Music— Part 1 Báo cáo

Gợi ý: Be more concise and correct grammar. Start with a direct topic sentence, fix errors (e.g., "it brightens" not "it's brightens"; "when I'm overwhelmed"), and avoid redundancy. Add one specific example with a linking word to clarify when and why you choose happy music.

Ví dụ: I prefer happy, uplifting music because it brightens my mood and helps me cope with stress. For example, when I feel overwhelmed with exams, I listen to upbeat pop or dance tracks to relax and boost my concentration.

Gợi ý: Answer directly, correct grammar and keep sentences relevant to your personal feeling. Avoid talking about others in a way that confuses the subject ("to make them feel"). Use linking words to connect cause and effect and give one clear personal example.

Ví dụ: Yes, happy music does make me feel more excited and energetic because upbeat rhythms increase my heart rate and mood. For instance, when my parents play lively songs in the car, I immediately feel more awake and ready for the day.

Gợi ý: Keep the answer grammatically correct and concise. Use a clear time frame and correct verb forms ("enrolled" not "enroll"). Offer a brief reason and one specific example of other areas you focused on to add detail.

Ví dụ: No, I haven't taken formal music classes since childhood because my parents believed I lacked musical aptitude, so they never enrolled me. As a result, I focused on subjects like mathematics and computer science, which play to my strengths.

Gợi ý: Be specific about activities and avoid filler words ("uh", "here and there"). Start with a clear topic sentence, use linking words to organise examples (e.g., "for example", "also"), and explain briefly how music helps each activity.

Ví dụ: Yes, I often listen to music while doing other tasks. For example, I play low-volume instrumental music when studying to improve concentration, and upbeat playlists when shopping or exercising to boost my energy.

× Yes, I prefer happy and uplifting music because it's brightens my mind and helps me cope with stress.

✓ Yes, I prefer happy and uplifting music because it brightens my mind and helps me cope with stress.

The pronoun contraction 'it's' stands for 'it is' or 'it has', but the sentence needs the subject pronoun 'it' followed by the verb 'brightens'. Using 'it's brightens' is ungrammatical because two verbs would follow without proper structure. Use 'it brightens' to express that the music brightens the speaker's mind.

× For example, when I'm in overwhelmed by work or exams, I listen to upbeat pop or travel dance songs to relax and.

✓ For example, when I'm overwhelmed by work or exams, I listen to upbeat pop or dance music to relax.

The phrase 'in overwhelmed' incorrectly combines a preposition with an adjective; the correct form is 'I'm overwhelmed'. 'Travel dance songs' is unclear; 'dance music' is more natural. The fragment ends with an extra 'to' that leaves the sentence incomplete, so remove it to complete the clause properly.

× Yes, happy music makes me feel more excited and energetic.

✓ Yes, happy music makes me feel more excited and energetic.

No grammatical correction needed for this sentence; it is correct. Included here to confirm correctness and provide no-change feedback.

× That's because my parents always play upbeats music in the car to make them feel more excited when they are driving.

✓ That's because my parents always play upbeat music in the car to make themselves feel more excited when they are driving.

'Upbeats' is incorrect pluralization; use the adjective 'upbeat' to describe music. The pronoun 'them' is incorrect because it refers back to 'my parents' and should be reflexive or reciprocal; 'themselves' clarifies that the parents are making themselves feel more excited.

× It's quite important for them to do so when they drive.

✓ It's quite important for them to do so when they drive.

This sentence is grammatical and clear in context; no change required. Included to confirm correctness.

× No, I haven't taken any music classes since I was a child because my parents thought I lack musical aptitude, so they never enroll me in lessons.

✓ No, I haven't taken any music classes since I was a child because my parents thought I lacked musical aptitude, so they never enrolled me in lessons.

Mixing present and past tenses causes inconsistency. 'Thought' is past, so follow with past 'lacked' rather than present 'lack'. Also change 'enroll' to past 'enrolled' to match the past context.

× As a result, I focus on other areas where my strengths lie rather than the arts.

✓ As a result, I focused on other areas where my strengths lay rather than on the arts.

Because the previous sentence refers to past circumstances (parents' decisions in childhood), maintain past tense continuity: 'focused' and 'lay'. Also include the preposition 'on' before 'the arts' for clarity.

× Yes, I do listen to music while doing other things.

✓ Yes, I do listen to music while doing other things.

This sentence is grammatically correct; no change required. Included to confirm correctness.

× For instance, I always study and listen to music here and there.

✓ For instance, I often study while listening to music.

'Here and there' is vague and informal; 'often' is clearer. The original 'I always study and listen to music' is awkwardly coordinated; 'study while listening to music' expresses simultaneous actions more naturally.

× Sometimes I just listen to music to focus on something, uh, like shopping and studying.

✓ Sometimes I just listen to music to help me focus on activities like shopping and studying.

Add 'help me' to clarify purpose. Use 'activities like' to list examples; this improves register and clarity. Original phrasing 'focus on something, uh, like' is colloquial and unclear.