Tidiness— Part 1 Báo cáo

Gợi ý: Improve clarity, grammar and natural phrasing. Start with a clear topic sentence that directly answers the question, then give 1–2 specific supporting details using correct grammar and linking words. Avoid unclear phrases (e.g., “I can bear that”, “dusk”) and redundant lists. Keep it under five sentences.

Ví dụ: Yes, I do. I prefer to keep my room clean because I feel more relaxed and focused in an orderly environment. For example, I tidy my bed and desk every morning and put my clothes back in the drawer so I can find things quickly.

Gợi ý: Make tense usage consistent and use more natural verbs. Begin with a direct answer about the past, then explain how it changed with a clear linking word. Replace awkward phrases like “cultivate myself” with natural expressions (e.g., “I learned to be tidier”).

Ví dụ: Not really — I used to be quite messy as a child. However, after my mother encouraged me to tidy up regularly, I gradually learned to be more organized, and now I always keep my room neat.

Gợi ý: Provide a clearer, structured response: state how you usually manage the study space, then give a specific example. Fix grammar and awkward expressions (“keep things stay messy,” “follow up my pace”). Explain reasons concisely and use linking words like “however” or “for example.”

Ví dụ: My study area is usually less tidy than my bedroom because I work with many documents. For example, I often leave papers on my desk during busy periods, but I clear them away at the end of the week so I can focus better.

Gợi ý: Clarify meaning and correct word choice (“tiny people” is incorrect). Start with a clear opinion, then support it with reasons and an example. Use precise vocabulary (e.g., “not essential for everyone,” “organized people”) and avoid vague references to studies without detail.

Ví dụ: I don’t think tidiness is essential for everyone because some people work well in a messy environment. However, being organized usually helps people save time and reduce stress; for instance, I find I finish tasks faster when my desk is clear.

× I can bear that.

✓ I can't stand that.

The student used 'bear' incorrectly in this context. Native speakers say 'can't stand' to express strong dislike. This is a vocabulary/phrase choice issue; use 'can't stand' to convey inability to tolerate something.

× My thing in my room that full of dusk, I can stand on it anymore.

✓ The things in my room that are full of dust, I can't stand anymore.

This sentence has incorrect word order, verb form, and vocabulary ('dusk' vs 'dust'). Use plural 'things' for multiple items, 'that are full of dust' to describe them, and 'can't stand anymore' to show intolerance. Rearrange to subject + relative clause + main clause.

× I should tidy up everything every day, including my bag, sheets, my drawer, my desk, any furniture.

✓ I should tidy up everything every day, including my bag, sheets, drawer, desk, and other furniture.

The sentence mostly correct but has minor article/list issues and a repetitive possessive. Remove 'my' before each item for natural rhythm and add 'and' before the last item. 'Any furniture' is unnatural; use 'other furniture'.

× I was a messy and naughty child, but since my mom urged me to tidy up my room, I cultivate myself to be a tidier person.

✓ I was a messy and naughty child, but since my mom urged me to tidy my room, I have developed into a tidier person.

Use present perfect 'have developed' for a change from past to present. 'Tidy up' can be 'tidy' in this context, and 'cultivate myself' is unnatural; use 'have developed into' or 'became'.

× So now I would organize everything in my room.

✓ So now I organize everything in my room.

'Would' here is incorrect; use simple present 'organize' to state a habitual action.

× Compared to my bedroom, my study space is always messier than my room because I want to keep things stay messy so that I can follow up my pace.

✓ Compared to my bedroom, my study space is always messier because I like to keep things messy so that I can keep up with my pace.

Redundant comparison 'compared to' and 'than' both used; use one construction. 'Keep things stay messy' is ungrammatical; use 'keep things messy'. 'Follow up my pace' is incorrect; use 'keep up with my pace' or 'keep up my pace'.

× Last night, for example, like my desktop, I just randomly put the file.

✓ Last night, for example, I just randomly put the files on my desktop.

Plural 'files' is likely; word order needed: place object on location. 'Like my desktop' was misplaced; specify 'on my desktop'.

× I don't think being tidy is essential for everyone, as long as someone can complete as efficiently and effectively.

✓ I don't think being tidy is essential for everyone, as long as someone can complete tasks efficiently and effectively.

Missing object after 'complete' (complete what?). Add 'tasks'. Also 'as' before adverbs is unnecessary; use 'efficiently and effectively'.

× However, being organised can be beneficial because it often helps people save time and reduce stress.

✓ However, being organized can be beneficial because it often helps people save time and reduce stress.

Mainly a spelling variant: 'organised' (British) or 'organized' (American). Either is acceptable; keep consistent spelling. Sentence is otherwise correct.

× Some studies even suggest that tiny people tend to perform better on certain tasks.

✓ Some studies even suggest that tidy people tend to perform better on certain tasks.

The student wrote 'tiny' (meaning very small) instead of 'tidy' (neat). This is a word choice error; replace with 'tidy' to make sense.