Teachers— Part 1 Báo cáo

Gợi ý: 문법과 단어 선택을 정확하게 고치고 문장을 더 자연스럽고 간결하게 만드세요. 예를 들어 ‘favorite picture’는 문맥상 틀렸고 ‘science teacher’ 앞에 관사를 넣어야 하며 시제와 동사 형태 일치를 확인하세요. 또한 주제문 뒤에 한두 문장으로 이유를 구체적으로 덧붙이되 연결어(for example, because 등)를 사용해 논리적으로 이어가세요.

Ví dụ: Yes, I have a favorite teacher. When I was in high school my favorite teacher was a science teacher because he was very kind to every student and explained lessons clearly, so I could understand the material easily.

Gợi ý: 문장을 끝까지 완성하고 불필요한 반복을 줄이세요. 이유를 하나로 정리하고 예시를 자연스럽게 연결하세요. 또한 'teach something'과 같은 모호한 표현 대신 구체적인 과목 또는 활동을 사용하세요. 연결어(for example, because, so) 사용을 적절히 하고 문장 수는 3~4문장으로 제한하세요.

Ví dụ: Yes, I want to be a teacher in the future because I enjoy working with children and explaining concepts. For example, I currently tutor students in math and I find it rewarding when they understand a difficult problem.

Gợi ý: 문법 오류(주어-동사 일치, 시제, 어순)를 고치고 의미가 모호한 표현을 구체화하세요. ‘mass weakness’는 잘못된 표현이므로 ‘weakness in math’로 바꾸고, 이유를 하나로 명확히 설명하세요. 또한 문장 연결을 위해 and 또는 because 같은 연결어를 사용하세요.

Ví dụ: Yes, I do. I still remember my math teacher because he helped me overcome my weakness in math. He explained concepts patiently and gave me extra practice, so my grades improved.

Gợi ý: 문장을 더 자연스럽고 정확하게 재구성하세요. ‘after I graduate the mid middle school’ 같은 표현은 어색하므로 ‘after I finished middle school’로 고치고, 부정과 이유 제시를 간결하게 정리하세요. 과거 시제와 현재 시제 혼용을 피하고 연결어(so, because)를 한 번만 사용해 간결하게 만드세요.

Ví dụ: No, I'm not. After I finished middle school I lost contact with my primary school teachers because I was very busy studying, so I couldn't keep in touch.

Gợi ý: 어휘 선택과 표현을 정확히 고치세요. ‘sobbing mathematic problems’는 잘못된 표현이며 ‘solving mathematical problems’가 맞습니다. ‘see the problems other perspective’는 ‘look at problems from a different perspective’로 고치고, 조언의 구체적 방법(예: study techniques, practice problems)을 덧붙여 주세요.

Ví dụ: When I was in high school I was afraid of solving mathematical problems, but my favorite teacher helped me to look at problems from a different perspective and advised me on study techniques, such as breaking problems into smaller steps and practicing regularly.

Gợi ý: 문장의 대상과 시제를, 그리고 단어 선택을 명확히 하세요. ‘primary schools were very good’는 모호하고 ‘I can't memorize them’도 부자연스럽습니다. 비교 질문에 직접 답하는 주제문을 먼저 말한 뒤, 이유를 두세 문장으로 구체적으로 설명하세요. ‘students’ 대신 ‘teachers’로 바꿔야 합니다.

Ví dụ: Not really. I remember more from high school because my high school teachers helped me a lot to get into college and gave me practical advice when I was struggling with my studies.

× When I was in high school, my favorite teacher was science teacher and he was very nice to every student and he teaches very well, so I can understand very well.

✓ When I was in high school, my favorite teacher was my science teacher; he was very nice to every student and he taught very well, so I could understand him easily.

문법 오류: 관사 누락과 시제 불일치가 있음. 'science teacher' 앞에는 관사 'my' 또는 'a'가 필요하며, 사건이 과거에 발생했으므로 동사들을 과거형으로 맞춰야 함. 'teaches'→'taught', 'can understand'→'could understand', 그리고 문장 흐름을 명확히 하기 위해 세미콜론 또는 마침표로 분리하는 것을 권장함.

× Yes, I want to be a teacher in the future because I like children and I like to teach something For example, nowadays I teach some math problems to my personal tutoring students, so I.

✓ Yes, I want to be a teacher in the future because I like children and I like teaching. For example, nowadays I teach some math to my private tutoring students, so I gain teaching experience.

문법 오류: 동명사/목적어 형태 및 명사 선택과 문장 완성 문제. 'like to teach something'은 어색하므로 'like teaching' 또는 'like to teach'가 자연스럽고, 'personal tutoring students'는 'private tutoring students' 또는 'my tutees'가 더 적절함. 또한 문장이 중간에 끊겼으므로 끝까지 완성해야 함.

× Yes, I have a teacher who is still remember he was my math teacher I like him because he helps me to overcome mass weakness he.

✓ Yes, I remember a teacher from my past; he was my math teacher. I liked him because he helped me overcome my weakness in math.

문법 오류: 대명사와 순서 문제 및 시제 불일치. 'who is still remember'는 잘못된 구조로 'I remember a teacher'로 고쳐야 하며, 과거 경험을 말하므로 과거형 'liked'와 'helped'를 사용해야 함. 'mass weakness'는 오타로 'math weakness' 또는 'weakness in math'로 수정해야 하고, 문장을 명확히 나누어야 함.

× No because after I graduate the mid middle school I did not contact with them and because I was actually very busy doing my studying so I couldn't contact to them.

✓ No. After I graduated from middle school I did not contact them because I was very busy with my studies, so I couldn't keep in touch.

문법 오류: 시제와 전치사 사용 문제. 'graduate'는 과거 시제 'graduated'로 바꿔야 하고 'graduate from middle school'이 올바른 표현임. 'did not contact with them'과 'couldn't contact to them'은 잘못된 전치사 사용으로, 'contact them' 또는 'keep in touch with them'을 사용해야 함. 또한 문장 구조를 간결하게 정리함.

× When I was high school I was afraid of sobbing mathematic problems, but my favorite teacher helped me to see the problems other perspective and he advised me how to study mathematics.

✓ When I was in high school I was afraid of solving math problems, but my favorite teacher helped me see the problems from another perspective and he advised me on how to study mathematics.

문법 오류: 전치사와 단어 선택 문제. 'in high school'이 올바르고 'sobbing mathematic problems'는 오타로 'solving math problems'로 수정해야 함. 'see the problems other perspective'는 전치사와 관용구를 사용해 'see the problems from another perspective'로 고쳐야 하며, 'advised me how to'는 'advised me on how to'가 더 자연스러움.

× Not really because primary schools were very good but I can't memorize them but my high school students helped me a lot to go to the college and they also give me some advice when I was struggling with my.

✓ Not really. My primary school teachers were nice but I can't remember them well. My high school teachers helped me a lot to get into college and they also gave me advice when I was struggling.

문법 오류: 대명사, 시제 및 단어 선택 문제. 'primary schools were very good'는 'primary school teachers were nice'가 적절하고, 'can't memorize them'은 'can't remember them'으로 바꿔야 함. 'high school students'는 'high school teachers'로 정정해야 하며, 과거 상황을 말하므로 'gave' 등 과거형을 사용해야 함. 문장은 끝까지 완성되어야 함.