Part 1
Giám khảo
Did you like going to parks as a child?
Thí sinh
Yes, I like when I was a child. I always go to park with my family members and parents. We can have a picnic in the park and with my family members play badminton and so on.
Giám khảo
Do you still like going to parks now?
Thí sinh
Yes, I like parks, Go to parks can make me feel very comfortable and we can breathe fresh air in there and let me very relax.
Giám khảo
Would you like to see more parks in your city?
Thí sinh
Yes, Earth City have 4-3 or five or four parks. We can go there, ride bikes and breathe fresh air and relax ourselves.
Giám khảo
Are there any parks you want to go to in the future?
Thí sinh
I want to be Beijing parks and see who parks. I want to go there, have a visit and travel around the parks.
Did you like going to parks as a child?
Điểm: 58.0Gợi ý: 回答要注意时态和语法,句子要更自然、简洁,并用连接词组织信息。可以先给出主题句,再提供具体细节。避免冗余的重复词,如“family members”和“parents”重复表达。
Ví dụ: Yes, I loved going to parks as a child. I often went there with my parents and siblings, where we had picnics and played badminton together, which was always a lot of fun.
Do you still like going to parks now?
Điểm: 62.0Gợi ý: 注意语法结构和连贯性,使用连词或从句使句子更流畅。把感受具体化并用正确的形容词和动词形式。避免中文式直译如“let me very relax”。
Ví dụ: Yes, I still enjoy going to parks because they make me feel relaxed and comfortable; I can breathe fresh air and get away from the noise of the city.
Would you like to see more parks in your city?
Điểm: 55.0Gợi ý: 回答要准确表达数字和事实,避免混乱。先给出明确观点,然后用两到三条具体理由支持,并用连接词衔接。注意单复数和主谓一致。
Ví dụ: Yes, I would like to see more parks in my city. Currently there are only a few, so adding more would give people more places to ride bikes, relax, and enjoy fresh air.
Are there any parks you want to go to in the future?
Điểm: 50.0Gợi ý: 回答要明确具体,比如说出想去的公园或城市名称,并说明原因。注意句子结构和词汇搭配(如“visit Beijing parks”而不是“I want to be Beijing parks”)。避免模糊或错误的表达。
Ví dụ: I would like to visit the parks in Beijing in the future, such as the Summer Palace and Beihai Park, because they have beautiful gardens and interesting historical sites to explore.
× Yes, I like when I was a child.
✓ Yes, I liked it when I was a child.
原句时态混用:主句表达过去喜好,应使用过去时“liked”,从句“when I was a child”已是过去时,两部分时态需一致。建议:表示过去习惯或喜好时将动词用过去式(liked)。
× I always go to park with my family members and parents.
✓ I always went to the park with my family.
原句时态与冠词使用不当:描述过去习惯应使用过去时“went”;“park”前需定冠词“the”;“family members and parents”重复且冗长,使用“family”更自然。建议:过去习惯用过去式,名词前根据特指加定冠词。
× We can have a picnic in the park and with my family members play badminton and so on.
✓ We could have picnics in the park and play badminton with my family.
原句结构混乱:并列动作时应保持平行结构,且过去习惯用过去式或情态动词过去形式。将“have a picnic”改为复数或一般表达“have picnics”,并把“play badminton”放在并列位置,同时把“with my family members”放在动作后。建议:保持并列动词形式一致,合理放置介词短语。
× Yes, I like parks, Go to parks can make me feel very comfortable and we can breathe fresh air in there and let me very relax.
✓ Yes, I like parks. Going to parks makes me feel very comfortable; we can breathe fresh air there and I feel very relaxed.
原句问题多:句子断句与动词形式错误。“Go to parks”作为主语应用动名词“Going to parks”。主语与动词需主谓一致,用“makes”。“let me very relax”不符合英语表达,改为“I feel very relaxed”。“in there”冗余,改为“there”。建议:使用动名词作主语,确保主谓一致,使用固定表达“feel relaxed”。
× Yes, Earth City have 4-3 or five or four parks.
✓ Yes, Earth City has about three to five parks.
原句主谓不一致且数字表达混乱:单数地点“Earth City”应配单数动词“has”。“4-3 or five or four”不规范,改为“about three to five”。建议:主语为单数时动词用单数形式,数字范围用“about three to five”或“between three and five”。
× We can go there, ride bikes and breathe fresh air and relax ourselves.
✓ We can go there, ride bikes, breathe fresh air, and relax.
原句最后“relax ourselves”冗余且风格不自然,简单用“relax”即可。并列动作应用一致的动词原形,注意逗号分隔。建议:并列动词保持形式一致,避免不必要的反身代词。
× I want to be Beijing parks and see who parks.
✓ I want to visit Beijing's parks and see their sights.
原句语序和词汇使用错误:“want to be Beijing parks”错误使用“be”。应使用“visit Beijing's parks”。“see who parks”毫无意义,推断为“see the sights”或“see what the parks are like”,改为“see their sights”。建议:注意动词选择(visit而不是be),表达要具体明确。
× I want to go there, have a visit and travel around the parks.
✓ I want to go there, visit them, and travel around the parks.
原句“have a visit”虽然可理解,但不如“visit them”简洁自然。并列动词应保持形式一致。建议:使用更自然的动词短语并保持并列结构一致。