Parks— Part 1 Báo cáo

Gợi ý: Reduce hesitation and repetition, use a clear topic sentence and one or two specific supporting details. Keep answer within 2–3 sentences and avoid filler words like "uh."

Ví dụ: Yes, I loved going to parks as a child. I always felt refreshed after playing on the swings and running around with my friends, especially after a long day at school.

Gợi ý: Be concise and correct grammar, avoid repetition and pronunciation errors. Start with a direct answer, then give one clear reason and a short example. Use linking phrase like "because" or "so."

Ví dụ: Yes, I still enjoy going to parks. I visit a nearby park almost every day because walking there helps me reduce stress and feel refreshed after work.

Gợi ý: Avoid long, repetitive phrases and hesitations. Provide a clear reason and a specific example (e.g., exercise areas, playgrounds). Use linking words like "because" and "for example."

Ví dụ: Yes, I would like more parks in the city because they give people space to relax and socialize. For example, additional parks with playgrounds and walking paths would make it easier for families and office workers to exercise and meet friends.

Gợi ý: Reduce fillers and correct verb forms. Begin with a direct statement of intent, then give one specific reason and a short detail about the park. Keep it to 2–3 sentences for clarity.

Ví dụ: Yes, I would like to visit Central Park in the future. I have heard it has a public pool where people can take swimming lessons, and since swimming is my hobby, I would love to try it there.

× I had a fondness of going to park as a child because, uh, whenever I went there, uh, I felt really good and I felt refreshed, even, uh, after having a long, uh, long working or studying hours, study hours at the school.

✓ I had a fondness for going to parks as a child because whenever I went there I felt really good and refreshed, even after long hours of work or study at school.

The phrase 'fondness of' is incorrect; the correct preposition is 'fondness for' (preposition usage -> ID 11). 'Going to park' needs the plural or article: 'going to parks' or 'going to the park' (singular/plural & article -> IDs 1 and 22). 'Having a long, long working or studying hours' is ungrammatical; use 'long hours of work or study' to match countable 'hours' with 'long' and correct noun forms. Also remove filler words and redundant commas for clarity.

× Of course, there's a park in my locality where I go almost every day.

✓ Of course, there is a park in my locality where I go almost every day.

Contraction 'there's' is acceptable in speech, but in formal corrected responses expand to 'there is' for clarity. No grammatical error beyond register; keeping full form fits the requested correction style.

× I find it very convenient for me to go there because in order to reduce the stress that that is caused by the work I do every day, it really helps me to feel to me to feel Rex and rejuvenated.

✓ I find it very convenient to go there because it helps reduce the stress caused by my daily work and makes me feel relaxed and rejuvenated.

Problems include pronoun redundancy 'find it very convenient for me' (use 'convenient to go' removes unnecessary pronoun) and duplicated 'that that'. 'It really helps me to feel to me to feel Rex' contains repetition and a misspelling 'Rex' for 'relaxed'. Also word order and fillers hinder clarity. Corrected sentence simplifies pronoun use and fixes adjective form 'relaxed'.

× Yes, definitely I would be happier if there are more parks in my city.

✓ Yes, definitely I would be happier if there were more parks in my city.

The sentence expresses a hypothetical condition about the present/future, so the subjunctive or past-tense form 'were' is appropriate instead of 'are' (tense/mood error -> ID 7 and subject-verb agreement -> ID 27). Using 'were' signals an unreal or desired situation.

× Uh, uh, it the, the, the more, uh, the more the parks are there, the more, the, the more the people will feel happier.

✓ The more parks there are, the happier people will feel.

Redundant fillers and incorrect word order 'the parks are there' should be 'parks there are' or simply 'there are parks'. The comparative correlative structure 'The more..., the more...' needs parallel, concise clauses. Remove hesitations and extra articles for grammatical and stylistic correctness.

× I believe, uh, because uh, by going to park, people get chance to meet their friends and other than that they can do some activities of their choice.

✓ I believe that by going to the park, people get a chance to meet their friends, and they can do activities of their choice.

'Going to park' needs an article: 'the park' (article use -> ID 22). Missing article before 'chance' requires 'a chance'. 'Other than that' is unnecessary and awkward; use conjunction 'and' to connect ideas. Also remove fillers for clarity.

× It is known as Central Park. I have never visited this park, but I have came across many good things about it.

✓ It is known as Central Park. I have never visited this park, but I have come across many good things about it.

The verb 'came' is the simple past of 'come'; after 'have' we must use the past participle 'come' (past participle form -> ID 9). Therefore 'have came' is incorrect; use 'have come' for present perfect.

× Uh, for example, there is a, there is a pool in that park where people can learn to swim, which is my hobby, yes.

✓ For example, there is a pool in that park where people can learn to swim, which is my hobby.

Remove stuttering 'there is a, there is a' and trailing 'yes'. The sentence structure is otherwise correct; cleaning disfluencies yields a grammatically correct statement.