Music— Part 1 Báo cáo

Gợi ý: Be more natural and concise: start with a clear topic sentence, avoid hesitations and small errors (e.g. “SM music enthusiasts myself”), and give one brief specific example. Use linking words if you add details. Keep to 2–3 sentences and correct grammar (e.g. “I’m the kind of person who…”).

Ví dụ: I prefer happy, upbeat music. I’m the kind of person who likes to play lively songs while I work or exercise because they help me feel energetic and focused.

Gợi ý: Give a direct answer first, then one clear reason with a concise example. Avoid vague phrases and grammar mistakes (e.g. “music’s dynamics” not “musics dynamics”; finish your example). Use linking words like “because” or “for example” to connect ideas. Limit to 2–3 sentences.

Ví dụ: Yes, happy music definitely makes me more excited because its fast tempo and cheerful melodies boost my energy. For example, when I’m stressed I play upbeat pop songs and I immediately feel more motivated and less tense.

× SM music enthusiasts myself, I prefer happy and upbeat music.

✓ As a music enthusiast myself, I prefer happy and upbeat music.

The original sentence has a fragment and incorrect word order ('SM' seems to be a typo or fragment). This is a sentence structure error where the subject and modifier are misplaced. Begin with a clear subject phrase 'As a music enthusiast myself' to show the speaker's stance, then state the preference. Suggestion: remove the stray 'SM' and reorder to create a complete, grammatical sentence.

× I'm a type of person that, uh, likes to blast a song while I'm doing some certain activity to get on with the day.

✓ I'm the type of person who likes to blast a song while I'm doing certain activities to get on with the day.

Using 'a type of person that' and 'some certain activity' are awkward and ungrammatical. 'Who' is the correct relative pronoun for people (not 'that'), and 'the type' is more natural than 'a type' in this context. Also use the plural 'activities' instead of 'some certain activity' to sound natural. Suggestion: use 'who' for people and prefer 'certain activities' for general habits.

× Absolutely umm, given the happy musics dynamics of being a upbeat type of genre.

✓ Absolutely. Given the happy music's dynamic qualities as an upbeat genre, I feel more energetic.

Problems include 'musics' (incorrect plural/possessive), 'dynamics' vs 'dynamic qualities', 'a upbeat' (article + adjective error), and awkward sentence flow. 'Music's' requires an apostrophe for possessive, and 'dynamic' should be used as an adjective. Also 'a upbeat' should be 'an upbeat.' The correction uses 'music's dynamic qualities' and 'an upbeat genre.' Suggestion: use correct possessive form and matching articles ('an' before vowel sounds) and choose clearer nouns ('qualities').

× Additionally, psychology says that happy music brightens up or elevates the mood of one person.

✓ Additionally, psychology says that happy music brightens or elevates a person's mood.

'The mood of one person' is wordy and unnatural. This is a singular/plural and phrasing issue: use the singular possessive 'a person's mood' to express the idea generally. Also 'brightens up or elevates' can be simplified to 'brightens or elevates.' Suggestion: use concise, natural phrasing like 'a person's mood.'

× For example, if you're stressed playing music, you.

✓ For example, if you're stressed, playing music can help you relax.

The original is an incomplete sentence (fragment) and has incorrect word order. It lacks a main clause and a clear verb for the outcome. This is a sentence structure error. Provide a complete result clause such as 'playing music can help you relax.' Suggestion: always complete conditional sentences with both the 'if' clause and the main clause describing the result.