Tidiness— Part 1 Báo cáo

Gợi ý: Câu trả lời nên rõ ràng, tự nhiên và ngắn gọn (tối đa 5 câu). Tránh ngôn ngữ thân mật quá mức (ví dụ “what the heck”) và lỗi ngữ pháp. Nên mở đầu bằng câu chủ đề trực tiếp (ví dụ: “Yes, I like to keep things tidy.”), sau đó nêu một hoặc hai lý do cụ thể, dùng liên từ để mạch lạc, và kết thúc bằng kết luận ngắn. Sửa lỗi thì giờ và giới từ (e.g., “these days”, “because I don’t have time”).

Ví dụ: Yes, I like to keep things tidy. However, these days my schedule is very busy with work and study, so I often struggle to clean my room. Because of that, I sometimes leave tasks like making the bed until the weekend.

Gợi ý: Câu trả lời có chủ đề rõ ràng nhưng quá dài và lặp từ (“early morning” lặp). Nên rút gọn, dùng thì quá khứ đơn nhất quán và thêm một chi tiết cụ thể để làm câu trả lời có sức thuyết phục hơn. Dùng liên từ như “so” hoặc “because” hợp lý để nối ý.

Ví dụ: Yes, I used to keep my room tidy as a child. I always made my bed because waking up to a neat room made me feel happy and proud, and I liked showing it to my parents.

Gợi ý: Câu trả lời mô tả hành động cụ thể nhưng có nhiều lỗi ngữ pháp và trật tự từ. Nên dùng câu có cấu trúc rõ ràng, phân chia các hành động bằng các động từ ở thì hiện tại đơn, và dùng từ vựng chính xác (e.g., “throw away trash”, “wipe the desk”, “organise my files”). Tránh lặp từ như “and I” quá nhiều.

Ví dụ: I usually tidy my workspace before I go home. I throw away any trash, wipe the desk with a cloth, and organise my files neatly on the shelf.

Gợi ý: Ý chính rõ nhưng câu dài, lặp và kết thúc không hoàn chỉnh. Nên bắt đầu bằng câu chủ đề trực tiếp (ví dụ: “I think being tidy is important, but it depends on the situation.”), rồi nêu hai ý ngắn: khi có thời gian thì nên dọn dẹp; khi bận thì có thể ưu tiên công việc. Kết luận ngắn gọn. Sửa lỗi ngữ pháp và tránh lặp từ (“for example”).

Ví dụ: I think being tidy is important, but it depends on the situation. When I have free time I make an effort to clean my room and workspace, but when I'm very busy I prioritise work and leave less important tasks for later.

× Totally 100% yes. However what the heck is schedule these day from working and study in in our life? It's very hard for me to clean up my house or my room, make my bed tidy because no time for being myself even that's why.

✓ Totally, 100% yes. However, what the heck is the schedule these days from working and studying in our life? It's very hard for me to clean up my house or my room and make my bed tidy because I have no time for myself.

Multiple errors: 'these day' should be 'these days' (plural) so matches Grammar Problem Type 1: Singular and plural issue; 'study' following 'working and' needs gerund 'studying' — grammar type 8: Verb + -ing form; missing article before 'schedule' — grammar type 17: Incorrect use of the definite article; 'no time for being myself' is unidiomatic and should be 'no time for myself' — grammar type 13: Incorrect use of adjectives or adverbs. Suggested improvement: check noun plurality, use gerunds after verbs like 'working and studying', include articles before specific nouns, and use natural English phrases like 'no time for myself'.

× When I was a kid, I loved to make my bed tidily because when I woke up early, early morning and I feel very happy with the tidy bedroom and show that to my mom and my dad and I were very proud of myself.

✓ When I was a kid, I loved to make my bed tidily because when I woke up early in the morning I felt very happy with the tidy bedroom and showed it to my mom and dad; I was very proud of myself.

Errors: tense inconsistency — 'I feel' should be past 'I felt' (Grammar Problem Type 6: Present tense issue and 5: Past tense issue); redundant 'early, early morning' should be 'early in the morning' (Grammar Problem Type 11: Incorrect use of prepositions); 'show that to my mom and my dad' is awkward; use 'showed it to my mom and dad' (Grammar Problem Type 26: Sentence structure errors). Suggestion: keep past-tense consistently when describing past habits, use standard prepositional phrase 'in the morning', and use concise pronoun references 'it' for the bedroom.

× Before going home I always clean up my working space like put the trash in the garbage cans and use the tissue and wipe my tables, my desk and I clean and I tidy up the my file and put it.

✓ Before going home, I always clean up my workspace: I put the trash in the garbage can, use a tissue to wipe my table and desk, and tidy up my files.

Subject-verb agreement and sentence structure problems: 'I always clean' is acceptable but the list that follows is ungrammatical and repetitive (Grammar Problem Type 27: Subject-verb agreement errors and 26: Sentence structure errors). 'Garbage cans' can be singular 'garbage can' in many contexts (Grammar Problem Type 1: Singular and plural issue). 'use the tissue' should be 'use a tissue' (Grammar Problem Type 22: Article errors). 'wipe my tables, my desk' is redundant — use 'table and desk' or 'table and desk' (Grammar Problem Type 18: Incorrect order of adjectives not directly but ordering). Suggestion: simplify lists, use articles correctly, and keep parallel structure in lists (use verbs in same form).

× In my opinion, it depends on the situation that we accept. For example, when I'm free and I can spend most of the time cleaning up my working space or my bedrooms for example. However, when I'm busy with working and studying, I don't have enough time to do that and.

✓ In my opinion, it depends on the situation. For example, when I'm free I can spend most of my time cleaning my workspace or my bedroom. However, when I'm busy with work and study, I don't have enough time to do that.

Problems: sentence fragments and tense/word choice issues. 'depends on the situation that we accept' is unnatural and causes sentence structure error (Grammar Problem Type 26). 'spend most of the time' should be 'spend most of my time' (Grammar Problem Type 11: Incorrect use of prepositions/possessives). 'working and studying' as nouns is awkward; use 'work and study' (Grammar Problem Type 13: Incorrect use of adjectives or adverbs). The final 'and.' is a sentence fragment. Suggestion: write complete sentences, use possessive pronouns for time expressions, and use concise noun forms 'work and study' when referring to activities.