Parks— Part 1 Báo cáo

Gợi ý: Be more concise and correct grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details. Avoid redundant words (e.g., "satisfactory" and "satisfaction" together) and correct verb forms ("brings" → "brought").

Ví dụ: Yes, I loved going to parks as a child. I often played with my best friend on the swings and made new friends during picnics, which made me feel happy and included.

Gợi ý: Avoid filler words and respond more naturally. Begin with a direct answer, then give a clear reason and an example. Use linking words like "because" or "so" to connect ideas, and correct small grammar issues ("go to parks" not "went for parks").

Ví dụ: Not really. I prefer staying at home now because my phone and the Internet offer many entertaining options, such as streaming videos and social apps, so I rarely choose to visit parks.

Gợi ý: Make your position clear and organize reasons with linking words. Fix grammar ("see more parks" not "see it"; "this places" → "these places"). Give two specific benefits and avoid vague phrases like "a very important event."

Ví dụ: Yes, I would like to see more parks in my city because they provide safe outdoor spaces for children to play and help older people stay active. Moreover, more parks would improve air quality and offer pleasant places for community events.

Gợi ý: Answer directly and use correct structures for talking about future desires. Replace informal phrases ("wanna","stay") with standard English. Be specific about which park and why, and keep it to two or three sentences.

Ví dụ: I don't have any local parks in mind, but I would like to visit theme parks in the future. For example, I'd love to go to Disneyland because it offers a wide range of rides and shows that I find exciting.

× Yet, when I was little, I really liked to go to both parks where I can play with my best friend and make more friends with others, which can really brings me a sense of satisfactory and satisfaction.

✓ When I was little, I really liked going to parks where I could play with my best friend and make new friends, which brought me a sense of satisfaction.

Use gerund 'going' after 'liked' (verb + -ing). Use past modal 'could' to match past time. 'Bring' should be past 'brought' to agree with past tense. 'Satisfactory and satisfaction' is redundant; use 'satisfaction'. Use 'new friends' instead of 'more friends with others' for natural phrasing.

× Actually not. You know, when I was a kid I just went for parks for entertainment.

✓ Actually not. When I was a kid I just went to parks for entertainment.

Use past tense but correct preposition: 'went to' not 'went for'. 'Went to parks' is the correct past-tense expression.

× But nowadays I have, you know, phone and the Internet, which allows me to have access to many other entertainment, which is more interesting than going to parks.

✓ But nowadays I have a phone and the Internet, which allow me to access many other entertainments that are more interesting than going to parks.

Use article 'a' before 'phone'. 'Phone and the Internet' are plural idea so verb should be 'allow' not 'allows'. 'Have access to' is the correct phrase. 'Entertainment' as countable here better as 'entertainments' or rephrase 'forms of entertainment'; relative clause should match plural 'that are'.

× To be honest, I'd like to see it.

✓ To be honest, I'd like to see more parks.

The pronoun 'it' is unclear—use specific noun 'more parks' to answer the question. Ensure number and reference match the question about parks.

× The most important reason is that Even so, younger people don't like to go to parks anymore.

✓ The most important reason is that younger people don't like to go to parks anymore.

Remove 'Even so' which interrupts sentence flow and causes structure problem. Capitalization of 'Even' in middle is incorrect. Keep a single clear clause.

× Some old people still feel this places as a important sight for entertainment.

✓ Some older people still see these places as an important source of entertainment.

Use 'older people' instead of 'old people' for polite usage. 'These places' matches plural. Use 'see... as' not 'feel... as'. Use article 'an' before 'important' and 'source of entertainment' is more natural than 'sight for entertainment'.

× In addition, it can also be a very important event for children to play.

✓ In addition, parks can also be an important place for children to play.

Reference 'it' is vague; use 'parks'. 'Event' is wrong word — 'place' fits. Use article 'an' before 'important'.

× Well, actually I don't have any parks in the future wanna play, but maybe if you ask me, I wanna stay some theme parks I'd like to visit in the future, like Disneyland Park, which can provide me with a wide range of entertainment facilities.

✓ Well, I don't have any specific parks I plan to visit in the future, but I would like to visit some theme parks, such as Disneyland, which can provide a wide range of entertainment facilities.

Informal contractions 'wanna' should be replaced with 'want to' or 'would like to'. Sentence had faulty structure ('parks in the future wanna play'). Use 'specific parks I plan to visit' for clarity. 'Such as Disneyland' is more natural than 'like Disneyland Park'. 'Can provide me with' simplified to 'provide a wide range of entertainment facilities'.