Parks— Part 1 Báo cáo

Gợi ý: Make the response more concise, correct grammatical errors, and use clearer linking. Start with a direct topic sentence, then briefly explain two specific reasons with correct grammar and plural/singular forms.

Ví dụ: Not really. I didn’t go to parks much as a child because I lived in a hilly part of Japan and the nearest park was too far to visit regularly. After moving to a flatter neighborhood, I started enjoying parks because I could play baseball with friends and meet other children.

Gợi ý: Avoid unclear or incorrect phrases and keep sentences natural. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give specific examples of what you enjoy and why (e.g., wildlife, walking). Remove awkward clauses and use linking words correctly.

Ví dụ: Yes, I enjoy parks even more now. Living in London gives me access to many beautiful green spaces, and I often visit to watch squirrels and birds, take peaceful walks, and reduce stress.

Gợi ý: Be more precise and balance the comparison. Begin with a direct answer about your preference, then explain with a clear contrast and a specific benefit. Use cohesive linking words like 'however' and 'for example'.

Ví dụ: Yes. Although London has many parks, I would like to see more green spaces in Tokyo. Tokyo is densely built, so adding small parks or pocket gardens would help residents unwind, improve mental health, and provide places for families to meet.

Gợi ý: Correct factual and grammatical mistakes, remove unclear fragments, and keep the answer within 3–4 coherent sentences. State when and why you want to go, give specific activities you will do, and avoid unrelated or garbled phrases.

Ví dụ: Yes. I plan to visit Richmond Park in West London because it is one of the largest parks and is famous for its wild deer. I want to observe the deer, walk to see historical monuments, and enjoy a long peaceful walk in nature.

× But after moving to much flatter neighborhoods, I began enjoying going to parks to play baseball and meet another children.

✓ But after moving to much flatter neighborhoods, I began enjoying going to parks to play baseball and meet other children.

Use of 'another children' is incorrect because 'another' is used with singular countable nouns. For plural nouns use 'other'. Replace 'another children' with 'other children' to match plural form. Suggestion: Learn that 'another' = 'an other' (singular), while 'other' is used before plural nouns.

× Therefore, I sometimes visit them to see why do I such as squirrels and birds to relieve my stress and experience nature.

✓ Therefore, I sometimes visit them to see animals I like, such as squirrels and birds, to relieve my stress and experience nature.

The original sentence contains incorrect word order and an unnecessary question-word structure 'why do I such as'. The intended meaning is present simple description, so reorder to 'see animals I like, such as...' and keep present simple 'I sometimes visit' with infinitive purpose 'to relieve'. Suggestion: For lists or examples use 'such as' after the noun phrase (e.g., 'animals I like, such as squirrels and birds').

× I've heard there are many deers to observe so I want to see them and explore some historical monuments by walking to live much less caused by.

✓ I've heard there are many deer to observe, so I want to see them and explore some historical monuments by walking.

'Deer' is an irregular plural that has the same form as the singular; 'deers' is incorrect. Also the phrase 'by walking to live much less caused by' is ungrammatical and unclear; removing it clarifies the intended action of exploring on foot. Suggestion: Memorize irregular plurals like 'deer', 'sheep', 'fish'. When a clause is unclear, simplify to the intended meaning (e.g., 'explore by walking').

× Yes, I would like to visit Richmond Park in West London on Sunday because it's one of the most famous and the largest parks in the city.

✓ Yes, I would like to visit Richmond Park in West London on Sunday because it's one of the most famous and largest parks in the city.

Using both 'the most famous' and 'the largest' with 'the' before 'largest' can be acceptable, but 'one of the most famous and the largest' is awkward because 'one of the most famous' implies membership in a group, while 'the largest' is definite. To be parallel and natural, use 'one of the most famous and largest parks' or rephrase. Here 'one of the most famous and largest parks' makes the adjectives parallel. Suggestion: Keep coordinate adjectives parallel when using 'one of the ...' phrases.