Parks— Part 1 Báo cáo

Gợi ý: Use a clear topic sentence in past tense, avoid repetition, and add one or two specific supporting details with appropriate linking words. Correct tense and concise phrasing will make the answer more natural.

Ví dụ: Yes, I loved going to parks as a child. For example, I often played on the swings and slides with my parents watching me, which made those visits feel safe and fun.

Gợi ý: Start with a direct topic sentence in present tense, use linking words to connect reasons, and correct grammar (subject-verb agreement). Keep it to two or three sentences and be specific about what refreshes you.

Ví dụ: Yes, I still enjoy going to parks because being outdoors refreshes me and clears my mind. For instance, walking among trees and hearing birds helps me relax after a busy day.

Gợi ý: Give a direct opinion sentence, then support it with specific reasons using linking words. Use correct grammar and precise vocabulary (e.g., 'beneficial for public health' instead of unclear phrases).

Ví dụ: Yes, I would like to see more parks in my city because they provide safe places for children and young people to exercise. Moreover, parks can improve residents' mental health by offering green space for relaxation.

Gợi ý: Answer directly about a specific park or type of park, correct unclear vocabulary, and give one clear reason or intention using linking words. Avoid vague or invented terms ('bandwidth').

Ví dụ: Yes, I would like to visit a large national park in Australia with my whole family, such as Royal National Park. We could enjoy picnics and walks together, which would be good for our health and family bonding.

× I like playing with the with the with the swing.

✓ I like playing on the swing.

The student repeated words and used 'with' incorrectly. Use the preposition 'on' with 'swing' to indicate the activity: 'playing on the swing.' Remove repeated words and ensure the verb phrase 'like playing' is followed by the correct prepositional phrase.

× I like playing with the slides.

✓ I like playing on the slides.

Use the preposition 'on' for playground equipment such as slides. 'Play on the slides' correctly describes the activity.

× When I was a child, that's why I always go into the park and I really love going to the park together with my parents as my guidance.

✓ When I was a child, I always went to the park and I loved going there with my parents for guidance.

Mixing past time reference 'When I was a child' requires past tense verbs. Change 'always go' to 'always went' and 'really love' to 'loved.' Also replace 'go into the park' with 'went to the park' and 'as my guidance' with 'for guidance' for natural phrasing.

× Like going to the parks because it's make me feel refreshed and then it makes my mind refreshing.

✓ I like going to parks because they make me feel refreshed and clear my mind.

Subject-verb agreement and tense: 'parks' is plural so use 'they make' not 'it's make.' 'Makes my mind refreshing' is awkward; use 'clear my mind' or 'refresh my mind.' Also include a subject 'I' before 'like' for a complete sentence.

× That's why I always go to the park and it feels so. Relaxing for me.

✓ That's why I always go to the park; it feels very relaxing for me.

The original has incorrect punctuation and an unnecessary period that breaks the sentence. Combine clauses properly and use 'very relaxing' for natural emphasis.

× Yes, I like to see more parks in my city because it's makes health for the other young people, for the kids, for the children who was living near in the city and it's really feel positive to their mental health not.

✓ Yes, I would like to see more parks in my city because they would improve the health of young people and children who live nearby, and they would have a positive effect on their mental health.

Multiple issues: use conditional 'would like' for preference; 'it's makes' is incorrect—use plural 'they would improve' for parks; 'who was living' should be 'who live' (relative clause present tense); 'it's really feel positive' is ungrammatical—use 'would have a positive effect.' Reorder for clarity and correct verb forms.

× Yes, I want to go to the park here in Australia together with my children together, my whole family, to bandwidth them to band over there and to make me feel so positive.

✓ Yes, I want to go to a park here in Australia with my whole family, including my children, to spend time together and to feel positive.

The original repeats 'together' and uses unclear phrases 'bandwidth them to band over there.' Replace with clear, natural expressions: 'with my whole family, including my children' and 'to spend time together.' Ensure pronouns and noun phrases are clear and avoid invented or incorrect verbs.

× And beneficial.

✓ It would be beneficial.

Fragment: 'And beneficial.' lacks a verb and subject. Make it a complete clause by adding 'It would be beneficial' to express the intended meaning.