Music— Part 1 Báo cáo

Gợi ý: Be more concise and correct small grammar issues. Start with a direct topic sentence, then add one clear supporting detail. Avoid mixing tenses and redundant phrases.

Ví dụ: I prefer happy music because it uplifts my mood and gives me energy. For example, I usually play upbeat pop songs while getting ready in the morning, but I choose slower, sad songs when I want to relax in the evening.

Gợi ý: Use smoother phrasing and avoid awkward expressions (e.g., “happy words involving it”). Combine short repetitive sentences and use linking words for clarity.

Ví dụ: Yes, happy music does make me feel more excited because of its energetic beat and positive lyrics. For instance, I listen to upbeat tracks before going to a party or working out at the gym to boost my energy.

Gợi ý: Be precise and use standard terms (no unnecessary apostrophes or incorrect words like “Tao”). Give one or two specific examples of what you learned and how it helped you.

Ví dụ: I haven't attended a private music school, but I studied Hindustani music as my main subject in 12th grade. That course taught me basics such as swaras, alankars and ragas, which improved my vocal control and understanding of melody.

Gợi ý: Improve sentence clarity and correct awkward phrases (e.g., “deduct the out bang on noise”). Use linking words and give one specific example of what type of music you choose for each activity.

Ví dụ: Yes, I often listen to music while studying or doing household chores because it makes tasks less boring. For example, I play calm, instrumental music when I study to help me concentrate, and upbeat songs when I clean to stay motivated.

× For example, when I often get ready in the morning, I listen to pop music and while I want to relax, I listen to sad music.

✓ For example, when I get ready in the morning, I listen to pop music, and when I want to relax, I listen to sad music.

The phrase 'when I often get ready' misplaces the adverb 'often' and creates unclear meaning; 'while I want to relax' is better expressed as 'when I want to relax' to show habitual action. Remove 'often' from that clause and use parallel 'when' clauses for clarity. Suggestion: place adverbs next to the verb they modify (e.g., 'I often get ready') and use 'when' for habitual situations.

× Yes, happy music makes me feel more excited because of the energetic beat and happy words involving it.

✓ Yes, happy music makes me feel more excited because of its energetic beat and cheerful lyrics.

The phrase 'happy words involving it' is unidiomatic. Use the adjective 'cheerful' to modify 'lyrics' and possessive 'its' to link the beat to the music. 'Lyrics' is the correct noun for words of a song. Suggestion: use 'its energetic beat and cheerful lyrics.'

× For example, whenever I have to go to a party or I have to do my gym, I often listen to happy songs.

✓ For example, whenever I have to go to a party or go to the gym, I often listen to happy songs.

The phrase 'do my gym' is incorrect; use 'go to the gym' or 'work out at the gym.' Also remove the repeated 'I have to' for conciseness and parallel structure. Suggestion: use parallel verbs after 'or' and correct prepositional phrase 'go to the gym.'

× Well, I haven't joined any personal institution yet for music, but in my 12th grade I opted for Hindustani music as my main subject which taught me fundamental units of Swara's, Alankars, Rags, Tao and many more.

✓ Well, I haven't joined any private music institution yet, but in 12th grade I chose Hindustani music as my main subject, which taught me the fundamental units of swaras, alankars, ragas, taals, and many more.

Multiple issues: 'personal institution' is incorrect; 'private music institution' or 'music school' is appropriate (preposition and adjective error). 'in my 12th grade' should be 'in 12th grade' (article/preposition). 'Opted for' is acceptable but 'chose' is more natural. 'Swara's' incorrectly uses an apostrophe; use lowercase plural 'swaras.' 'Rags' should be 'ragas,' 'Tao' likely intended 'taal' or 'taals' (rhythm cycles). Also add the definite article 'the' before 'fundamental units.' Suggestion: correct institution phrase, remove apostrophe from plurals, use standard transliterations and articles.

× Yes I do. I usually listen to music while I'm studying or doing any household chores.

✓ Yes, I do. I usually listen to music while I'm studying or doing household chores.

No major grammar error but 'doing any household chores' is slightly awkward; omit 'any' for natural English. Also add comma after 'Yes' for written form. Suggestion: 'doing household chores' is more natural.

× It helps to make the boring task more enjoyable.

✓ It helps make boring tasks more enjoyable.

The infinitive 'to make' is unnecessary after 'helps'; native usage prefers 'helps make.' Also 'the boring task' is too specific; use plural 'boring tasks' for general habitual statements. Suggestion: use 'helps make' and pluralize for generalization.

× For example, I listen to calm music while I'm studying because it helps to concentrate more and deduct the out bang on noise.

✓ For example, I listen to calm music while I'm studying because it helps me concentrate more and reduces the impact of loud background noise.

Multiple issues: 'helps to concentrate more' needs an object ('helps me concentrate more') or use passive 'helps concentration.' 'Deduct the out bang on noise' is ungrammatical and unclear; likely intended 'reduce the impact of loud background noise.' Use appropriate verb 'reduces' and noun phrase 'loud background noise.' Suggestion: use 'helps me concentrate' and clear phrasing for noise reduction.