Views— Part 1 Báo cáo

Gợi ý: Be more concise and natural: start with a clear topic sentence, reduce fillers (uh, umm), correct awkward phrasing (e.g. "extra extraordinary"), and add one specific supporting detail. Use a linking word if adding detail.

Ví dụ: Yes, I enjoy taking photos, especially when I travel abroad. For example, last year I photographed coastal towns in Portugal, where the colours and light were very different from home.

Gợi ý: Avoid fillers and pronunciation errors; provide clearer reasons and a contrast using linking words. Replace unclear word 'weary' with 'rural' or 'the countryside' and expand with a specific example or reason limited to one sentence additional.

Ví dụ: I prefer views in the countryside because the natural scenery creates a relaxing atmosphere, whereas the city is more vibrant and busy. For instance, I enjoy walking through quiet rice fields and listening to birds.

Gợi ý: Good content but reduce repetition and tighten structure. Start with a direct statement, avoid repeating 'love', and give one specific example of a seasonal view with a linking word (e.g. 'for example' or 'for instance').

Ví dụ: I prefer views in my own country because Japan offers dramatic seasonal changes. For example, in spring the cherry blossoms create striking landscapes, while in autumn the maple leaves turn vivid red.

× I love taking pictures, uh, especially when I travel to uh, somewhere, umm, I like to take pictures in the foreign countries because it feels extra extraordinary, which is not normal in my daily life.

✓ I love taking pictures, especially when I travel somewhere; I like to take pictures in foreign countries because it feels extraordinary and different from my daily life.

Problems: unnecessary preposition 'to' before 'somewhere', incorrect use of the definite article 'the' before 'foreign countries', and wordiness ('extra extraordinary' is wrong). Corrections: remove 'to' before 'somewhere', omit 'the' when speaking generally about 'foreign countries', replace 'extra extraordinary' with 'extraordinary and different from' for clarity and correctness. Suggestion: use concise phrasing and check article use for general versus specific nouns.

× I prefer rural areas, umm, because weary areas have nature, uh, which gives us relaxing atmosphere, uh, rather than city which gives me vibrant and entertainment.

✓ I prefer rural areas because rural areas have natural scenery that gives a relaxing atmosphere, rather than the city, which gives me vibrancy and entertainment.

Problems: 'weary areas' is the wrong adjective ('weary' means tired); 'have nature' is awkward; missing article 'a' before 'relaxing atmosphere'; 'rather than city' needs 'the city'; 'gives me vibrant and entertainment' uses wrong word forms. Corrections: change 'weary' to 'rural' or 'natural', rephrase 'have natural scenery', add 'a' before 'relaxing atmosphere', use 'the city', and use nouns/adjectives correctly ('vibrancy and entertainment'). Suggestion: choose correct adjectives and ensure articles (a/the) are used where required; use parallel noun forms.

× I actually love views in my country because I love Japanese scenery which is full of changing full seasonal views.

✓ I actually love the views in my country because Japanese scenery is full of changing seasonal scenes.

Problems: awkward phrasing 'full of changing full seasonal views' and missing definite article 'the' before 'views' when referring to specific views in own country. Corrections: add 'the' before 'views' and simplify phrase to 'full of changing seasonal scenes' to avoid repetition. Suggestion: avoid redundant words and use 'the' when referring to particular items".

× I can enjoy different views according to different seasons, such as cherry blossoms.

✓ I enjoy different views in different seasons, such as cherry blossoms.

Problem: 'can enjoy' is grammatically acceptable but sounds weaker; present simple 'I enjoy' better expresses a habitual ability tied to seasons. Also 'according to different seasons' is wordy; 'in different seasons' is clearer. Correction: use present simple and concise preposition. Suggestion: use present simple for habitual facts and prefer concise prepositional phrases.