Views— Part 1 Báo cáo

Gợi ý: Be more concise and correct errors. Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid fillers (umm, yes three times), fix word choice errors (e.g., "beautiful as Canary" -> "beautiful scenery"), and use one or two specific supporting details connected with a linking word. Keep to under five sentences.

Ví dụ: Yes, I do. I love taking photos of beautiful scenery when I travel because they help me remember special moments. For example, I often photograph sunsets and historic buildings, and I also share the best shots on social media to keep in touch with friends.

Gợi ý: Correct grammar and clarity. Begin with a direct statement (I prefer urban views), remove hesitations and repetition, and provide specific reasons with linking words (for example, because/and). Fix collocations ("urban views" not "urban we use"). Keep answer to two or three clear sentences.

Ví dụ: I prefer urban views. I enjoy city skylines and interesting landmarks because they look dramatic, especially at night, and they give me lots of photo opportunities.

Gợi ý: Provide a clear main sentence and clearer reasons with correct grammar. Remove fillers, correct verb forms ("I grew up"), and comparative phrasing ("cheaper than traveling abroad"). Use linking words (because, and) and a specific example to support your point. Keep to three sentences max.

Ví dụ: I prefer views in my own country because I grew up here and many places remind me of childhood memories. For example, visiting the seaside town where my family vacationed always brings back happy moments, and it is also cheaper than traveling abroad.

× I really love capturing beautiful as Canary whenever I travel.

✓ I really love capturing beautiful scenes whenever I travel.

The phrase 'beautiful as Canary' is ungrammatical and likely a misuse of adjectives or a mistaken word. 'As Canary' does not function as an adjective phrase here. Replacing it with 'beautiful scenes' or 'beautiful scenery' provides a correct adjective-noun structure. Suggestion: use 'beautiful scenery' or 'beautiful scenes' when describing views.

× Umm take your photos helps me to remember moments and places umm.

✓ Taking photos helps me remember moments and places.

The original mixes imperative-like 'take your photos' with a main clause, causing a sentence structure error. Use the gerund 'Taking' as the subject of the sentence and remove unnecessary pronoun 'your'. Also omit redundant 'to' after 'helps'. Suggestion: begin with 'Taking photos helps me...' and avoid filler words.

× And I also really like umm sharing umm photos on social media with my friends.

✓ I also like sharing photos on social media with my friends.

The sentence contains unnecessary filler 'umm' and redundant 'also really'. While not strictly a pronoun error, the main issue is informal fillers; however 'sharing umm photos' interrupts noun phrase. Removing fillers and redundant adverbs makes the sentence grammatical and natural. Suggestion: say 'I also like sharing photos...' and avoid fillers.

× Honestly, I tend to prefer urban we use rather than rural views because I find something about the city skyline, it's not with light and interesting landmarks that I find it really, really exciting.

✓ Honestly, I tend to prefer urban views rather than rural ones because I find the city skyline and interesting landmarks really exciting.

The original has several problems: 'urban we use' is a misphrase (pronoun/word choice error), and the clause 'it's not with light' is ungrammatical. Also repeating 'I find' is redundant. Correct by using 'urban views' and contrasting with 'rural ones', and by combining ideas into a clear clause: 'I find the city skyline and interesting landmarks really exciting.' Suggestion: use 'rural ones' to refer back to 'views' and avoid awkward insertions.

× Uh, definitely, I find uh, something about my own country's view, umm, I grown up here and it helps me remember my childhood and my family trips and plus it is much more cheaper and than traveling abroad.

✓ Definitely. I find that views of my own country remind me of growing up here; they help me remember my childhood and family trips, and it's much cheaper than traveling abroad.

Errors include incorrect verb form 'I grown up here' (should be 'I grew up here' or 'growing up here' depending on structure), awkward clause connections, and the comparative phrase 'much more cheaper' which is ungrammatical ('much cheaper' is correct). Also 'it helps me remember' needed clearer subject. Suggested corrections: use past tense 'I grew up here' or rephrase with 'growing up here', use 'they help' to match plural 'views', and use 'much cheaper' for comparison. Suggestion: 'views of my own country remind me of growing up here; they help me remember...'