Parks— Part 1 Báo cáo

Gợi ý: Be more natural and accurate with vocabulary and correct small mistakes; give a clear topic sentence then one or two concise supporting details. Use correct nouns and prepositions (e.g., 'park' not 'pot', 'play on the swings' not 'playing Arnold swings', 'by the pond' not 'by the point'). Avoid redundancy and keep it within 3–4 sentences.

Ví dụ: Yes, I enjoyed going to the park as a child. My mother usually took me there on weekends, and I liked playing on the swings and feeding the ducks by the pond.

Gợi ý: Good structure and clear reasons. Improve coherence by using linking words (e.g., 'because', 'so') and be slightly more concise. Replace 'at the weekend' with 'on weekends' for natural phrasing and avoid small tense issues (use 'I've been' appropriately).

Ví dụ: Not really. Since I grew up I've become much busier because I work on weekdays, and I often have plans on weekends, so I usually prefer going to the cinema or shopping with friends to relax.

Gợi ý: Strong, relevant points. Fix minor errors and streamline language: use 'a lot of greenery' (not 'a lots'), and consider adding one specific example to make it more vivid. Keep to 2–3 sentences.

Ví dụ: Yes, absolutely. Parks attract children with playgrounds and open spaces to run, and they add a lot of greenery, which makes the city cleaner and more pleasant. For example, a small park with trees can reduce noise and improve air quality.

Gợi ý: Clear idea but some vocabulary and grammar need correction. Use accurate terms like 'wildlife parks' or 'animal reserves' rather than 'animals signature'. Make plural agreement and articles consistent ('a more natural setting'). Add one specific example of species or a reason to support your desire.

Ví dụ: Yes, I'd like to visit wildlife parks or animal reserves in the future because Hong Kong lacks large wildlife areas. I want to see animals in a more natural setting and learn about conservation, for example observing native birds or endangered mammals I cannot find at home.

× My mother usually brought me to the pot on weekends and I loved playing Arnold swings and feeding the ducks by the point.

✓ My mother usually brought me to the park on weekends and I loved playing on the swings and feeding the ducks at the pond.

Multiple preposition and word-choice errors: 'pot' should be 'park' (wrong word), 'playing Arnold swings' is incorrect — use 'playing on the swings' (use preposition on with play for playground equipment), and 'by the point' should be 'at the pond' (wrong preposition and likely wrong noun). Suggestion: use correct place nouns and pair verbs with the appropriate prepositions (e.g., 'bring someone to the park', 'play on the swings', 'feed ducks at the pond').

× Since I grew up I've been much busier.

✓ Since I grew up, I've been much busier.

This sentence needs a comma after the introductory clause 'Since I grew up' for correct punctuation and clarity; grammatically the tense is acceptable (present perfect 'I've been' after 'Since'). Suggestion: include the comma after the introductory time clause: 'Since I grew up, I've been much busier.'

× I usually work on weekdays and often have plans at the weekend, so I prefer going to the cinema or shopping at the mall with friends to relax.

✓ I usually work on weekdays and often have plans at the weekend, so I prefer going to the cinema or shopping at the mall with friends to relax.

No grammatical error that matches the provided list; sentence tense and structure are appropriate. No correction needed. (Included only for clarity.)

× they also add a lots of greenery which makes the city cleaner and more pleasant.

✓ they also add a lot of greenery, which makes the city cleaner and more pleasant.

'a lots of' is incorrect; use 'a lot of' or simply 'lot of' without 's'. Also add a comma before the nonrestrictive relative clause 'which makes...'. Suggestion: use 'a lot of greenery' and include the comma for clarity.

× Yes, I'd like to visit wildlife parks or animals signature in the future because Hong Kong doesn't really have large wildlife parks.

✓ Yes, I'd like to visit wildlife parks or animal sanctuaries in the future because Hong Kong doesn't really have large wildlife parks.

Several word-choice and structure errors: 'animals signature' is incorrect — the intended phrase is likely 'animal sanctuaries'. This is a noun phrase error rather than a listed specific grammar category, but it fits under sentence structure/word choice. Suggestion: replace with 'animal sanctuaries' and keep plural agreement with 'wildlife parks'.

× I want to see animals in more natural setting and learn about conservation, especially species I can't find here.

✓ I want to see animals in a more natural setting and learn about conservation, especially species I can't find here.

Missing article before 'more natural setting' — use 'a more natural setting'. The rest of the sentence is acceptable. Suggestion: include the indefinite article 'a' before singular countable noun phrases: 'a more natural setting'.