Views— Part 1 Báo cáo

Gợi ý: Cevabınız doğal ve duygusal olarak etkileyici, fakat tekrarlar ve bazı dilbilgisi hataları akıcılığı azaltıyor. Daha net bir konu cümlesiyle başlayın, gereksiz tekrarları çıkarın ve iki-üç destekleyici cümleyle nedenlerinizi kısa ve anlaşılır biçimde belirtin. Bağlaçlar (for example, because, so) kullanarak cümleler arası akışı güçlendirin. Ayrıca "wanna" gibi konuşma dilini sınavda daha resmi bir alternatifle (want to) değiştirin.

Ví dụ: Yes, I really enjoy photographing different views, especially landscapes from my hometown. For example, I often capture scenes that feel like works of art because they seem timeless. I like to freeze those moments so I can remember how calm and beautiful the place was.

Gợi ý: Cevabınız açık fakat tekrar eden ifadeler ve bazı anlamsal tekrarlar ("feeling the feeling") var. Cümlelerinizi daha akıcı ve tutarlı yapmak için gereksiz tekrarları çıkarın, nedenlerinizi mantıklı bir sırayla verin ve bağlaçlar kullanın. Ayrıca konuşma dilindeki kısaltmaları formal ifadelerle değiştirin ("I want to" yerine "I want to"). Dilbilgisi hatalarını düzeltip cümle sınırına (maksimum 5 cümle) uyun.

Ví dụ: I prefer rural views because they feel more natural and peaceful to me. Living in a busy city every day can be exhausting, so I like to escape to the countryside to see old buildings and open fields. This contrast helps me relax and find inspiration for my photos.

Gợi ý: Genel olarak fikir net fakat tekrarlar ("magnificent" ve "every city" ile "I I") akışı bozuyor. Daha spesifik örnekler ekleyin (örneğin hangi şehir veya hangi doğa özellikleri) ve neden diğer ülkelerde fotoğraf çekmek isteyeceğinizi kısa bir nedenle açıklayın. Cümleleri kısaltarak gereksiz tekrarları kaldırın ve daha doğal bağlaçlar kullanın.

Ví dụ: I prefer the views in my own country because it offers a wide variety of stunning landscapes, such as coastal cliffs and ancient mountain villages. However, I would also like to photograph scenery in China, for example its rice terraces and dramatic mountains, because they offer different colors and textures that would be interesting to capture.

× I really like to take pictures of good and beautiful scenery of my country, of my hometown, of of the things that look like art to me.

✓ I really like taking pictures of beautiful scenery in my country and my hometown, and of things that look like art to me.

The student used the infinitive 'to take' after 'like'. While 'like' can be followed by either the infinitive or -ing form, using the -ing form is more natural when describing general preferences. Also corrected repetition 'of of' and smoothed word order for clarity.

× Or when I take a picture, it looks like I could live there forever.

✓ When I take a picture, it feels as if I could live there forever.

The original sentence used 'it looks like' in a context better expressed by 'it feels as if' to convey emotion. This is a matter of collocation and sentence structure to match intended meaning.

× Like it's so aesthetic that I wanna freeze that moment.

✓ It's so aesthetic that I want to freeze that moment.

Replaced informal 'wanna' with 'want to' for standard grammar. 'Aesthetic' as adjective is acceptable; sentence corrected to standard register.

× So I take.

✓ So I take pictures.

The verb 'take' needs an object to be complete. Adding 'pictures' completes the sentence and clarifies meaning.

× I prefer the views in rural areas because that's more natural to me.

✓ I prefer views in rural areas because they feel more natural to me.

Changed 'that's' to 'they' to agree with plural 'views' and 'more natural to me' kept; corrected pronoun agreement and improved natural phrasing.

× I prefer seeing and feeling the feeling, the old things, like not the city thing, because in I live in a city and that's exhausting for every day.

✓ I prefer seeing and feeling the old things, not the city things, because I live in a city and that is exhausting every day.

Removed redundant 'feeling the feeling', corrected 'city thing' to 'city things' for plural, fixed word order 'because I live in a city', and replaced 'that's' with 'that is' for formality. Also 'exhausting every day' is clearer than 'for every day'.

× But I wanna get away from that.

✓ But I want to get away from that.

Replaced informal 'wanna' with 'want to' for correct standard written English and maintained verb + to-infinitive 'want to get'.

× So that's why I prefer rural areas. Rural.

✓ So that's why I prefer rural areas.

Removed redundant single word 'Rural' at end which is fragmentary; sentence is complete without it.

× Of course, I prefer the views in my own country because it's so full of magnificent scenery and magnificent nature of every city in every city.

✓ Of course, I prefer the views in my own country because it is full of magnificent scenery and nature in every city.

Removed repetition 'in every city' and redundant 'magnificent' duplication, corrected 'it's' to 'it is' for clarity, and adjusted prepositional phrase to 'nature in every city'.

× I I really like my own country, but I would like to take pictures of the other scenery in China, maybe because the nature there is so beautiful too.

✓ I really like my own country, but I would also like to take pictures of scenery in other places in China because the nature there is beautiful too.

Removed duplicated 'I', changed 'the other scenery in China' to 'scenery in other places in China' for clarity, and smoothed sentence flow. Kept tense and modality consistent.