Parks— Part 1 Báo cáo

Gợi ý: Be more concise and grammatically correct. Start with a clear topic sentence answering directly, then add one or two specific supporting details. Use correct tense and possessive/plural forms, and avoid repetition. For example, replace fragmented phrases with complete clauses and connect ideas with linking words (e.g., “because,” “so,” “and”).

Ví dụ: Yes, I loved going to parks as a child because they felt safe and lively. I used to play in the mud and run around with children my age, which was joyful and full of energy.

Gợi ý: Provide a direct topic sentence and then one clear specific reason. Fix grammar (prepositions, articles) and connect ideas with linking words. Avoid vague phrases like “nature plant” and incomplete sentences. Keep it within 2–4 sentences.

Ví dụ: Yes, I still enjoy going to parks, especially on my days off or when I feel stressed. I like to relax among the trees and watch children playing because it reminds me of my childhood and lifts my mood.

Gợi ý: Answer directly and give a specific reason or example. Improve word choice and sentence structure, remove fillers (uh), and use linking words to make the reason coherent. Mention who benefits and how, briefly.

Ví dụ: Yes, I would like to see more parks in my city because they provide pleasant green spaces for everyone. For example, older people can use them to exercise and socialize, which improves community well-being.

Gợi ý: Give a clear topic sentence naming the park and one or two specific details explaining why you want to go or what prevents you. Remove repetitions and filler words, and combine short sentences with linking words for fluency.

Ví dụ: Yes, I would like to visit Pilakula Path again because it is one of the nicest parks I have been to, with beautiful trails and gardens. However, it is located in a different city, so the long distance prevents me from going often.

× When I was scared, going to park was so fun and lively and I had to have I used to have fun playing in mud and playing with other children's of my age.

✓ When I was a child, going to the park was so fun and lively, and I used to have fun playing in the mud and playing with other children my age.

The original sentence has multiple structure and article errors. 'When I was scared' is likely meant to be 'When I was a child' (sentence context). 'going to park' needs the definite article 'the park'. 'I had to have I used to have' is redundant and ungrammatical; use 'I used to have fun' or simply 'I used to have fun' so remove repetition. 'playing in mud' requires the article 'the' before 'mud'. 'other children's of my age' is incorrect possessive and structure; use 'other children my age'. Suggestions: simplify the clause, keep parallel structure with 'playing in the mud and playing with other children my age.'

× It was joyful and so much energy.

✓ It was joyful and full of energy.

The phrase 'so much energy' cannot directly follow 'It was' without a linking preposition. Use 'full of energy' to describe something as having a lot of energy. Alternatively, 'It had so much energy' would also be grammatical. Suggestion: pair 'was' with an adjective phrase ('joyful and energetic') or use 'full of'.

× That made me to involve in such things.

✓ That made me get involved in such activities.

After 'made' followed by an object, the verb should be base form (made me do) or use 'get involved' to convey passive involvement. 'made me to involve' is incorrect because 'to' should not be used, and 'involve' needs an object (involve myself) or passive form. Also 'things' is vague; 'activities' is clearer. Suggestion: use 'made me get involved' or 'led me to get involved.'

× Yes, on during my off days or bad days, I like going to park and relax and just stay at the nature plant.

✓ Yes, on my off days or bad days, I like going to the park to relax and just stay in nature.

Remove extra preposition 'on' and keep 'on my off days'. 'going to park' needs 'the park'. Use infinitive 'to relax' for purpose. 'stay at the nature plant' is ungrammatical and confusing; use 'stay in nature' to indicate being outdoors. Suggestion: 'I like going to the park to relax and just be in nature.'

× Is children's playing around that reminds me of.

✓ Children playing around there remind me of my childhood.

The original is a fragment and ungrammatical. 'Is' at start creates wrong structure; change to complete clause. 'children's playing around' incorrectly uses possessive; use 'children playing around'. 'that reminds me of' is dangling; specify what it reminds you of, e.g., 'my childhood.' Suggestion: form a full sentence with subject 'children playing around' and verb 'remind.'

× Yes, I would love to see more parks around the area I am and the city I'm in.

✓ Yes, I would love to see more parks in the area where I live and in the city I'm in.

'around the area I am' is ungrammatical; use 'in the area where I live' or 'in my area.' Keep parallel structure: 'in the area where I live and in the city I'm in.' Suggestion: use 'in my area and in the city.'

× That brings up a lot of a good uh vibe or in nature and cheerful energy to the older people.

✓ That brings a good, natural, cheerful vibe to older people.

Original contains filler 'uh' and awkward phrasing 'brings up a lot of a good uh vibe or in nature and cheerful energy.' Use concise adjectives: 'good, natural, cheerful vibe.' 'To the older people' should be 'to older people.' Suggestion: avoid fillers and simplify to 'brings a cheerful, natural vibe to older people.'

× Yes, there is place called Pilakula Path.

✓ Yes, there is a place called Pilakula Path.

Missing indefinite article 'a' after 'there is'. 'There is place' is incorrect; use 'there is a place.' Suggestion: include 'a' with singular countable nouns: 'there is a restaurant,' 'there is a park.'

× It's, it's one of the best park I have ever been.

✓ It's one of the best parks I have ever been to.

'one of the best park' should be plural 'parks' after 'one of the'. Also follow verb 'been' with preposition 'to' when referring to visiting a place. Suggestion: use 'one of the best parks I've ever been to.'

× Uh, but I stay very far from that park.

✓ But I live very far from that park.

Use 'live' rather than 'stay' to indicate permanent residence; 'stay' suggests temporary. 'I stay very far' is unnatural in this context. Suggestion: say 'I live very far from that park.'

× I stay in a different city.

✓ I live in a different city.

Same issue: use 'live' for residence. 'Stay' is typically temporary. Suggestion: use 'I live' for where you reside.

× Due to the distance, I'm not able to visit that park.

✓ Due to the distance, I'm not able to visit that park.

Sentence is grammatically acceptable as present inability; if speaker means habitual present inability it is correct. No change needed. Explanation: 'I'm not able to visit' correctly uses present tense to express current inability because of distance.