Parks— Part 1 Báo cáo

Gợi ý: 全体としてよく答えられていますが、いくつか改善点があります。まず、文法の小さな誤り（“basketballs”ではなく“basketball”や“sledding”前後の語順）を直しましょう。次に、主題文（トピックセンテンス）をもう少しはっきりさせ、支持情報をつなぐために接続語（for example, in winter, also）を使うとより自然で効果的です。また、具体的なエピソード（年齢や一度の思い出）を一つ入れると説得力が増します。回答は最大5文を守って簡潔にまとめてください。

Ví dụ: Yes, I loved going to parks with my sister when I was a child. We usually played basketball and soccer together, and in winter we often went sledding because our town had a lot of snow. For example, I remember once when I was eight we built a big snow ramp and took turns sledding down it. Those visits were my favorite part of the weekends.

Gợi ý: 回答は明確ですが、もう少し自然な表現と追加の理由・対比を加えると良いです。“Actually”の使い方は問題ないですが、代わりに“Nowadays”や“Recently”を使うと自然です。また、理由（友達がいない）に続けて、どんな場所で友達に会うのか具体例を一つ加えると会話が広がります。文の繋がりに“because”や“so”などの接続語を適切に使い、文法と語順を整えましょう。

Ví dụ: Nowadays I don't enjoy going to parks much because I rarely have someone to go with. My younger sisters moved away to university, so I usually prefer staying at home or meeting friends at cafes or shopping malls instead. If I had company, though, I would happily go back to visiting parks.

Gợi ý: 回答は意味が伝わりますが、文法と語順の誤りがあり、発話の流暢さを改善する必要があります（“there were used”は不適切）。まず冒頭の“MMM”は書き言葉では不要なので省きましょう。次に、理由を述べる際に正しい時制と自然な表現（“are used”や“are mostly used”）を使い、接続語（for example, in general）で段落をつなげると良いです。もう一歩踏み込んで、どのような種類の公園が十分か（playgrounds, walking paths）を具体的に示すと説得力が増します。

Ví dụ: I don't think we need many more parks because our town already has plenty. Most of them are used by families and elderly people for walking or exercising. For example, I often see children playing on the playgrounds and people chatting or jogging on the paths, so the current number seems sufficient.

Gợi ý: 良いアイデアですが、いくつかの語法と語彙の誤りを直しましょう。“distress”は動詞ではなく名詞的で文脈上は“de-stress”が適切です。また“after visit weeks”は不明瞭なので、“after busy weeks”や“after a hectic week”に直すと意味が明確になります。詳細を増やすために、行きたい具体的な種類の公園（wildlife reserve, bird sanctuary）やそこで何をしたいか（birdwatching, feeding squirrels）を付け加えるとより具体的で自然です。

Ví dụ: I'd love to visit wildlife parks or bird sanctuaries where I can see many species of birds and small mammals. I find that spending time with animals really helps me de-stress after a busy week, and I would enjoy activities like birdwatching or walking on nature trails.

× We played basketballs and soccer, and in winter we often went sledding because my town has a lot of snow.

✓ We played basketball and soccer, and in winter we often went sledding because my town has a lot of snow.

Use singular uncountable form for sports names like 'basketball' and 'soccer' when referring to playing the sport generally. Change 'basketballs' to 'basketball'. Suggestion: use the sport name without pluralization unless referring to physical balls (e.g. 'basketballs').

× Actually, I don't enjoy going to parks these days because there's no one to go with me.

✓ Actually, I don't enjoy going to parks these days because there is no one to go with me.

Contraction 'there's' is acceptable colloquially but 'there is' is clearer in formal speech; grammatically both are present tense existential. No tense change needed; suggestion: use 'there is' in speaking tests for clarity.

× My younger sisters moved away to attend university, so I usually prefer staying home or meeting friends elsewhere.

✓ My younger sister moved away to attend university, so I usually prefer staying home or meeting friends elsewhere.

Context implies a single younger sibling who left; using 'sisters' conflicts with earlier mention of 'my sister' in childhood. Choose singular 'sister' for consistency. If multiple sisters did move, keep plural but ensure consistency earlier. Suggestion: maintain consistent reference to number of siblings.

× MMM, I don't think so because there are already many parks in my town and there were used by families and elderly people.

✓ MMM, I don't think so because there are already many parks in my town and they are used by families and elderly people.

Original 'were used' mixes past passive with present context; use present passive 'are used' to match 'there are already many parks'. Also add pronoun 'they' to refer to parks. Suggestion: keep tense consistent and include subject for passive construction.

× For example, I often see children playing and other people exercising or chatting in the parks.

✓ For example, I often see children playing and other people exercising or chatting in the parks.

Sentence is correct; present participles 'playing', 'exercising', 'chatting' properly describe ongoing actions. No change needed. Suggestion: keep this structure for describing observed activities.

× I'd love to visit parks where I can meet and interact with many species of animals, especially birds and small mammals.

✓ I'd love to visit parks where I can meet and interact with many species of animals, especially birds and small mammals.

Sentence is correct. Present modal 'can' plus base verb 'meet' and 'interact' is appropriate. Suggestion: no change.

× I find that spending time with animals helps me distress and refresh after visit weeks.

✓ I find that spending time with animals helps me de-stress and refresh after weeks of visiting.

'Distress' is a noun/verb meaning cause distress; the intended word is 'de-stress' (to relieve stress). 'After visit weeks' is ungrammatical; use 'after weeks of visiting' to express the time period. Also place 'de-stress' and 'refresh' in parallel structure. Suggestion: use correct verb 'de-stress' and restructure time phrase as 'after weeks of visiting'.