Tidiness— Part 1 Báo cáo

Gợi ý: Concise and clear topic sentence is present but reduce hesitation and redundancy. Improve grammatical accuracy (e.g., tense consistency, plural/singular forms) and use linking words to make the answer more coherent. Aim for 2–4 sentences, remove filler words (uh, umm), and vary vocabulary (comfortable → relaxed, concentrate → focus).

Ví dụ: Yes, I do. Keeping my space tidy helps me feel relaxed and lets me focus on my work without distractions. As a result, I can complete tasks more efficiently.

Gợi ý: Good structure with a clear answer and relevant supporting detail (mother’s influence). Remove hesitations and tighten sentences. Use past tense consistently and combine ideas with linking words (for example, because/so) to improve fluency and cohesion.

Ví dụ: Yes, I did. My mother was very tidy and taught me to clean my room regularly because she believed it helped me study better. Consequently, I developed the habit of tidying up from a young age.

Gợi ý: Clear and practical explanation with good organization. Improve concision by avoiding repetition (‘their own section’ twice) and use precise verbs (replace ‘put them in their the original position’ with ‘return them to their designated spots’). Add a linking phrase to explain the result or benefit.

Ví dụ: I divide my desk into sections for books, stationery and electronics, and I always return items to their designated spots. This system saves time and prevents clutter, so I can start working quickly.

Gợi ý: Good direct opinion and reasons given. Remove filler words and correct small errors (e.g., 'no clutter around' → 'no clutter around us' or 'there is no clutter'). Use linking words (because, therefore) and add a concise example or consequence to strengthen the answer.

Ví dụ: Yes, I think it's necessary because a tidy environment reduces distractions and helps you focus. For example, when my desk is neat I finish tasks faster and with fewer mistakes.

× In fact, uh, keeping my space tidy allowed me to feel comfortable and I can concentrate on my work when they're not things to distract me, I feel it more easy to, uh, focus on the things that I'm doing and I can work more effectively.

✓ In fact, keeping my space tidy allows me to feel comfortable and I can concentrate on my work when there are no things to distract me; I find it easier to focus on what I'm doing and I can work more effectively.

The original mixes past and present incorrectly and uses awkward forms. 'Allowed' (past) conflicts with general present habit; use present simple 'allows'. 'They're not things' is ungrammatical; use 'there are no things' or better 'there is nothing' or 'no distractions'. 'I feel it more easy to' is incorrect word order and collocation; use 'I find it easier to'. Suggestion: keep tense consistent for habitual statements (present simple) and use natural collocations (find it easier, no distractions).

× She, when I was a child, she taught me, uh, to keep my space tidy.

✓ When I was a child, she taught me to keep my space tidy.

The sentence repeats the subject 'she' unnecessarily and has awkward word order. Also, the embedded clause should not repeat the pronoun. Suggestion: remove the redundant subject and place the time phrase at the start for clarity: 'When I was a child, she taught me...'.

× She told me to clean up everything, umm, so that I can, uh, work and study more effectively.

✓ She told me to clean up everything so that I could work and study more effectively.

Reported speech about past advice should use past ability/modal 'could' instead of present 'can'. Use past tense sequence of tenses: 'told' -> 'could'. Suggestion: shift modals into the past in reported speech for consistency.

× First of all, I have different sections for different kinds of things. I try to put them in their own section so that they are in their own designated area and whenever I finish using anything I try to put them in their the original position so I can save time finding them.

✓ First of all, I have different sections for different kinds of things. I try to put each item in its own section so that it is in its designated area, and whenever I finish using anything I try to put it back in its original position so I can save time finding it.

Pronoun agreement and reference are incorrect: 'them' refers to singular 'anything' and 'their' refers to singular 'item'. Use 'each item' with 'its' or use plural consistently. Also 'in their the original position' has an extra article. Suggestion: match singular/plural between nouns and pronouns and avoid redundant articles.

× When umm there are no clutter around, we are not distracted by anything and we can study and work more effectively.

✓ When there is no clutter around, we are not distracted by anything and we can study and work more effectively.

'Clutter' is an uncountable noun and requires singular 'there is' not 'there are'. Use 'no clutter' rather than 'no clutterS'. Suggestion: match 'there be' with noun countability: use 'there is no clutter'.