Music— Part 1 Báo cáo

Gợi ý: Be more concise and correct grammar while keeping ideas clear. Start with a direct topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting reasons using linking words (for example, 'because' or 'so'). Avoid filler words like 'umm' and correct collocations (e.g., 'give me energy', 'continue my studies and work').

Ví dụ: I prefer happy music because it uplifts my mood and helps me cope with stress. For example, when I feel nervous about exams or work, upbeat songs give me energy and make it easier to focus, so I can continue my studies and tasks more confidently.

Gợi ý: Avoid repetition and improve sentence structure. Give a clear topic sentence, then one concise supporting detail with a linking word (e.g., 'because' or 'and'). Use singular/plural correctly ('I appreciate it' for music).

Ví dụ: Yes, happy music definitely makes me feel more excited because upbeat rhythms and positive lyrics boost my energy. For instance, when I play lively songs before exercising, I feel more motivated and energetic.

Gợi ý: Give a direct answer and explain with one clear reason using correct grammar and vocabulary. Replace awkward phrasing ('make much money') with natural expressions like 'earn enough money'. Combine short sentences to avoid choppiness and use a conditional phrase properly.

Ví dụ: Not yet, but I would like to take lessons because local music classes are quite expensive and I can't afford them at the moment. If I earn enough money in the future, I plan to enroll in guitar or piano lessons.

Gợi ý: Provide a clear topic sentence and one specific example with correct collocations ('clean my room', 'relieve stress' or 'improve my mood'). Use linking words like 'because' and avoid vague phrasing like 'relieve my mental health'.

Ví dụ: Yes, I often listen to music while I clean my room because upbeat songs make the chore more enjoyable and help me relax. For example, playing my favorite playlist makes me feel less stressed and I finish tidying faster.

× I prefer happy music, umm, actually I always feel nervous and anxious, so I need to do some energy for myself so that I can face the difficulties to go on the study and working.

✓ I prefer happy music. Actually, I often feel nervous and anxious, so I need to get some energy for myself so that I can face the difficulties of continuing my studies and work.

The original sentence has several tense and word-choice problems. 'Always' with 'feel' is acceptable, but 'do some energy' is incorrect; use 'get some energy' (verb + noun). 'To go on the study and working' is ungrammatical: 'continuing my studies and work' correctly uses the present participle 'continuing' and the nouns 'studies' (plural) and 'work'. Also split into shorter sentences for clarity and correct punctuation. Suggestion: use 'often' or 'always' consistently, 'get energy' not 'do energy', and 'continue my studies and work' to express ongoing actions.

× On the other hand, I think happy music can make me relax.

✓ On the other hand, I think happy music can help me relax.

'Make me relax' is understandable but less idiomatic; 'help me relax' is the common collocation. This keeps the present modal 'can' and correct verb form 'relax'. Suggestion: use 'help me relax' for natural phrasing.

× Absolutely happy music always makes me feel more excited, it is the reason why I listen to it and not only it can make me more feel more excited but also it can make me feel more energetic.

✓ Absolutely. Happy music always makes me feel more excited; it is the reason why I listen to it. Not only does it make me feel more excited, but it also makes me feel more energetic.

Run-on sentence and incorrect word order. Separate into sentences and use subject-auxiliary inversion for emphasis: 'Not only does it make me...' Also remove duplicate 'more' in 'more feel more excited' and maintain present simple 'makes'. Suggestion: break long sentences, use correct inversion after 'not only', and avoid duplicated words.

× I appreciate them.

✓ I appreciate it.

The pronoun 'them' is plural and refers to plural antecedents, but here the speaker refers to 'happy music' (singular/uncountable), so use the singular pronoun 'it'. Suggestion: match pronoun number to its antecedent; use 'it' for 'music'.

× Not yet, but I want. The reason is that the music classes are very expensive so that I can't afford it though.

✓ Not yet, but I want to. The reason is that music classes are very expensive, so I can't afford them yet.

'The music classes' is acceptable, but article can be omitted: 'music classes' is more natural. 'So that I can't afford it' is incorrect causality and pronoun number; use 'so I can't afford them' (classes = plural) or 'so I can't afford it' if referring to 'a class' (singular). Also avoid 'though' at the end redundantly and use 'yet' for timing. Suggestion: match plural pronoun to 'classes' and place adverbs like 'yet' appropriately.

× If I make much money I will do that.

✓ If I earn enough money, I will do that.

'Make much money' is non-idiomatic; use 'earn enough money'. Also add a comma after the conditional clause. The future tense 'I will do that' is fine. Suggestion: use 'if I earn enough money' for natural conditional expressions.

× Yeah, absolutely. I usually listen to music when I clean the room because I think clean the room is a way to relax my body and listening to music is a way to relieve my mental health.

✓ Yeah, absolutely. I usually listen to music when I clean my room because I think cleaning my room is a way to relax my body, and listening to music helps relieve my mental stress.

Use gerund 'cleaning' after 'think' to refer to the activity. 'Clean the room' should be 'clean my room'. 'Relieve my mental health' is incorrect collocation; 'relieve my mental stress' or 'improve my mental health' are correct. Also use parallel structure: 'cleaning... and listening...' and 'helps relieve' for natural phrasing. Suggestion: use gerunds for activities ('cleaning'), possessive 'my room', and correct collocations like 'relieve stress'.

× I think they matched very well, so I usually do.

✓ I think they match very well, so I usually do that.

Tense inconsistency: context requires present simple 'match' not past 'matched'. Also 'do' needs an object; 'do that' refers to 'listen to music while cleaning'. Suggestion: maintain present tense for habitual actions and include an object when using 'do' to avoid vagueness.