Music— Part 1 Báo cáo

Gợi ý: Be more concise and correct grammar; start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific reasons with linking words. Avoid redundancy (e.g., "good music" repeated) and incorrect phrasing ("more lower"). Use varied vocabulary like "cheerful" or "uplift" and correct conditionals.

Ví dụ: I prefer happy music. Firstly, it uplifts my mood when I am already in a good mood, helping me feel even more energetic. Secondly, when I am sad I still choose upbeat songs because listening to sad music tends to make me feel worse.

Gợi ý: Give a concise direct answer then support with a clear specific example using correct tense and sentence structure. Use linking words like "for example" and avoid fragmented endings. Correct grammar: past simple for past events, and ensure verbs agree with subjects.

Ví dụ: Yes, definitely — happy music often makes me more excited. For example, yesterday I felt very happy because a family member told me I would receive an iPhone as a gift, so I listened to cheerful songs and they made me feel even more excited.

× I prefer happy music because of the reason that in if I'm having a good mood, I listen to the good music so that it can uplift my mood even more.

✓ I prefer happy music because if I'm in a good mood, I listen to happy music so that it can uplift my mood even more.

The sentence has awkward tense and word choice. 'in if I'm having a good mood' is incorrect word order and unnecessary continuous aspect; use simple present 'I'm in a good mood'. 'the good music' is incorrect article use; use 'happy music' (general) or no article. Simplify the clause for clarity and correct present tense usage.

× But on the other hand, if I am having a sad mood, I still listen to the happy music because I feel that sad music will make me more depressed and will make my mood more lower.

✓ But if I am in a sad mood, I still listen to happy music because I feel that sad music will make me more depressed and lower my mood.

Use 'in a sad mood' rather than 'having a sad mood'. Drop the redundant phrase 'on the other hand'. 'the happy music' should be 'happy music' (general). 'will make my mood more lower' mixes comparative forms; use 'lower my mood' or 'make my mood lower'. Present tense and modal usage are otherwise fine; simplified structure improves grammar and clarity.

× Yes, definitely good music makes me more excited.

✓ Yes, definitely happy music makes me more excited.

The student previously contrasted sad vs happy music, so 'good music' is inconsistent; use 'happy music' for coherence. Present simple 'makes' is correct for habitual reaction. Clarifying the noun corrects coherence and adjective use.

× Yesterday my mood was very happy because I have received good news from one of my family member that I am receiving iPhone as a gift from him.

✓ Yesterday my mood was very happy because I received good news from a family member that I would receive an iPhone as a gift from him.

Mixing present perfect 'have received' with 'yesterday' (a specific past time) is incorrect; use simple past 'received'. Also change 'one of my family member' to 'a family member' for correct article and singular/plural. 'I am receiving iPhone' should be reported speech in past perspective: 'I would receive an iPhone'. Include the article 'an' before 'iPhone'.

× I listen to the happy songs and those makes.

✓ I listened to happy songs and they made me feel better.

The original sentence is incomplete and has wrong verb agreement: 'those makes' is ungrammatical. Context refers to past event 'yesterday', so use past tense 'listened' and 'made'. Replace 'those' with the pronoun 'they' for plural antecedent and complete the clause with an object 'made me feel better' for clarity.