Parks— Part 1 Báo cáo

Gợi ý: Improve grammar and sentence structure, use a clear topic sentence and one or two supporting details. Correct verb forms and reduce redundancy. Use linking words like "and" or "so" sparingly and appropriately. Be specific about activities and feelings (e.g., what you did at the park, why you enjoyed it).

Ví dụ: Yes, I loved going to parks with my grandparents when I was a child. We often walked around the paths and I would play games with them; sometimes we had picnics and shared jokes, which made those days very happy and memorable.

Gợi ý: Make the response more concise and correct tense and phrasing. Start with a direct topic sentence, then give one or two specific reasons. Use linking words like "because" or "however" to connect ideas. Avoid repeating the same point multiple times.

Ví dụ: Yes, I still like going to parks when I can. However, because I am a biological science student with many experiments, I rarely have free time; when I do, I often visit a park to enjoy nature and relax by myself.

Gợi ý: Use clearer phrasing and correct grammar. Provide a specific preference or reason and use linking phrases like "because" or "for example." Avoid vague phrases like "see as more as possible." Mention what you enjoy about parks with a clear example (e.g., photography).

Ví dụ: Yes, I would like to see more parks in my city because they help me relax. For example, I enjoy walking alone in green areas and taking photographs of plants and landscapes, which calms me down.

Gợi ý: Correct vocabulary and article use, and avoid filler words like "uh." Start with a clear statement and give specific details (features of the park, activities you plan). Use linking words such as "because" and "so" to make reasons clear. Spell or choose correct words (e.g., "lakes," "hospitable").

Ví dụ: I would like to visit Laborers Park in Dalian because I have heard it has beautiful mountains and lakes. I plan to take many landscape photos there and spend quiet time walking, which I think would be very relaxing.

× Yes I really enjoying to go to the park with my grandparents, they just walking beside the park and I scramping with them together and we even go out for a picnic together sharing some jokes and enjoying the time together.

✓ Yes, I really enjoyed going to the park with my grandparents. They just walked beside the park, and I scampered with them. We even went out for picnics, sharing jokes and enjoying our time together.

Multiple issues: using 'enjoying to go' is incorrect; after 'enjoy' use verb+ing (enjoyed going). Tense consistency: the question asked about childhood so simple past is appropriate ('enjoyed', 'walked', 'scampered', 'went'). 'Scramping' is not a correct verb; likely intended 'scampered' or 'ran around'. Also run-on sentence needs splitting into shorter sentences and pronoun/possessive adjustments ('our time'). Suggestion: use simple past verbs for past habits and use gerund after verbs like 'enjoy'.

× Yes, if I have free time, I will go to the park. But actually I don't have much time to do that because I'm a biological science student and I need to do a lot of experiments. So I don't have much time usually. But if I have time, I will go that. I love to enjoy the nature alone.

✓ Yes, if I have free time I go to the park. But actually I don't have much time to do that because I'm a biological science student and I need to do a lot of experiments. So I usually don't have much free time. But if I have time, I go there. I love enjoying nature alone.

Mixed use of first conditional 'if I have free time, I will...' and general habit statements. To express a habitual action use present simple ('I go', 'I usually don't have'). 'I will go that' is incorrect; use 'go there'. 'Love to enjoy the nature' is awkward; 'love enjoying nature' or 'love to enjoy nature' — prefer gerund 'enjoying'. Also adverb placement: 'usually' before verb. Suggestion: use present simple for habitual actions and correct adverb positions and pronouns.

× Yes, if I have chance I will see as more as possible parks in my city.

✓ Yes, if I have the chance I will see as many parks as possible in my city.

Missing article before 'chance' — should be 'the chance' (or 'a chance'). 'See as more as possible parks' has wrong word order and quantifier choice: use 'as many ... as possible' for countable nouns like 'parks'. Suggestion: use correct article and the pattern 'as many ... as possible'.

× Even in other cities I really enjoy the time to hang out for enjoying the nature by myself it calm me down and I really like take photos about that.

✓ Even in other cities I really enjoy hanging out to enjoy nature by myself; it calms me down and I really like taking photos of it.

Several preposition and verb form errors: 'hang out for enjoying' is wrong — use 'enjoy hanging out to enjoy' or better 'enjoy hanging out and enjoying nature'. 'By myself' is fine. 'It calm me down' needs third-person singular agreement 'calms'. 'Take photos about that' should be 'taking photos of it' (preposition 'of' with 'photos' and gerund after 'like'). Suggestion: use gerunds for activities after verbs like 'enjoy'/'like', correct subject-verb agreement, and use 'of' for photos.

× I want to go to the Laborers park in Dalian in the future.

✓ I want to go to the Laborers Park in Dalian in the future.

Capitalization of proper name and use of 'the' may be needed depending on official name; use 'the Laborers Park' if the park's name includes 'Park' as a proper noun. Here capitalize 'Park' and include 'the' if referring to a specific park. Suggestion: check official name and use 'the' before a named place when appropriate.

× I heard that this park is really beautiful with its mountain and Lakers.

✓ I heard that this park is really beautiful with its mountains and lakes.

Plural forms needed: 'mountain' and 'Lakers' (which is incorrect; likely 'lakes') should be plural 'mountains and lakes'. 'Lakers' is a proper noun (team) and not appropriate. Suggestion: use correct plural nouns and check word choice.

× People there are really hospitality and uh, they can entertain me a lot, and if I have chance, I will go there to take a lot of beautiful pictures and calm me down.

✓ People there are very hospitable and they can be very welcoming. If I have the chance, I will go there to take many beautiful pictures and relax.

'Really hospitality' is incorrect; 'hospitality' is a noun, use adjective 'hospitable' or phrase 'very hospitable'. 'Entertain me a lot' is awkward; 'be welcoming' or 'entertain' in different sense works. 'If I have chance' needs article 'the chance'. 'Take a lot of beautiful pictures and calm me down' wrong verb for effect: use 'relax' rather than 'calm me down' as part of clause. Also use 'many' or 'a lot of' with plural 'pictures'. Suggestion: use correct adjective forms, articles, and verbs that match meaning.