Parks— Part 1 Báo cáo

Gợi ý: Be more concise and natural: start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details connected by simple linking words. Avoid unnecessary repetition and grammar errors (e.g., verb tenses, articles, plurals).

Ví dụ: Yes, I loved going to parks as a child. I grew up in busy Tokyo, so parks were one of the few safe places where my friends and I could play; I especially remember climbing trees and playing tag every weekend.

Gợi ý: Answer more directly and correct grammar: give a clear topic sentence (Yes/No + brief reason), then add a specific example. Use linking words (because, but) properly and avoid sentence fragments.

Ví dụ: Not really, because the parks near my home in Brisbane are mostly grassy picnic areas rather than playgrounds. For example, the nearby park has open lawns and picnic tables but no swings or climbing frames, so I rarely go there for play.

Gợi ý: Make your intention clearer and use more natural phrasing: begin with a clear statement, then give a specific plan or reason with linking words. Fix grammar (I haven't discovered many parks; get to know).

Ví dụ: Yes, I would love to see more parks in Brisbane because I have only explored one so far. I plan to visit different neighbourhoods on weekends to discover new parks and learn more about each one’s facilities and atmosphere.

Gợi ý: Be direct and give a specific park or reason: start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two details about why you want to visit (memories, features). Correct phrasing (the park I used to play in; I don't remember much about it).

Ví dụ: I haven't planned specific parks, but I would like to return to Japan to visit the park I used to play in as a child. I want to see if it still looks the same and to jog my memories of the games I used to play there.

× I was living in Tokyo, Japan when I was a kid.

✓ I lived in Tokyo, Japan when I was a kid.

Use simple past (lived) for a past habitual or completed situation. 'Was living' implies a continuous action; simple past is clearer for stating where you grew up.

× so the only place I can play with my friend was Park, so I really enjoyed it.

✓ so the only place I could play with my friends was the park, so I really enjoyed it.

Use past modal 'could' for ability in the past. 'Friend' should be plural 'friends' if referring to more than one; add the definite article 'the' before 'park'. Also use past tense consistency ('could' and 'was').

× Not really since I'm currently living in Brisbane, Australia.

✓ Not really, since I currently live in Brisbane, Australia.

When stating a current permanent or semi-permanent situation, use simple present 'live' rather than present continuous 'am living' (both are possible but simple present is more natural for general facts). Include a comma after 'Not really'.

× It's a big city but not as much busy as like Tokyo.

✓ It's a big city but not as busy as Tokyo.

'Not as busy as' is the correct comparative structure. Remove 'much' and 'like' which are unnecessary and incorrect here.

× Also it has a park but it's not like a playground park, it's more like picnic or Green Park so I don't.

✓ It also has parks, but they are not playgrounds; they are more like picnic or green parks, so I don't go to them.

Use plural 'parks' if speaking generally. 'Playground park' is redundant; use 'playgrounds'. Capitalization: 'green' should be lowercase. The sentence was missing the verb at the end ('go to them'). Use semantically consistent plurality and complete the clause.

× I would love to since I've only seen one park in Brisbane and then I haven't discovered the park really much.

✓ I would love to, since I've only seen one park in Brisbane and I haven't explored parks much yet.

Replace 'discovered the park really much' with 'explored parks much yet' for natural phrasing. 'Explored' is a better verb than 'discovered' in this context; add 'yet' to indicate continuation.

× So I'd like to discover more new parks or focus on one park and then get know more about the park.

✓ So I'd like to discover more new parks or focus on one park and then get to know it better.

'Get know' is incorrect; use 'get to know' plus object. 'Get to know it better' is a natural phrasing.

× I've never thought about that, but I'd like to go back to Japan and see the park that I was used to be playing as a kid.

✓ I've never thought about that, but I'd like to go back to Japan and see the park where I used to play as a kid.

Use the correct expression 'used to play' and 'where' to refer to the location. 'Was used to be playing' is ungrammatical and mixes passive and progressive forms.

× I don't really remember anything that happened in there, so I'd like to see it again and check my memories.

✓ I don't really remember anything that happened there, so I'd like to see it again and check my memories.

Use 'there' without 'in' because 'happened there' is the correct prepositional structure. 'In there' is used when emphasizing being inside something; not needed here.