Parks— Part 1 Báo cáo

Gợi ý: 문장이 자연스럽지 않고 동사 시제와 단어 선택에 오류가 있습니다. 불필요한 중복(예: "go went", "umm", "ride a bicycle or ride a ski skater")을 줄이고 주제 문장과 구체적 세부사항을 논리적으로 연결하세요. 연결어(for example, often, with)와 명확한 어휘(bicycle, rollerblades/skate) 사용으로 문장을 더 간결하게 표현하면 점수가 오릅니다.

Ví dụ: Yes, I loved going to parks near my hometown. For example, there were many small parks close to my house, so I often went there with friends to hang out and ride our bicycles or rollerblades.

Gợi ý: 응답이 불분명하고 표현이 일관되지 않습니다. 핵심 생각을 한 문장으로 먼저 말한 뒤 이유를 구체적으로 제시하세요. 불명확한 형용사(예: thrilling, efficient, top circumstance) 대신 정확한 표현(stress relief, relax, enjoy nature)을 사용하고 불필요한 망설임을 없애세요.

Ví dụ: Yes, I still enjoy going to parks because they help me relax and reduce stress. For instance, after a busy day I like walking among trees and listening to birds, which makes me feel calmer.

Gợi ý: 의견은 분명하지만 어휘 반복과 문법 오류가 있습니다. 간단한 주제 문장 후 이유와 예를 덧붙이는 구조를 유지하세요. 'invest in' 같은 정확한 동사구와 'rather than'의 사용을 명확히 하며 군더더기 표현을 제거하면 더 자연스럽습니다.

Ví dụ: Yes, I would like more parks in my city because green spaces improve residents' quality of life. However, the local government tends to invest more in roads and buildings rather than parks, so we have fewer public green areas.

Gợi ý: 응답이 혼란스럽고 과거 경험과 미래 희망을 혼용해 문장이 모호합니다. 먼저 명확히 현재 원함(visit Central Park) 진술하고 과거 경험(never been)이면 과거 사실을 바로잡으세요. 중복과 망설임을 제거하고 연결어(if, however, because)를 사용해 논리를 분명히 하세요.

Ví dụ: Yes, I would love to visit Central Park in New York in the future because I've never been there. If I return to New York City, I would enjoy taking a long walk through the park and exploring its famous sights.

× Yes, when I was a child I always go went to the park nearby my hometown.

✓ Yes, when I was a child I always went to the park near my hometown.

The sentence mixes present tense 'go' with past tense 'went'. The context 'when I was a child' requires past tense. Use 'went' and change 'nearby my hometown' to the correct prepositional phrase 'near my hometown'. Suggestion: maintain past tense for all verbs in the clause and use natural preposition 'near'.

× So for umm instance there are plenty of parks umm close to my place.

✓ For instance, there were plenty of parks close to my home.

The phrase 'for umm instance' should be 'for instance'. Because the speaker refers to childhood, past tense 'were' fits better than 'are'. 'My place' is informal; 'my home' is more natural. Suggestion: use 'for instance' and match verb tense to context.

× So I usually umm go there with my friends to hang out or ride a bicycle or ride a ski skater there.

✓ I usually went there with my friends to hang out or ride bicycles or skate.

Context is childhood, so 'usually' requires past tense 'went' not present 'go'. 'Ride a bicycle' can be pluralized to 'ride bicycles' or 'ride a bicycle' consistently; 'ride a ski skater' is incorrect — use 'skate' or 'roller-skate' depending on meaning. Suggestion: use past tense and correct verb for skating.

× Yes, I do look to I love to visit a park even if I'm out there now.

✓ Yes, I do; I love visiting parks even now when I'm out.

Sentence structure is awkward and mixes forms. 'I do look to' is incorrect. Use 'I do' as emphasis or say 'I love visiting parks'. 'Visit a park' can be pluralized to general 'parks'. 'Even if I'm out there now' should be 'even now when I'm out'. Suggestion: simplify to 'I do; I love visiting parks even now.'

× Uh, I've lived at the thrilling, uh, efficient to reduce the stress and like top circumstance, so exact, like specifically like challenging situation. I.

✓ I've found parks thrilling and effective for reducing stress, especially in challenging situations.

Original is ungrammatical and unclear. 'Lived at the thrilling' is incorrect. The intended meaning appears to be that parks are thrilling and effective in reducing stress. Use present perfect 'I've found' or simple present 'I find'. Combine ideas: 'thrilling and effective for reducing stress' and 'especially in challenging situations'. Suggestion: express idea clearly with subject + verb + object and appropriate modifiers.

× Yeah sure, I would love to like umm, have more parks in my city.

✓ Yes, I would love to have more parks in my city.

Include 'would' correctly and remove filler 'like umm'. 'Yeah sure' is informal; use 'Yes'. Suggestion: omit unnecessary fillers and keep modal structure 'would love to' + verb.

× Uh, however, uh, local government in my like hometown, they are more invested investing on the like other infrastructure rather than green infrastructure.

✓ However, the local government in my hometown is investing more in other infrastructure than in green infrastructure.

Problems: missing definite article 'the' before 'local government'; subject-verb agreement ('government ... is' not 'they are'); wrong verb form 'invested investing'; incorrect preposition 'on' should be 'in'; unnecessary fillers. Suggestion: use 'the local government ... is investing more in X than in Y'.

× Umm, actually been there last year.

✓ I actually went there last year.

Missing subject and auxiliary: 'been there last year' requires 'I went there last year' or 'I have been there' but 'have been' pairs with present relevance and should not include 'last year' commonly. Use simple past 'went' for specific past time. Suggestion: include the subject and use correct past-tense verb.

× However, I've never been to Central Park since there are plenty of destinations I should should visit it.

✓ However, I've never been to Central Park because there are so many destinations I should visit.

Redundant 'should should' removed. 'Since' is ambiguous; use 'because' for clarity. Do not add 'it' after 'visit' when direct object is omitted; here 'visit' refers to destinations, so no 'it'. Also 'so many' is more natural than 'plenty of'. Suggestion: use 'I've never been to Central Park because there are so many destinations I want to visit.'

× So if I had a chance to visit New York City again, I would like, I would love to like go on a walk.

✓ If I had a chance to visit New York City again, I would love to go for a walk in Central Park.

Remove filler 'I would like, I would love to like' and choose one modal 'would love to'. Use 'go for a walk' rather than 'go on a walk'. Specify location 'in Central Park' to be clear. Suggestion: keep conditional structure and concise phrasing.