Part 1
Giám khảo
Do you have a favorite teacher?
Thí sinh
No, because I love my teachers I have ever met and they are so kind and friendly. Umm, when I was umm junior high school student, my teachers are.
Giám khảo
Do you want to be a teacher in the future?
Thí sinh
No because teacher is tough job for me. Umm teacher should teach many people and they don't have enough time to private I.
Giám khảo
Do you have a teacher from your past that you still remember?
Thí sinh
Yes, 20 ton can speak 7 languages. On. He taught me science when I was a junior high school student.
Giám khảo
Are you still in touch with your primary school teachers?
Thí sinh
No actually I moved to other prefecture so I didn't connect them since I changed living area.
Giám khảo
In what way has your favourite teacher helped you?
Thí sinh
I prefer talking with me a lot of things. Umm when I was had, the teacher spoke with me for a long time. It was.
Giám khảo
Do you like your primary school teachers more than your high school teachers?
Thí sinh
I know I prefer high school teachers because they are very kind. For example, when I was third grade, I need to take entering college exam, they kindly told me.
Do you have a favorite teacher?
Điểm: 50.0Gợi ý: 回答は意図が伝わるが、構成と文法、語彙が不正確で冗長です。まず明確なトピック文を一文で述べ(例: "I don't have a single favorite teacher.")、続けて理由を具体的に補足してください。不要な埋め語(umm)を減らし、時制と名詞の単複一致("junior high school student" → "a junior high school student")を正すと自然になります。具体例や短い描写を一つ加えると説得力が増します。
Ví dụ: I don't have a single favorite teacher because I liked many of them for different reasons. For example, my junior high school science teacher was very encouraging and always explained things clearly, so I respected him.
Do you want to be a teacher in the future?
Điểm: 40.0Gợi ý: 意図は伝わるが表現が不自然で文法ミスが多いです。まず簡潔なトピック文("No, I don't.")を述べ、その後理由を2つ程度の短い文で具体化してください。語順("private I" は誤り)や冠詞("a teacher")に注意し、代名詞や不定詞の使い方を正しくしてください。よりフォーマルな語彙("demanding" や "long hours")を使うと効果的です。
Ví dụ: No, I don't. Being a teacher seems too demanding for me because they have long hours and a lot of students to support, which leaves little private time.
Do you have a teacher from your past that you still remember?
Điểm: 45.0Gợi ý: 答えに混乱や不要な情報が含まれています("20 ton" など意味不明なフレーズ)。まず誰を覚えているかを明確に述べ、その人の特徴といつ教えてくれたかを簡潔に説明してください。数字や事実を言うなら文脈で意味が通るようにしましょう。接続詞で文をつなげると流れがよくなります。
Ví dụ: Yes, I remember one teacher clearly. He taught me science in junior high and could speak several languages, which made his lessons very interesting.
Are you still in touch with your primary school teachers?
Điểm: 55.0Gợi ý: 意図は明確ですが、文法と語順を改善すると自然になります。現在形と過去形の混同に注意し、理由をはっきり述べてください("I moved to another prefecture"、"I haven't kept in touch with them" など)。"connect" の代わりに "keep in touch" を使うと自然です。
Ví dụ: No, I haven't kept in touch with them because I moved to another prefecture and we lost contact after I changed my place of residence.
In what way has your favourite teacher helped you?
Điểm: 40.0Gợi ý: 内容が不明瞭で文法的に破綻しています。まず誰が何をしたのかをはっきり述べ("My teacher helped me by talking with me about my problems")、その具体例や結果を一つ付け加えてください。冗長な語("umm")や未完成の文を避け、時制を整えましょう。
Ví dụ: My favourite teacher helped me by listening to my concerns and giving advice. For example, when I was struggling with studies, she spent extra time discussing study plans with me, which improved my grades.
Do you like your primary school teachers more than your high school teachers?
Điểm: 50.0Gợi ý: 意味は伝わるが時制と語順、細部が不自然です。比較の目的を明確にし、理由を一つか二つの正しい時制の文で示してください("I prefer my high school teachers because...")。具体例は現在完了や過去形で整理し、語彙("college entrance exam")を正しく使いましょう。
Ví dụ: I prefer my high school teachers because they were very supportive. For example, when I was in my third year, they helped me prepare for the college entrance exam by explaining difficult topics and giving study tips.
× No, because I love my teachers I have ever met and they are so kind and friendly.
✓ No, because I love all the teachers I have ever met; they are so kind and friendly.
