Part 1
Giám khảo
Do you prefer sad or happy music?
Thí sinh
I prefer happy music, it has a great influential effect. Every time I listening to the happy music I feel extremely free and exciting.
Giám khảo
Does happy music make you feel more excited?
Thí sinh
Yes, of course the happy music make me feel excited, it has a strong influential effect appetite and listening to it I feel extremely happy and free.
Do you prefer sad or happy music?
Điểm: 62.0Gợi ý: 总体来说回答表达了偏好,但存在语法错误、用词不当和冗余。建议: 1) 句子简洁明确:开头用一句主题句直接回答问题,例如“I prefer happy music.” 2) 修正语法和搭配:注意动词形式(listening → listen)、名词搭配(influential effect 用法不自然,改为‘a positive influence’或‘uplifting’)。 3) 提供具体细节并使用连接词:用一两句话说明原因并举例,使用because/so/for example 增强连贯性。 4) 避免重复表达同一意思(free 和 exciting 可以选一个并用更合适的形容词如 relaxed, uplifted, energetic)。 练习方法:写出一到两句原因并练习把它们在20秒内自然说出,同时注意语法和连接词的使用。
Ví dụ: I prefer happy music because it lifts my mood and makes me feel energetic. For example, when I listen to upbeat songs in the morning, I feel more motivated and ready for the day.
Does happy music make you feel more excited?
Điểm: 58.0Gợi ý: 回答肯定且重复了上一个问题的内容,但存在较多语法错误、用词混乱和信息冗余。建议: 1) 简短直接回答并扩展:开始用“Yes, it does.”然后给出具体原因。 2) 修正语法:主谓一致(music makes)、删除无意义词组(‘influential effect appetite’ 非常不自然)。 3) 用具体场景支持观点:说明什么时候、为什么会更激动,例如听到节奏快的鼓点或合唱部分。 4) 使用连接词使逻辑清晰(because, when, so)。 练习方法:准备一两个具体场景或例子,练习用一到两句连接词清楚表达原因和结果。
Ví dụ: Yes, it does. Happy music usually has a fast tempo and lively rhythms, so it boosts my energy. For instance, when I hear a catchy chorus, I often feel more excited and start tapping my foot or singing along.
× I prefer happy music, it has a great influential effect.
✓ I prefer happy music because it has a great influence.
句子包含逗号连接的两个独立分句,构成逗号拼接错误(comma splice),且用词不当。将两部分用连词连接并把不恰当的形容词短语“influential effect”改为更常用的名词“influence”。建议使用 because 连接原因状语从句:"I prefer happy music because it has a great influence."(我更喜欢快乐的音乐,因为它很有影响力。)
× Every time I listening to the happy music I feel extremely free and exciting.
✓ Every time I listen to happy music, I feel extremely free and excited.
动词形式错误:在主语 I 之后应使用原形动词 listen,而不是现在分词 listening。另一个问题是形容词/副词选择不当,exciting 描述事物使人兴奋,而此处应使用描述人的形容词 excited。建议把动词改为 listen,并将 exciting 改为 excited。中文说明:在主语之后动词应为原形或与时态一致;“excited”用于描述人的感受,"exciting"用于描述令人产生该感受的事物。
× Yes, of course the happy music make me feel excited, it has a strong influential effect appetite and listening to it I feel extremely happy and free.
✓ Yes, of course happy music makes me feel excited. It has a strong effect on my mood, and when I listen to it I feel extremely happy and free.
主谓不一致:复合名词短语 happy music 作为单数/不可数概念时动词应为 makes 而非 make。原句还存在词序和词汇错误("influential effect appetite" 无意义),以及分句连接混乱。把句子拆成两句并修正措辞:"It has a strong effect on my mood"(它对我的情绪有强烈影响),并将 listening to it 前加时间状语 when 使句子结构连贯。中文说明:动词要与主语数匹配;去掉无意义的单词并调整句子为更自然的表达;使用 when 引导时间状语从句使句子通顺。