Parks— Part 1 Báo cáo

Gợi ý: Cần diễn đạt rõ ràng ý chính và loại bỏ lỗi ngữ pháp. Tránh câu lủng củng và từ dùng sai (ví dụ: “risky”, “threw”). Nên có một câu chủ đề trả lời trực tiếp (Yes/No + lý do), tiếp theo 1–2 câu bổ sung chi tiết cụ thể (ví dụ hoạt động bạn làm, cảm xúc) dùng liên từ để nối ý (e.g., because, so, and). Chú ý chia động từ đúng thì và số ít/số nhiều (park → parks, play → played nếu nói về quá khứ).

Ví dụ: Yes. I loved going to parks as a child because they were safe places to play with my friends. For example, we often played on the swings and climbed trees, which made me feel free and happy. Because of those memories, parks always remind me of a carefree childhood.

Gợi ý: Cần sửa ngữ pháp (to be relaxed, feel comfortable) và dùng cấu trúc tự nhiên hơn. Bắt đầu bằng câu chủ đề ngắn, sau đó giải thích cụ thể các hoạt động bạn làm ở công viên và kết luận cảm xúc hoặc lợi ích. Dùng liên từ thích hợp (because, so, for example).

Ví dụ: Yes, I still enjoy going to parks because they help me relax and feel comfortable. For example, I often go there to study under a tree, go for a run, or meet friends to play sports. These activities help me clear my mind and remind me of happy childhood moments.

Gợi ý: Cần dùng danh từ/ cụm từ chính xác (parks, reduce pollution) và câu mạch lạc hơn. Tránh lỗi từ vựng như “pollution environment” và lỗi cấu trúc như “they are air is”. Trình bày ý theo cấu trúc: trả lời trực tiếp, lý do cụ thể, ví dụ hoặc kết quả, sử dụng liên từ (because, so, therefore).

Ví dụ: Yes, I would like to see more parks in my city because they increase green space and help reduce air pollution. For example, more trees and lawns can improve air quality and provide places for people to relax. As a result, residents would feel healthier and happier.

Gợi ý: Cần rõ ràng về đối tượng (bạn muốn đi đến công viên cụ thể nào hay muốn thành phố có thêm đường mòn?). Tránh câu dài lủng củng; tách thành 2–3 câu ngắn gọn: nói rõ mong muốn, nêu lý do cụ thể, đưa ví dụ. Sử dụng từ chính xác (walking paths, improve quality of life, community well-being).

Ví dụ: Yes. In the future I would like to visit parks with many walking paths and recreational facilities because they improve people's quality of life. For instance, wide paths and bike lanes make it easier for families to exercise and relax, which strengthens community well-being and helps people feel less stressed.

× When I was a child I used to go to park because it's very risky and be full, so I threw very reluctant and free well-being. Moreover, I usually play with friends in playground so happy.

✓ When I was a child, I used to go to the park because it was nearby and crowded, so I felt relaxed and carefree. Moreover, I usually played with friends in the playground and felt very happy.

The original sentence has multiple sentence structure problems: missing articles ('the park', 'the playground'), wrong verb forms and tenses ('used to' requires past descriptions; 'play' should be 'played'), incorrect vocabulary ('risky' seems wrong, 'nearby' or 'popular' fits; 'threw very reluctant and free well-being' is ungrammatical and intended meaning appears to be 'felt relaxed and carefree'). Also punctuation and clause linking needed fixing. Suggestion: use consistent past tense for habitual childhood actions, include definite articles for specific places, and choose appropriate adjectives ('relaxed', 'carefree', 'happy').

× Yes, I still like going to park because it helps me relaxed and comfortable. Moreover, I often come here to study, run and play with my friends, so I always evoke childhood.

✓ Yes, I still like going to the park because it helps me relax and feel comfortable. Moreover, I often come here to study, run and play with my friends, so it always evokes memories of my childhood.

Errors include missing definite article ('the park'), incorrect verb form after 'helps' ('relax' not 'relaxed'), and missing 'feel' before 'comfortable'. 'Evoke childhood' is ungrammatical; use 'evoke memories of my childhood' or 'remind me of my childhood'. Suggestion: after 'helps' use base verb; add articles for specific places and use correct collocations ('evoke memories').

× Yes, I'd like to see more park in my city because they increase green space and reduce pollution environment so I feel excited and happy when they are air is fresh and clean.

✓ Yes, I'd like to see more parks in my city because they would increase green space and reduce pollution, so I feel excited and happy when the air is fresh and clean.

Problems: singular/plural and article errors ('more park' should be 'more parks'); incorrect pronoun/verb agreement ('they increase' is OK after 'parks' but conditional 'would increase' fits for desire); awkward phrase 'pollution environment' should be 'pollution' or 'environmental pollution'; extra 'are' in 'they are air is fresh' and wrong article before 'air' ('the air'). Suggestion: use plural 'parks', correct word order, and proper articles ('the air').

× Yes, I want to many paths in the future because it will help to improve the quality of human life so that increase community well-being and more green space and create more space for recreation and leisure activity, especially they feel relaxed and comfortable.

✓ Yes, I want many parks and paths in the future because they will help improve the quality of life, increase community well-being and green space, and create more space for recreation and leisure activities, where people can feel relaxed and comfortable.

Multiple issues: missing object after 'want' ('I want many paths' is odd; likely 'parks and paths'); incorrect structure 'it will help to improve' should be 'they will help improve' to match plural subject; awkward phrasing and missing articles; 'leisure activity' should be plural 'leisure activities'; 'especially they feel' is wrong; use a relative clause 'where people can feel'. Suggestion: ensure subject and verbs agree in number, use parallel structure for lists, and use appropriate relative clauses for intended meanings.