学生は 'my teachers I have ever met' を使っていますが、より自然なのは 'all the teachers I have ever met' や 'the teachers I have met' です。また英文が長くつながっているためセミコロンで文を分けました。 改善策: 'all the' を加え、二つの独立節をセミコロンかピリオドで分けてください。
× Umm, when I was umm junior high school student, my teachers are.
✓ Umm, when I was a junior high school student, my teachers were.
ここでは単数の職業を表すため冠詞 'a' が必要です。また過去の話なので動詞は過去形 'were' にする必要があります。 改善策: 職業や身分を述べる際は 'a/an' を付け、時制に合わせて動詞を一致させてください。
× No because teacher is tough job for me.
✓ No, because teaching is a tough job for me.
'teacher is' はこの文脈で不自然です。関心を述べる際は職業そのもの 'teaching' を主語にするか 'being a teacher' を使います。また 'tough job' の前に冠詞 'a' が必要です。 改善策: 職業を指す場合 'teaching' や 'being a teacher' を使い、可算名詞の前に冠詞を置いてください。
× Umm teacher should teach many people and they don't have enough time to private I.
✓ Umm, teachers have to teach many people and they don't have enough time to give me private lessons.
代名詞の使い方が間違っています。'private I' は誤りで 'private lessons for me' や 'give me private lessons' が適切です。また主語と動詞の一致のため複数形 'teachers' を使いました。 改善策: 'private lessons' のように名詞句を使い、対象は 'me' を用いてください。
× Yes, 20 ton can speak 7 languages.
✓ Yes, my teacher Can (or Mr. Can) can speak seven languages.
元文は '20 ton' とありますが意味が不明でおそらく人名 'Can' か 'Mr. X' の聞き間違いです。数字表記は不自然なので人名を明確にし 'can' の二重使用を避けます。 改善策: 話し手が指す人物の名前を明確にし、数字は単語で書いてください。
× On. He taught me science when I was a junior high school student.
✓ He taught me science when I was a junior high school student.
'On.' は不要で会話のつなぎのようですが文には入れないでください。過去の行為を述べているので 'taught' と過去形は正しいです。 改善策: 不要な間投詞や曖昧な音を削除し、文を明確にしてください。
× No actually I moved to other prefecture so I didn't connect them since I changed living area.
✓ No, actually I moved to another prefecture so I haven't been in contact with them since I changed my residence.
前置詞と動詞の選択が不適切です。'other prefecture' は 'another prefecture'、'didn't connect them' は 'haven't been in contact with them'、'changed living area' は 'changed my residence' や 'moved' が自然です。 改善策: 'in contact with' を連絡の有無に使い、時制は 'since' と共に現在完了を使ってください。
× I prefer talking with me a lot of things.
✓ He preferred talking with me about a lot of things.
主語と目的語が混同されています。話をしたのは 'He'(先生)で 'with me'、話題は 'about a lot of things' が正しいです。また過去の出来事なら過去形にしてください。 改善策: 誰が話したのかを明確にし、'talk about' の形を使ってください。
× Umm when I was had, the teacher spoke with me for a long time.
✓ Umm, when I was young, the teacher spoke with me for a long time.
'when I was had' は意味不明でおそらく 'when I was young' のミスです。過去の状況を述べるため過去形 'spoke' は適切です。 改善策: 年齢や時期を表す表現を正しく使い、意味が伝わる語を選んでください。
× It was.
✓ It was very helpful.
不完全な文で情報が欠けています。'It was' の後に形容詞や名詞を加えて何が 'it' なのかを説明する必要があります。 改善策: 感想を述べる場合は 'It was + adjective' の形で続けてください。
× I know I prefer high school teachers because they are very kind.
✓ I think I prefer my high school teachers because they were very kind.
'I know' は断定的すぎて不自然な場合があるため 'I think' が適切です。また比較して過去の経験を述べるなら 'were' の方が良いです。 改善策: 意見表現には 'I think' を使い、比較する期間に応じて時制を合わせてください。
× For example, when I was third grade, I need to take entering college exam, they kindly told me.
✓ For example, when I was in third grade, I needed to take the college entrance exam; they kindly helped me.
'when I was third grade' には 'in' が必要です。未来や義務を示す 'need' は過去の文脈なので過去形 'needed' にし、'entering college exam' は自然な英語で 'college entrance exam' と言います。' 改善策: 年齢や学年を表すときは 'in + grade' を使い、試験名は一般的な表現に直し、動詞の時制を一致させてください。