Music— Part 1 Báo cáo

Gợi ý: Be more natural and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, correct grammar, and avoid redundant phrases. Use one or two specific details with linking words. For example, correct verb forms and choose precise words (e.g. ‘uplifting melodies’ instead of ‘a bit melodies’). Keep to under five sentences.

Ví dụ: I prefer happy music because uplifting melodies and lively rhythms lift my mood and help me concentrate. For example, I listen to upbeat pop during my morning routine to feel energised and focused, whereas sad songs can make me feel low.

Gợi ý: Improve grammar and clarity: use correct subject-verb agreement and avoid unclear words or fragments (e.g. ‘MIL’ is unclear). Begin with a direct answer, then add a concise specific example using a linking word. Use varied but appropriate vocabulary (e.g. ‘energising’ rather than ‘hype up’).

Ví dụ: Definitely. Happy music often has energising rhythms that boost my energy and encourage others around me. For instance, I listen to upbeat pop before exercising, which makes me more motivated and helps me exercise harder.

× I prefer happy music because it's a bit melodies and lovely rhythms lift my mood and help me concentrate better on my work.

✓ I prefer happy music because its bright melodies and lovely rhythms lift my mood and help me concentrate better on my work.

The student used 'it's a bit melodies' which mixes a contraction and an incorrect modifier; 'it's' (it is) is incorrect for possession. The intended meaning is possession of the melodies, so use the possessive adjective 'its'. Also 'a bit' does not correctly modify 'melodies' here; 'bright' or another adjective suits better. Suggestion: use the possessive 'its' and choose an appropriate adjective to modify the plural noun 'melodies'.

× For example, I listen to pop music during my morning routine to help me energized, while listening to sad music sometimes brings on negative vibes.

✓ For example, I listen to pop music during my morning routine to help me feel energized, while listening to sad music sometimes brings on negative vibes.

The phrase 'to help me energized' incorrectly uses the past participle 'energized' after 'help me'. After 'help', use the base form or 'to' + base verb: 'help me (to) feel energized'. Suggestion: use 'help me feel energized' or 'help me to feel energized' to express purpose correctly.

× Definitely happy music often have energetic vibes that MIL makes you hype up and encourage others to do the same.

✓ Definitely, happy music often has energetic vibes that make you hype and encourage others to do the same.

There are several issues: 'music' is an uncountable noun requiring singular verb 'has' not 'have' (subject-verb agreement). 'MIL' appears to be a typographical error and should be removed; the verb phrase should be 'make you hype' or better 'get you hyped'. Also 'makes you hype up' is awkward; 'get you hyped' or 'make you excited' is clearer. Suggestion: ensure subject-verb agreement with uncountable 'music' and correct the verb phrase to 'get you hyped' or 'make you excited'.

× For instance, when I listen to lovely pop songs before exercising, I feel more motivated and enthusiastic which helps me perform better.

✓ For instance, when I listen to lovely pop songs before exercising, I feel more motivated and enthusiastic, which helps me perform better.

This sentence is mostly correct grammatically, but it needs a comma before the non-restrictive relative clause 'which helps me perform better'. The error falls under punctuation affecting clause usage, linked to adjective/adverb clarity. Suggestion: add a comma before 'which' to separate the clauses and improve readability.