Parks— Part 1 Báo cáo

Gợi ý: Be more fluent and concise: start with a clear topic sentence, reduce hesitations, use past simple consistently, and add one or two specific details. Use linking words (for example, 'because' or 'and') correctly and avoid repeating phrases.

Ví dụ: Yes, I loved going to parks as a child because many of my neighbourhood friends gathered there. We often played football and cricket together, and sometimes had picnics on the grass, which made those afternoons very memorable.

Gợi ý: Reduce hesitations and avoid contradictory fillers (e.g. 'because, but'). Begin with a direct topic sentence, then give two clear reasons linked with connectors like 'because' and 'and'. Be specific about activities and timing.

Ví dụ: Yes, I still enjoy going to parks, especially in the evening, because I like watching the sunset and the lighting is peaceful. I also meet friends there frequently, so we can walk together or sit and chat on a bench.

Gợi ý: Use correct conditional and plural forms, avoid repetition, and give specific benefits with linking phrases. Keep answers concise (max 4–5 sentences) and vary vocabulary (e.g. 'green spaces', 'recreation', 'exercise').

Ví dụ: Yes, I would like to see more parks in my city because additional green spaces would give people a place to relax and exercise. They would also improve air quality and provide outdoor areas for families to meet and children to play.

Gợi ý: Be specific and avoid vague wording. Give one clear plan or reason and provide a concrete detail about the park (location, features, activities). Remove hesitations and fix grammar (e.g. 'Lions Lake' and 'surroundings').

Ví dụ: I'm not certain about many parks, but I would like to visit Lions Lake because I enjoy lakeside scenery. I heard the park has walking trails and a viewing platform, so I could walk around the lake and take photos of the wildlife.

× Uh, yes, uh, I like to go to the park as a child because, uh, there will be a lot of my childhood friends who came to the park and we play together.

✓ Uh, yes, I liked going to the park as a child because many of my childhood friends came to the park and we played together.

The question asks about past habit 'as a child', so past tense should be used. 'I like' is present tense; change to 'I liked'. 'There will be' is incorrect for past—use 'there were' or restructure to 'many of my childhood friends came'. 'Play' should be past 'played'. Use past simple for repeated past actions.

× Uh, yes, I still like to go to the park because, uh, but I prefer to, uh, go to the park in the evening because I love to watch the sunset and also there are so many my friends coming to the park so we can meet and chat over there.

✓ Uh, yes, I still like going to the park, but I prefer to go in the evening because I love watching the sunset and many of my friends come to the park so we can meet and chat there.

Avoid tense and wording errors: 'still like to go' is acceptable but 'still like going' is more natural. Remove redundant 'because, uh, but'—use 'but'. 'Love to watch' -> 'love watching' is natural. 'There are so many my friends coming' is ungrammatical; use 'many of my friends come' (present simple for habitual action). 'Over there' can be simplified to 'there'.

× Ah, yes, I would love to see more parks in my city because if there will be a more park, then then people come and be in a relaxing and peaceful surrounding for a while and they also can see the sunset and also, uh, do some exercise over there.

✓ Ah, yes, I would love to see more parks in my city because if there were more parks, people could come and relax in peaceful surroundings for a while; they could also see the sunset and exercise there.

'If there will be a more park' is ungrammatical: for hypothetical/unreal situations use 'if there were' or for general possibility 'if there are'. Also 'a more park' should be 'more parks'. 'People come and be in a relaxing and peaceful surrounding' uses incorrect verb forms and articles—use 'people could come and relax in peaceful surroundings'. Use conditional/modal 'could' for ability/possibility.

× Uh, I'm not sure, but I would love to go to the Lions lake. Uh, because, uh, as a person, I, I love the, the lake and in the lions part, there is a surround.

✓ I'm not sure, but I would love to go to the Lion's Lake because I love the lake, and around the lake there is a nice area to walk.

Proper names often need correct articles and punctuation: 'Lions lake' should be 'Lion's Lake' (or 'Lions' Lake' depending on official name). 'As a person' is unnecessary. 'I, I love the, the lake' has repetitions—reduce to 'I love the lake'. 'In the lions part, there is a surround' is ungrammatical; use 'around the lake there is a nice area' or 'the lake is surrounded by...'. Also 'surround' is a verb; the correct noun is 'surroundings' or 'surroundings'/'area'.