Music— Part 1 Báo cáo

Gợi ý: Be more concise and correct grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid fillers (uh), and use correct verb forms and articles. Add one specific example and a linking word to make the answer coherent. Keep to no more than 4–5 sentences.

Ví dụ: I prefer happy music because it quickly lifts my mood and helps me enjoy time with friends. For example, when I go out with friends we often play upbeat pop songs which make conversations more lively. However, I sometimes listen to sad music when I want to reflect quietly. Overall, happy music makes me feel energetic and optimistic.

Gợi ý: Eliminate repetition and correct grammar agreement. Use one clear topic sentence, then give two specific situations with linking words (for example, when/so) to support your point. Replace vague phrases like 'makes me feel motivated' with a short concrete effect.

Ví dụ: Yes, happy music definitely makes me feel more excited. For example, when I'm relaxing at home I play energetic songs to lift my spirits, and when I'm doing boring chores I listen to upbeat tracks so I stay focused and motivated. As a result, I feel more productive and positive.

Gợi ý: Use clear past-tense narration and remove fillers. Start with a direct statement about the class, then give two concise supporting details: why you enjoyed it and why it stopped. Avoid trailing off; finish your sentence with a clear final thought.

Ví dụ: Yes, I took flute classes in sixth grade as part of a school program. I enjoyed them because we learned simple melodies and practiced together, which was fun. The lessons lasted only one year because the curriculum changed the following year. I still remember enjoying the social aspect of those classes.

Gợi ý: Be more precise and correct subject-verb agreement. Provide two specific examples of activities and link them with 'for example' or 'such as'. Mention the effect briefly. Keep it within 3–4 sentences.

Ví dụ: Yes, I often listen to music while doing other tasks, especially at work when I deal with repetitive paperwork that doesn't require deep concentration. For example, I play instrumental or upbeat playlists to stay motivated, and I also listen to music while doing household chores on Sundays to keep my energy up. Music helps me finish tasks more quickly and enjoyably.

× it also help me spend quality time with friends or sometimes alone.

✓ it also helps me spend quality time with friends or sometimes be alone.

Subject-verb agreement requires adding -s to 'help' because the subject is 'it' (third person singular). Also 'alone' should follow a verb; 'be alone' is clearer. Suggestion: use 'it also helps me spend quality time with friends or sometimes be alone.'

× But from time to time I can also listen to sad music because I think that you need for some reason to.

✓ But from time to time I also listen to sad music because I think you sometimes need to.

The original has redundant auxiliary 'can' and an incomplete clause 'need for some reason to.' Simplify to 'I also listen' and place 'to' after 'need' properly. Suggestion: remove 'can' and rephrase to 'I also listen' or 'I can also listen' and finish the idea: 'you sometimes need to.'

× Yes, happy music make me makes me feel excited.

✓ Yes, happy music makes me feel excited.

Duplicate verbs and wrong agreement: 'happy music' is singular, so use 'makes' and remove the extra 'make me'. Suggestion: write only 'happy music makes me feel excited.'

× It's a a kind of booster when I feel down.

✓ It's a kind of booster when I feel down.

Duplicate indefinite article 'a a' is a typographical/repetition error. Remove the extra 'a'. Suggestion: proofread to avoid repeated words.

× It helps me improve my moods.

✓ It helps me improve my mood.

'Mood' is typically uncountable here; use singular 'mood' rather than plural 'moods.' Suggestion: use 'improve my mood'.

× I really like listening to happy music, uh, when I'm relaxing alone or spending good time with friends.

✓ I really like listening to happy music when I'm relaxing alone or spending quality time with friends.

Use 'spending quality time' rather than 'spending good time' for natural collocation. Also remove filler 'uh'. Suggestion: use collocations like 'quality time.'

× And I also listen to happy music when I'm doing boring activities or tasks to make people to make me feel motivated.

✓ And I also listen to happy music when I'm doing boring activities or tasks to make myself feel motivated.

The pronoun 'people' is incorrect; reflexive 'myself' should be used to indicate the speaker. Also remove the extra 'to'. Suggestion: use 'to make myself feel motivated.'

× Yes, I had umm, flute classes when I was in 6th grade.

✓ Yes, I took flute classes when I was in 6th grade.

Use 'took' or 'had' can be acceptable but 'had flute classes' is less natural. 'Took flute classes' is the common collocation in past tense. Suggestion: use 'I took flute classes.'

× It was uh, mandatory in the scholar, uh, program.

✓ It was mandatory in the school program.

'Scholar program' is incorrect; 'school program' is the right phrase. Remove filler 'uh'. Suggestion: use 'school program.'

× I, I really enjoyed these classes at that time, but it only, uh, lasted for one year.

✓ I really enjoyed those classes at that time, but they only lasted for one year.

Pronoun reference and number: 'classes' is plural so use 'they' and 'those' fits past reference. Remove duplicate 'I' and filler. Suggestion: write 'I really enjoyed those classes, but they lasted only one year.'

× Uh, when I move to the next grade, umm, we didn't pursue. Is but so far I remember it was very funny and.

✓ When I moved to the next grade, we didn't continue. As far as I remember, it was very fun.

Tense consistency: use past 'moved' and 'didn't continue' for completed action. 'Pursue' is wrong choice; 'continue' fits. 'Is but so far' is fragmented; fix to 'As far as I remember.' Suggestion: keep past tense and use complete clauses.

× Sure, I always listen to music while I'm doing other things, especially at work when I'm working on some boring text or repetitive text that don't need too much focus or concentration.

✓ Sure, I always listen to music while I'm doing other things, especially at work when I'm working on boring or repetitive texts that don't need much focus or concentration.

Subject-verb agreement: 'texts' plural needs 'don't' is fine, but original had singular/plural mismatch and awkward 'some boring text'. Use 'boring or repetitive texts' and 'don't need much' rather than 'too much'. Suggestion: choose plural 'texts' or reword to 'a boring or repetitive text that doesn't need...'. Also remove filler.

× Also, I listen to music while doing my household choice on Sunday.

✓ Also, I listen to music while doing my household chores on Sundays.

'Household choice' is incorrect; correct phrase is 'household chores.' Use plural 'Sundays' for habitual action. Suggestion: use 'household chores' and pluralize time expression for habitual actions.

× To stay motivated and energized and complete my activities without too much effort.

✓ This helps me stay motivated and energized and complete my activities without too much effort.

Fragment sentence missing subject and verb; needs connection to previous clause. Add 'This helps me' to form a complete sentence. Suggestion: ensure each sentence has subject and verb.