Music— Part 1 Báo cáo

Gợi ý: Reduce repetition and hesitations, use one clear topic sentence, then give two concise supporting details with linking words. Correct grammar (e.g., verb forms and prepositions) and avoid filler sounds like “uh.”

Ví dụ: I prefer happy music because it improves my mood and helps me concentrate. For example, upbeat songs lift my spirits when I’m tired, and steady rhythms help me stay focused while I work.

Gợi ý: Keep the answer direct, use linking words to organize points, and avoid repeating words. Provide specific examples of how the music affects you and vary vocabulary (e.g., “energised,” “motivated,” “focused”).

Ví dụ: Yes, happy music energises me and helps me stay focused. For instance, when I listen to cheerful pop songs while studying, I feel more motivated to finish tasks and sometimes I dance during breaks to refresh my mind.

× Personally I prefer happy music because it boosts my current mood. It helps uh it help boost my current mood and also it affects on how I on how I work.

✓ Personally, I prefer happy music because it boosts my current mood. It helps boost my current mood and also affects how I work.

The phrase 'it help boost' uses the base form 'help' instead of the correct third-person singular 'helps' or, better here, the infinitive omission: 'helps boost' or simply 'helps boost' with the subject already stated. Repeating 'it' and 'on' in 'affects on how I on how I work' is incorrect: the verb 'affect' takes a direct object, so use 'affects how I work' without 'on' and remove the duplicate fragment. Suggestions: delete filler words and duplicates, use 'helps boost' or 'helps to boost', and say 'affects how I work.' Note: This correction addresses the verb + -ing/infinitive usage and redundant fragments.

× Yes, it helps me feel more excited and also it keeps me on track and and and by this happy music I am very motivated to work and sometimes I dance.

✓ Yes, it helps me feel more excited and keeps me on track; with this happy music I feel very motivated to work, and sometimes I dance.

The sentence contained redundancy ('and and and'), awkward phrasing ('by this happy music'), and inconsistent tense/structure. 'By this happy music I am very motivated' is unnatural; use 'with this happy music I feel very motivated' to express cause and maintain present simple tense. Also combine clauses more clearly and remove repeated 'and.' Suggestions: remove filler/repetitions, use 'with' instead of 'by' to indicate cause, keep present simple for habitual effects ('helps', 'keeps', 'feel', 'dance').