Views— Part 1 Báo cáo

Gợi ý: 문장이 자연스럽지 않은 부분과 문법 오류를 수정하고, 응답을 더 간결하고 논리적으로 구성하세요. 서두에 직접적으로 질문에 답한 후(reason) 구체적인 예를 하나 제시하세요. 연결어를 사용해 문장들이 매끄럽게 이어지도록 하고 마지막 문장은 결론으로 마무리하세요. 예: ‘I like taking photos because…’로 시작하고 ‘for example’ 또는 ‘for instance’를 사용해 구체적 장면을 덧붙이세요.

Ví dụ: Yes, I do. I like taking photos because a photograph can preserve a special atmosphere that my eye might miss. For example, I often photograph sunrises to capture the soft light and colors. This helps me remember the feeling of that moment even later.

Gợi ý: 응답은 비교적 명확하지만 표현을 더 자연스럽고 정확하게 다듬으세요. ‘relieve’는 자주 쓰이는 표현이 아니므로 ‘relaxed’나 ‘relieved’로 고치고, 이유를 구체적인 예로 뒷받침하세요. 또한 연결어(‘because’, ‘so’, ‘for example’)를 적절히 사용해 논리적 흐름을 강화하세요.

Ví dụ: I prefer rural areas, even though I live in the city. Because the countryside has peaceful scenery and lots of greenery, it helps me feel relaxed. For example, I enjoy walking along quiet country roads and listening to birds, which calms me down.

Gợi ý: 의미 전달이 불명확하고 문장이 단편적입니다. ‘view views’ 같은 중복 표현을 고치고, 이유를 구체적으로 설명하세요. 단어 선택을 더 정확히 하고 문장을 연결해 하나의 완성된 답변(토픽 문장 + 이유 + 예시)으로 만드세요.

Ví dụ: I prefer views in my own country because it has diverse coastal and forest landscapes. For example, we have many beaches and wooded areas where you can see rich ecosystems and unique wildlife, which I find fascinating.

× I like taking pictures of different views because I think my eye alone can't capture the precious moment.

✓ I like taking pictures of different views because I think my eyes alone can't capture the precious moments.

The singular noun 'eye' is inappropriate when referring to a person's ability to see generally; use plural 'eyes'. Also 'moment' should be plural 'moments' to match the general idea of multiple occasions. Suggestion: use 'my eyes' and 'precious moments' for natural phrasing.

× Photographs can capture the moment of sunrise and preserve the atmosphere of that moment.

✓ Photographs can capture the sunrise and preserve its atmosphere.

The phrase 'the moment of sunrise' is wordy and 'that moment' is repetitive. Simplify by using 'capture the sunrise' and refer back with the possessive 'its'. This improves conciseness and cohesion.

× So I preserve since drove photograph.

✓ So I preserve those moments by taking photographs.

Original sentence is ungrammatical and unclear. Use 'preserve those moments' to show what is preserved and 'by taking photographs' to indicate the method. 'Since drove' is incorrect; likely intended 'through' or 'by' and 'photographs' is the correct noun form.

× I prefer rural areas even though I live in the city.

✓ I prefer rural areas even though I live in the city.

This sentence is grammatically correct; no change needed. It uses pronouns and reference appropriately. (Included to show no error under listed types.)

× I enjoy the peaceful scenery and green landscapes in the countryside because they can make me feel calm and relieve.

✓ I enjoy the peaceful scenery and green landscapes in the countryside because they make me feel calm and relaxed.

Use 'make me feel calm and relaxed' rather than 'calm and relieve'. 'Relieve' is a verb that requires an object (e.g., relieve stress). Use adjective 'relaxed' to describe the resulting feeling. Also omitting 'can' yields a stronger, more natural statement.

× I prefer view views in my country because my country is surrounded by forest and sea.

✓ I prefer views in my country because it is surrounded by forests and the sea.

Remove duplicated word 'view'. Use 'it' to avoid repetition of 'my country'. Use plural 'forests' unless referring to a single forest, and use 'the sea' for natural reference. This corrects redundancy and improves cohesion.

× We can see many, we can see much. Ecosystems.

✓ We can see many different ecosystems.

Fragmented phrases are combined into a complete sentence. 'Many' needs a noun (e.g., 'ecosystems'); 'much' is uncountable and doesn't fit here. Combine into 'many different ecosystems' for clarity and grammatical correctness.