Part 1
Giám khảo
Did you have a bike when you were a child?
Thí sinh
Yes, when I was a child I had a bike and it was pink color and it had characters from the cartoon wings. I really enjoyed cycling bike when I was a child. I find this activity very engaging.
Giám khảo
Do you think bikes are popular in your country?
Thí sinh
Yes, bikes are very popular in my country and even we have bike Rd. in streets so people prefer cycling during day and especially in my hometown bikes are very popular and people for short distances prefer it.
Did you have a bike when you were a child?
Điểm: 72.0Gợi ý: Сделайте ответ более естественным и сжатым: начните с краткого тематического предложения, затем добавьте одно или два конкретных подробных предложения. Избегайте повторов (например, «when I was a child» и «when I was a child» дважды) и исправьте ошибки в словосочетаниях («pink color» → «pink», «cycling bike» → «riding my bike»). Можно добавить короткое конкретное воспоминание или причина, почему вам нравилось кататься.
Ví dụ: Yes, I did. I had a pink bike decorated with cartoon characters called "Wings," and I loved riding it around my neighborhood. I especially enjoyed racing my friends on weekends because it felt freeing and exciting.
Do you think bikes are popular in your country?
Điểm: 76.0Gợi ý: Сделайте ответ более организованным и ясно используйте связки: начните с краткого утверждения, затем приведите конкретные причины или примеры. Избегайте неуклюжих сокращений («bike Rd.») и повторов («bikes are very popular» дважды). Уточните, где именно велосипедная инфраструктура есть, и добавьте конкретную деталь о том, зачем люди выбирают велосипеды.
Ví dụ: Yes, they are. Many cities in my country now have dedicated bike lanes, so people often cycle for short trips and commuting. In my hometown, for example, students and office workers ride bikes because it's faster and cheaper than driving.
× Yes, when I was a child I had a bike and it was pink color and it had characters from the cartoon wings.
✓ Yes, when I was a child I had a bike; it was pink and had characters from the cartoon Wings.
The phrase 'pink color' is redundant; use 'pink' as an adjective before the noun. Also combine clauses to avoid repetition: 'it had characters from the cartoon Wings.' Capitalize proper noun 'Wings' if it is the cartoon's title. Use a semicolon or split into two sentences for clarity.
× I really enjoyed cycling bike when I was a child.
✓ I really enjoyed riding my bike when I was a child.
English uses 'ride a bike' rather than 'cycle bike'. 'Cycling' is a gerund meaning the activity, so say 'I really enjoyed cycling' or use 'riding my bike' for clarity. Include the possessive 'my' to show ownership.
× I find this activity very engaging.
✓ I found this activity very engaging.
The question is about childhood, so the past tense 'found' matches the time frame. Using present tense 'find' creates a time mismatch. Use past tense consistently when speaking about past experiences.
× Yes, bikes are very popular in my country and even we have bike Rd. in streets so people prefer cycling during day and especially in my hometown bikes are very popular and people for short distances prefer it.
✓ Yes, bikes are very popular in my country. We even have bike lanes on the streets, so people prefer cycling during the day. Especially in my hometown, bikes are very popular and people prefer them for short distances.
The original sentence is run-on and has several structural issues: abbreviations like 'Rd.' are inappropriate here, and 'bike lanes' is the correct term. 'During day' needs the article 'the'. Use commas and split into sentences to improve readability. Replace 'it' with 'them' to agree with plural 'bikes'.