Bike— Part 1 Báo cáo

Gợi ý: Be more concise and grammatically correct. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific details. Avoid filler words (uh, um) and verb tense errors. Use linking words to connect ideas (for example, because, so, and).

Ví dụ: Yes, I did. My parents gave me a small black bike for my fifth birthday, and I used it to explore my neighborhood. Because it was light and easy to ride, I often rode it to visit friends and go to the park.

Gợi ý: Give a clear opinion sentence followed by two specific reasons with linking words. Reduce repetition and correct grammar (use present simple: 'people use bikes'). Include one specific example or statistic if possible to strengthen the answer.

Ví dụ: Yes, I think bikes are very popular in my country. Many people use them to commute because they are cheap and convenient, and students often ride bikes to college to avoid traffic. For example, in my city a large number of university students cycle daily during term time.

× Yes, I remembered I have a small bike, uh, when I was uh, in my childhood uh, that bike is gift.

✓ Yes, I remember I had a small bike when I was a child; that bike was a gift.

The student used inconsistent tenses and incorrect tense forms. 'Remembered' suggests a past recollection but is awkward here; 'remember' (present) with 'had' (past) fits the context of recalling a childhood possession. 'In my childhood' is wordy and unnatural; 'when I was a child' is correct. 'That bike is gift' lacks the article and wrong tense; use past 'was' and include the indefinite article 'a'. Suggestion: Use 'I remember I had...' or 'I remembered that I had...' and include 'a' before singular countable nouns.

× That bike was gifted by my parents on my 5th birthday.

✓ That bike was a gift from my parents on my 5th birthday.

Although 'was gifted' is grammatically possible, it sounds less natural in this context; using 'was a gift from' is more idiomatic. Also 'gifted by my parents' is a passive with correct past participle but the preferred expression is given. Suggestion: Use natural phrasing 'was a gift from my parents'.

× It was in black color, uh, and I uh, used this to explore my neighborhood and going around there.

✓ It was black, and I used it to explore my neighborhood and go around the area.

The phrase 'in black color' is incorrect; use the adjective 'black' after 'was'. 'Used this' should be 'used it' (pronoun choice) and mixing 'used it to explore' with 'going around' creates a verb form mismatch; use parallel infinitives 'to explore' and 'to go' or 'explore and go around.' 'There' is vague; 'the area' or 'the neighborhood' is clearer. Suggestion: Keep parallel verb forms and use correct pronouns and adjective placement.

× Definitely bikes are popular in my country because, uh, everybody used to, umm, used bike to, uh, commute one place to another place.

✓ Definitely bikes are popular in my country because everybody used to use bikes to commute from one place to another.

The student mixed present 'are popular' with incorrect past-habit construction 'used to, used bike.' The correct form for the past habitual action is 'used to use bikes' or, for a general present habit, 'people use bikes to commute.' Also 'used bike' is ungrammatical; use the verb 'use' and plural 'bikes' to match 'everybody' as generic. 'Commute one place to another place' should be 'commute from one place to another.' Suggestion: Choose consistent tense (present for general fact: 'people use bikes') or past habitual ('used to use'). Use 'from... to...' for commuting.

× And they are using for their workplace.

✓ And they use them to get to their workplace.

The original lacks an object for 'using' and misuses 'for' with 'workplace.' 'They are using' is an awkward continuous form; simple present 'they use' is better for habitual actions. 'Them' refers to bikes. Use 'to get to their workplace' or 'to go to work.' Suggestion: Provide the object pronoun and correct preposition/verb for purpose.

× And some, uh, students are going, uh, to some, uh, to college, uh, using bikes and the employers are using bikes to go to the work.

✓ Some students go to college by bike, and employees use bikes to go to work.

The original uses awkward progressive forms and unnecessary repetition 'to some, to college.' Use simple present 'go' and the idiomatic 'by bike.' 'Employers' is incorrect for people who work; the intended word is 'employees' or 'workers.' 'To go to the work' should be 'to go to work.' Suggestion: Use concise phrasing: 'Some students go to college by bike, and employees use bikes to go to work.'