Parks— Part 1 Báo cáo

Gợi ý: 回答は内容が伝わるが、時制の誤りや文法ミス、冗長さがある。過去について話すときは過去形を一貫して使い、簡潔な主題文の後に1〜2文の具体例（誰と、どんな遊びをしたか）をつなぎの語（for example, and）でつなぐと自然。発音と流暢さも改善できる。

Ví dụ: Yes, I loved going to parks as a child. For example, I especially enjoyed the swings and competing with my friends to see who could swing the highest.

Gợi ý: 時制の混同（過去形と現在形）が見られる上、語順や語彙選択に不自然さがある。まず現在の習慣について主題文で明確に述べ、理由や頻度を示す際は現在形を使う。リンク語（because, so）で文を論理的につなぐと良い。

Ví dụ: Yes, I still enjoy going to parks, though less than when I was a child. I usually visit once or twice a week because being in nature helps me relax and recharge.

Gợi ý: 語彙ミス（perks→parks、competitive learners意味不明）や文法欠陥が多い。まず意見を明確に述べ（Yes/No and why）、続けて具体的提案を簡潔に示す。専門語や不適切な語を避け、’commuters’や’joggers’など適切な語を使うと伝わりやすい。

Ví dụ: I think we have enough parks overall, but many are in residential areas and hard to reach. It would help to create more parks or running routes near commercial areas and transport hubs so commuters and joggers can use them easily.

Gợi ý: 固有名詞の扱いや時制（現在の希望は現在形）に不自然さがある。場所名が不明瞭なら簡潔に説明し、行きたい理由（設備や雰囲気）を具体的に述べる。冗長な表現を避け、リンク語（because, so）で要点をつなぐ。

Ví dụ: Yes. I would like to visit Yoda Yoyo Kiko in Tokyo because I heard it has excellent running paths. I want to jog there in the morning because the peaceful atmosphere helps me relax.

× Yes, I like to go into the park as a child.

✓ Yes, I liked going to the park as a child.

The sentence mixes present tense 'like' with the time expression 'as a child' which refers to the past. Use past tense 'liked' and change 'to go into the park' to the more natural 'going to the park'. Suggestion: Use past tense for habits in the past: 'I liked going to the park as a child.'

× I especially enjoy the swings because I love going higher and then I often competed with my friends to see who could swing the highest.

✓ I especially enjoyed the swings because I loved going higher, and I often competed with my friends to see who could swing the highest.

The sentence mixes present verbs ('enjoy', 'love') with past action 'competed' and the time frame is childhood. Use past tense consistently and keep 'going' as -ing after 'love'. Suggestion: Keep verb tenses consistent for past habits: 'I especially enjoyed the swings because I loved going higher, and I often competed...'.

× Yes, not as much as when I was a child, but I still got to the park once a week because being nature helps me calm down when I was.

✓ Yes, not as much as when I was a child, but I still go to the park once a week because being in nature helps me calm down.

Mixed tenses: 'got' is past but speaker refers to current habit, so use present 'go'. 'Being nature' is incorrect collocation; correct is 'being in nature'. The clause 'when I was' is incomplete and unnecessary. Suggestion: Use 'I still go to the park once a week because being in nature helps me calm down.'

× When I'm stressed I usually visit the park once or twice a week to relax and recharge.

✓ When I'm stressed I usually visit the park once or twice a week to relax and recharge.

This sentence is grammatically correct. It uses present tense appropriately for habitual actions. No change needed.

× I think the number of perks in our city is already enough, but many of them are located in residential area which makes them less accessible for people who exercise.

✓ I think the number of parks in our city is already enough, but many of them are located in residential areas, which makes them less accessible for people who want to exercise.

Word choice error: 'perks' should be 'parks'. 'Residential area' needs plural 'residential areas' and a comma before 'which'. Also 'people who exercise' is okay but 'people who want to exercise' is clearer for accessibility context. Suggestion: Use correct nouns and plural forms: 'parks', 'residential areas', and include comma before 'which'.

× It would be helpful create more parks or running routes near commercial area and transport hubs so competitive learners can use them easily.

✓ It would be helpful to create more parks or running routes near commercial areas and transport hubs so people who train competitively can use them easily.

Missing 'to' after 'helpful' (infinitive form 'to create'). 'Commercial area' needs plural 'commercial areas'. 'Competitive learners' is awkward; 'people who train competitively' is clearer. Suggestion: Use 'to' before the verb after 'helpful' and correct plural nouns and word choice.

× Yes, so I really wanted to go Yoda Yoyo Kiko when located in Tokyo because I heard the pack was suitable for running.

✓ Yes, I really want to go to Yoda Yoyo Kiko when I am in Tokyo because I heard the park is suitable for running.

Tense and structure errors: 'really wanted' (past) conflicts with future intention; use present 'want' for planned future. Missing preposition 'to' after 'go'. 'When located in Tokyo' needs subject 'I am'. 'Pack' is a typo for 'park' and should be present 'is' if referring to current information. Suggestion: Use 'I really want to go to Yoda Yoyo Kiko when I am in Tokyo because I heard the park is suitable for running.'

× So actually I really wanted to want to do jogging in the park in the morning because morning makes me really calm down and relax.

✓ Actually, I really want to go jogging in the park in the morning because mornings help me calm down and relax.

Awkward and incorrect verb sequence 'wanted to want to do' — use 'want to go jogging'. Use 'go jogging' rather than 'do jogging'. 'Morning makes me really calm down' is unidiomatic; use 'mornings help me calm down'. Also adjust tense to present to express planned habit. Suggestion: Simplify to 'I really want to go jogging in the park in the morning because mornings help me calm down and relax.'