Tidiness— Part 1 Báo cáo

Gợi ý: Be more concise and organize your answer: start with a clear topic sentence, give one or two concise reasons with specific details, and avoid fillers like 'you know' and repetition. Use a linking word to connect reason and result.

Ví dụ: Yes, I like to keep things tidy. For example, when my home is organized I can find things quickly and I feel less stressed, which helps me concentrate on work and relax in the evenings.

Gợi ý: Answer directly then give a brief explanation with specific details. Remove fillers ('uh', 'umm') and correct tense/grammar (use 'used to' and past tense verbs). Keep it to two or three sentences.

Ví dụ: Not really — my mother used to clean my room when I was a child. I focused on school and attended sports clubs every day, so I rarely had time or responsibility for tidying.

Gợi ý: Make your answer clearer and more specific: state a simple routine, use correct vocabulary (e.g., 'desk' not 'deck'), and include one or two concrete actions. Use linking words to show sequence.

Ví dụ: I keep my study space tidy by clearing my desk at the end of each day. For instance, I put books on the shelf, store stationery in a pen holder, and put away any papers so the next morning I can start work immediately.

Gợi ý: Begin with a clear opinion, use correct word choice ('tidy' not 'diet'), and support with a specific reason and short result. Avoid repeating the same idea; one clear cause and one effect is enough.

Ví dụ: Yes, I believe being tidy is important because an orderly environment helps calm my mind. As a result, I can focus better and feel more peaceful at home.

× Yes, I do like to keep things tidy because I feel much better in my mind because I, you know, when we have a mess in my home, I feel stressful and I feel like I have a lot of mess.

✓ Yes, I do like to keep things tidy because I feel much better mentally; when there is a mess in my home, I feel stressed and that makes me feel overwhelmed.

Problems: incorrect adjective/adverb usage and wording. 'much better in my mind' is awkward; use 'much better mentally' (13). 'I feel stressful' is wrong because 'stressful' describes a situation, not a feeling; use 'I feel stressed' (13). 'I feel like I have a lot of mess' is unnatural; use 'I feel overwhelmed' or 'there is a lot of mess' (6/13). Suggestion: use appropriate adjectives for feelings ('stressed', 'overwhelmed') and correct adverb/adjective forms.

× Uh, well when I was a child my mom cleaned my room so I just focus in my uh, school and homework.

✓ Uh, well when I was a child my mom cleaned my room so I just focused on my school and homework.

Problems: verb tense and preposition. 'just focus' should be past tense 'just focused' to match 'when I was a child' (5). 'focus in' is incorrect preposition; use 'focus on' (11). Suggestion: match verb tense to time frame and use correct prepositions.

× Umm and I went to sports clubs every day so I never clean my room.

✓ Umm, and I went to sports clubs every day so I never cleaned my room.

Problem: tense inconsistency. 'went' is past; 'never clean' should be past 'never cleaned' to match (5). Suggestion: keep past events in past tense.

× I try to keep my studio space tidy by clearing my decks and the end of each day bearing away books and stationery into design and rhymes or organized to buy clothes there.

✓ I try to keep my studio space tidy by clearing my desk at the end of each day, putting away books and stationery, and organizing my clothes.

Problems: unclear word choice and sentence structure (26). 'clearing my decks' likely should be 'clearing my desk' (13/22). 'and the end of each day bearing away' is ungrammatical; use 'at the end of each day, putting away' (6/26). 'into design and rhymes or organized to buy clothes there' is nonsensical; corrected to 'and organizing my clothes' to convey likely meaning (26). Suggestion: simplify actions into clear parallel items and use correct nouns ('desk') and gerunds ('putting away').

× Absolutely, the diet is really important because you can calm your mind and you can stay relaxed in your space so you have feel completely peaceful.

✓ Absolutely, tidiness is really important because it can calm your mind and help you stay relaxed in your space, so you can feel completely peaceful.

Problems: word choice and articles. 'the diet' is wrong word; likely 'tidiness' or 'being tidy' (13). 'you have feel' is ungrammatical; use 'you can feel' (26). Also use 'it can calm your mind' to refer to tidiness (17/26). Suggestion: use correct noun 'tidiness' and modal 'can' consistently, and correct verb phrase 'can feel'.