Parks— Part 1 Báo cáo

Gợi ý: Be direct and accurate: correct word choice (parks, not pubs), reduce hesitations, and make a clear topic sentence followed by one or two supporting details. Use linking words like "because" or "and" to connect ideas and avoid redundancy.

Ví dụ: Yes, I loved going to parks as a child because I enjoyed walking and playing games with my friends. It was also very relaxing, and I have fond memories of spending long afternoons there.

Gợi ý: Improve fluency and sentence structure: remove self-corrections, give a clear routine and a reason. Use concise linking phrases like "usually" or "often" and provide specific details (when, who, what you do).

Ví dụ: Yes, I still enjoy going to parks. Usually I go after work or on weekends with my best friend; we walk around the lake so we can chat and get some exercise.

Gợi ý: Be more concise and grammatical: state your opinion clearly, give a specific reason and a short consequence or example. Avoid filler words and repetition (e.g., "we always have to go to the same parks").

Ví dụ: Yes, I would like more parks in my city because there are very few green spaces, so my friends and I often crowd the same parks. If the government built more parks, people would have better places to relax and exercise.

Gợi ý: Clarify and tighten your response: mention the park directly, give specific reasons and avoid vague words like "apparently" and extra hesitations. Use present or future tense consistently when expressing desire.

Ví dụ: Yes, I would love to visit Central Park in New York because it is very large and offers many different areas to explore. I imagine strolling around with a coffee, enjoying the scenery and the varied sights.

× Yes, I used to love to go to pubs because I really liked umm walk or just play with my friends.

✓ Yes, I used to love going to parks because I really liked walking or just playing with my friends.

The verbs 'walk' and 'play' follow 'liked', so they should be in the -ing form (gerund). Also 'used to love to go to pubs' conflicts with context 'parks' so changed to 'love going to parks' for coherence; 'love to go' is acceptable but consistency with gerunds improves fluency.

× Normally I go to after work, I mean after dinner time or sometimes during weekends because my best friend.

✓ Normally I go after work, I mean after dinner, or sometimes on weekends with my best friend.

You should not use 'go to after work'; the correct preposition is just 'after work'. 'During weekends' is incorrect; use 'on weekends'. Also the sentence was missing a preposition linking 'because my best friend' so 'with my best friend' clarifies the meaning.

× I love to walk around the lake because we can have a chat or it's a good exercise as well.

✓ I love walking around the lake because we can chat and it's good exercise.

'Have a chat' is idiomatic but 'chat' alone is more natural here. 'It's a good exercise' should omit 'a' because 'exercise' is uncountable in this sense. Also changed to gerund 'walking' for consistency with 'love'.

× Yes I do like to see more parks in my city because I realized we don't have enough parks in here so me and my friend we always have to go to same parks.

✓ Yes, I would like to see more parks in my city because I realized we don't have enough parks here, so my friend and I always have to go to the same parks.

Use 'would like' to express desire more naturally. Remove 'in here' and use 'here'. Pronoun order: 'my friend and I' is correct subject order. Add the article 'the' before 'same parks'. Also 'I realized' fits past reflection; tense is acceptable.

× But if the government makes more parks it would be really umm great.

✓ But if the government made more parks, it would be really great.

This is a conditional sentence. Use the past tense 'made' in the if-clause for a hypothetical result clause with 'would'. Also add a comma after the if-clause.

× Yes, I heard the Central Park in New York.

✓ Yes, I heard about Central Park in New York.

Use 'heard about' when referring to hearing information about a place. Also don't use 'the' before 'Central Park' when speaking generally; 'Central Park' is a proper noun and can be used without 'the' though 'the Central Park' is sometimes used if specifying.

× It's beautiful because it's a huge park apparently, so we can see so many different things in a different part of the parks.

✓ It's beautiful because it's a huge park, apparently, so we can see many different things in different parts of the park.

'So many' is acceptable but 'many different things' is cleaner. 'A different part of the parks' is incorrect: use plural 'parts' and singular 'park' to refer to Central Park. Comma placement around 'apparently' improves clarity.

× Also, I really wanted to like walk around there with a nice coffee and enjoy the view as well.

✓ Also, I would really like to walk around there with a nice coffee and enjoy the view.

'Wanted to like' is incorrect; use 'would like' to express a present desire. After 'like' use the base verb 'to walk' or gerund; 'would like to walk' is the standard form. Removed redundant 'as well' and simplified phrasing.