Music— Part 1 Báo cáo

Gợi ý: Reduce hesitations and correct grammar for clarity. Begin with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid vague or mixed metaphors (e.g. "in blue" vs "on the mountain"). Use correct verb forms ("it makes" not "it's makes") and articles ("one of the most popular art forms").

Ví dụ: I prefer happy music because it lifts my mood and energises me. For example, upbeat pop and electronic songs help me concentrate while studying, and they make me feel more optimistic after a long day.

Gợi ý: Answer directly with a clear topic sentence and give specific reasons or examples. Remove fillers ("uh", "um") and use linking words like "because" or "for example" to connect ideas. Replace unclear words ("waste") with precise vocabulary such as "relaxation" or "energy". Keep it to 2–3 sentences for naturalness.

Ví dụ: Yes, happy music does make me feel more excited because the fast tempo and catchy melodies boost my energy. For instance, I listen to upbeat playlists twice a week to refresh myself and stay motivated during busy days.

× I, I prefer happy music because it's makes me feel, uh, very high and happy.

✓ I prefer happy music because it makes me feel very happy.

The phrase 'it's makes' incorrectly combines 'it is' and the verb 'makes'. This is a third person singular subject + verb error. Use either 'it makes' or 'it's' with a participle (e.g., 'it's making'), but the correct simple present is 'it makes'. Also removed filler words and redundant adjective 'high' which is informal and unclear in this context; keep 'very happy'. Suggestion: use 'it makes' for habitual or general feelings.

× I think music, one of the popular art in the world and uh, listening to music a lot gives me more uh, power and uh, I feel like I am in blue, I am in the mountain.

✓ I think music is one of the most popular arts in the world, and listening to music a lot gives me more energy; I feel calm and uplifted, as if I am on a mountain.

Multiple errors: missing verb with the noun phrase ('music, one of the popular art' needs 'is' and correct article/number agreement), article and plural issues ('art' should be plural 'arts' and use 'one of the most popular'), and vague word choices ('power' better as 'energy'; 'in blue' is idiomatic error). Also run-on sentence; combine clauses with conjunctions or punctuation. Suggestions: add 'is', use comparative structure 'one of the most popular arts', use plural 'arts', replace 'power' with 'energy', and rephrase metaphors clearly.

× It's, uh, happy music, uh, I prepare to listen to happy music, uh, twice a week because I need some. Waste and I need some uh, power in my day so uh yeah that's.

✓ When I want to listen to happy music, I prepare to listen to it twice a week because I need a break and some energy during my day.

Tense and structure issues: 'I prepare to listen' is awkward for habitual action; use 'I prepare to listen to it' or better 'I listen to it' or 'When I want to listen'. The fragment 'I need some. Waste' seems to attempt 'a waste' or 'some rest/break'—'waste' is incorrect. Also 'power' is better as 'energy'. Sentence is fragmented and contains fillers. Suggestions: use clear present simple for habitual actions ('I listen' or 'I prepare to listen'), replace 'waste' with 'a break' or 'rest', and 'power' with 'energy'.

× I feel like I am in blue, I am in the mountain.

✓ I feel blue; I feel like I am on a mountain.

Two issues: 'in blue' is not a standard English expression for feeling sad or calm—use 'feel blue' without 'in'. Second, preposition with 'mountain' should be 'on a mountain' not 'in the mountain'. Also repeated 'I am' creates awkwardness; combine or separate with proper punctuation. Suggestion: use 'feel blue' or 'feel calm', and use 'on a mountain' for the location metaphor.

× It's, uh, happy music, uh, I prepare to listen to happy music, uh, twice a week because I need some. Waste and I need some uh, power in my day so uh yeah that's.

✓ I listen to happy music twice a week because I need a break and some energy during my day.

This original contains fragments, fillers and redundant phrasing. Combine ideas into one clear present simple sentence for habitual action. Remove filler words ('uh', 'yeah') and correct nouns ('waste' to 'break', 'power' to 'energy'). Suggestion: use concise sentences and the present simple for routines.