Music— Part 1 Báo cáo

Gợi ý: Be careful with word choice and reduce repetition. Start with a clear topic sentence, correct the phrase 'sound music' to 'sad music', and keep it concise (max 3–4 sentences). Add a brief reason and one specific example to support your preference.

Ví dụ: I usually prefer happy music because it helps me stay focused and upbeat while I work. For instance, I listen to energetic pop songs when studying to maintain concentration, but I sometimes choose mellow, sad tracks in the evening to relax and reflect.

Gợi ý: Make your response clearer and avoid vague phrases like 'the reason'. Give a direct topic sentence, explain how music affects you, and use one concrete example. Watch grammar: say 'because the rhythm and the lyrics'.

Ví dụ: Yes, happy music definitely makes me feel more excited because the rhythm and lyrics boost my energy. For example, I play upbeat songs while walking or studying to stay motivated and maintain a faster pace.

Gợi ý: Organize your answer with a clear topic sentence and avoid informal fillers like 'just'. Be specific about what you learned and use linking words (for example, 'for instance' or 'however') to contrast. Correct minor phrasing: 'a combined course' or 'a general music class'.

Ví dụ: Yes, I took general music classes in primary school where we covered basic vocal techniques and learned to play the flute. For example, we practised breathing and singing exercises, but we didn't study instruments like the violin or piano.

Gợi ý: Be more precise and avoid awkward expressions like 'upward lyrics'. Start with a clear topic sentence, explain why you listen to music, and give a specific example naming the style or song features (e.g., fast tempo, upbeat lyrics).

Ví dụ: Yes, I often listen to music while commuting or exercising because it helps pass the time and improves my mood. For example, upbeat pop songs with a fast tempo and positive lyrics make me run faster on the treadmill.

× I prefer sound music occasionally when I want to relax or just reflect on something.

✓ I prefer calm music occasionally when I want to relax or just reflect on something.

The original uses 'sound music', which is incorrect word order and noun choice for describing a type of music. Replace with the adjective 'calm' before the noun 'music' to correctly describe the music's quality. Suggestion: use an appropriate adjective before the noun (e.g., calm, soothing, relaxing).

× Yeah, it is mainly because the reason and the lyrics boost my energy.

✓ Yeah, it is mainly because the rhythm and the lyrics boost my energy.

The phrase 'because the reason' is redundant and ungrammatical. Also 'sound' earlier implied wrong noun; here the subject 'the rhythm and the lyrics' is plural, so use plural verb 'boost' (which is already correct). Fix redundancy by replacing with a concrete noun 'rhythm' that collocates with 'lyrics'. Suggestion: avoid redundant phrases like 'because the reason'; use 'because' or 'the reason is that'.

× Yeah, actually music is a composite course in Chinese primary schools and I have learned a lot about it.

✓ Yeah, actually music is a compulsory subject in Chinese primary schools and I have learned a lot about it.

The word 'composite' is the wrong word choice for 'required' or 'mandatory'. Use 'compulsory subject' to describe school courses. Tense is fine; this is a vocabulary/word choice correction which affects meaning. Suggestion: use common collocations like 'compulsory subject' or 'required subject'.

× I learned some basic vocal techniques and I also learned how to play the flute.

✓ I learned some basic vocal techniques and I also learned to play the flute.

Repeating 'learned' is grammatically acceptable but sounds stylistically weak. Use the infinitive 'learned to play' which is the usual collocation after 'learned' when referring to acquiring a skill. Suggestion: vary structures and use 'learned to + verb' for skills.

× We just didn't learn something like violin or piano, but it was very fun.

✓ We just didn't learn instruments like the violin or piano, but it was very fun.

'Learn something like violin or piano' is awkward. Use 'learn instruments like the violin or piano' and include the definite article with specific instrument names. Also keep contrast with 'but it was very fun' which is acceptable. Suggestion: use 'instruments like' and include 'the' before specific instrument names.

× For example, pop music with upward lyrics makes me run faster on the treadmill.

✓ For example, pop music with uplifting lyrics makes me run faster on the treadmill.

The phrase 'upward lyrics' is not a correct collocation. Use the adjective 'uplifting' to mean lyrics that raise your mood. Preposition use is fine; this corrects adjective choice. Suggestion: choose appropriate adjectives that naturally collocate with 'lyrics', such as 'uplifting' or 'motivating'.