Part 1
Giám khảo
Did you have a bike when you were a child?
Thí sinh
Yes, I did. I have a bike when I was little because, uh, that is a dog's bike. But at that time we, we, I was really shocked, but I still want that, the feeling about, uh, adventure. So yeah.
Giám khảo
Do you think bikes are popular in your country?
Thí sinh
I, yes, I do, I think it's really popular, especially recent year 'cause, uh, riding bike is a form of, is a good form of exercise. So, uh, they can strengthen people's body health, physical health and mental health always. And especially in, uh, including, uh, we have a fresh air.
Did you have a bike when you were a child?
Điểm: 45.0Gợi ý: 回答不够连贯且有语法错误,信息不清晰。建议:1) 开头直接回应并给出简短主题句;2) 用一到两句具体细节(比如谁的自行车、什么时候、为何喜欢);3) 避免重复填充词(uh, I was really shocked等),句子控制在3-4句内;4) 注意时态一致(过去时描述童年)。练习时可先在脑中组织好要点再说。
Ví dụ: Yes, I did. I had a small red bike when I was about seven, and it actually belonged to my neighbor at first. I felt excited and a little nervous learning to ride, but that sense of adventure made me practice every day until I could ride confidently.
Do you think bikes are popular in your country?
Điểm: 55.0Gợi ý: 回答内容有观点但表达重复且语法和连接词使用欠佳。建议:1) 开头给出明确观点;2) 用2-3个具体原因支持观点(如环保、经济、健康);3) 使用连接词(for example, moreover, because)保持逻辑;4) 避免冗余词汇,注意名词搭配(physical and mental health)。
Ví dụ: Yes, I think bikes are quite popular in my country. For one thing, cycling is an affordable and eco-friendly way to travel. Moreover, many people cycle for exercise because it improves both physical and mental health, especially in cities with clean air and dedicated bike lanes.
× I have a bike when I was little because, uh, that is a dog's bike.
✓ I had a bike when I was little because, uh, that was my dad's bike.
原句用了现在时 have 和 is 與過去時間狀語 when I was little 搭配不當,應使用過去時。且句中 dog's bike 顯然是拼寫或詞不達意,應為 dad's bike(爸爸的自行車)。建議:遇到明確的過去時間(when I was little)時,動詞使用過去式(had, was)。
× But at that time we, we, I was really shocked, but I still want that, the feeling about, uh, adventure.
✓ But at that time I was really shocked, but I still wanted that feeling of adventure.
原句語序混亂且人稱和時態不一致(we, we, I 混雜;want 用現在時但描述過去)。應刪除多餘的 we 並將 want 改為過去式 wanted;表示“對冒險的感覺”用 feeling of adventure。建議:說過去事情時保持主語一致並使用過去時,簡化重複語詞。
× I, yes, I do, I think it's really popular, especially recent year 'cause, uh, riding bike is a form of, is a good form of exercise.
✓ Yes, I do. I think it's really popular, especially in recent years, because riding a bike is a good form of exercise.
原句中 recent year 時態和單複數不當,應為 recent years(最近幾年);riding bike 在英文中通常加不定冠詞 a bike 或使用動名詞短語 riding a bike。建議:表示一段近期時間用 plural years;固定搭配是 'riding a bike' 或 'cycling'。
× So, uh, they can strengthen people's body health, physical health and mental health always.
✓ So, uh, they can strengthen people's physical and mental health.
原句中 body health 用法不自然且 redundant(重複),always 位置錯誤。應合併為 physical and mental health,且不需要 always 在句尾。建議:用固定搭配 'physical health','mental health',避免多餘詞彙;如要表示“總是能夠”,可說 'can always strengthen'。
× And especially in, uh, including, uh, we have a fresh air.
✓ And especially because we have fresh air.
原句中 and especially in, including 結構混亂且介詞用法錯誤;have a fresh air 也不自然,應為 have fresh air 或 'there is fresh air'。建議:用 because 引出原因,或說 'there is fresh air';避免連續使用多個介詞短語。