cooking set, and other girly things.

Original has unclear structure and wrong words: 'twice like doll' and 'girly tink' are incorrect. 'Used to' is correct for past habitual action (no change), but nouns need correction and parallel structure. Use plural 'dolls' and 'things'. Suggestion: list items with commas and use clear nouns.

× So I had yeah, I have uh, when uh, cycle with uh, Amy where I used to umm ride.

✓ So I had a cycle when I was a child that I used to ride with my friend Amy.

Mixes tenses and uses wrong pronouns/nouns: 'I had yeah, I have' mixes present and past; 'cycle with Amy where I used to ride' is awkward. Use past tense 'had' and 'used to ride' consistently. Add article 'a cycle' and clarify 'my friend Amy'. Suggestion: maintain past tense and clear subject objects.

× Umm, I uh, I think yeah, it's popular because, umm, everywhere I have seen so many bikes uh, there in the world,

✓ Umm, I think it's popular because I have seen so many bikes everywhere in my country.

Student says 'there in the world' but question asks about country. 'Everywhere I have seen' word order is awkward; place 'everywhere' after 'seen' or say 'I have seen so many bikes everywhere in my country.' Maintain present perfect 'have seen' for current observations. Suggestion: keep focus on country and use natural word order.

× bikes are more convenient and more affordable than cars, so people tends to buy, people tends to buy uh, bikes and and now.

✓ Bikes are more convenient and more affordable than cars, so people tend to buy bikes now.

Subject-verb agreement error: 'people' is plural so verb should be 'tend' not 'tends' (Grammar problem type 27). Also redundant repetition 'people tends to buy, people tends to buy' and extra 'and'. Simplify to 'people tend to buy bikes now.' Suggestion: ensure verbs agree with plural subjects and avoid repetition.