Views— Part 1 Báo cáo

Gợi ý: Improve fluency and correctness by removing disfluencies and fixing grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two concise supporting details using linking words. Be specific about what you like photographing and why.

Ví dụ: Yes, I enjoy taking pictures of different views. For example, I often photograph city skylines and mountain landscapes because my wide‑angle camera captures depth and detail, and I sometimes use my phone for casual shots when I’m travelling.

Gợi ý: Be concise and avoid repetition. Give a clear preference as a topic sentence, then add a specific reason with linking words. Correct factual/confusing wording (e.g. "a major city, Tehran"). Finish your sentence and avoid trailing off.

Ví dụ: I prefer rural views to urban ones. Because I live in Tehran, a large and often polluted city, I rarely find inspiring scenes there; by contrast, I take more photos in the countryside since I enjoy natural landscapes and peaceful compositions.

Gợi ý: Provide a clear direct answer and avoid filler words. State your main idea then explain with specific examples or reasons and finish the thought. Use linking words like 'however' or 'although' to contrast preferences.

Ví dụ: It depends, but I usually take more photos when I travel abroad. Although I photograph familiar places at home, visiting other countries motivates me to capture new cultures and scenes that I haven’t seen before.

× Yes, actually I enjoy taking pictures. I'm I have a very professional camera which has a wide lens I can take pictures of with depth and in good quality.

✓ Yes, actually I enjoy taking pictures. I have a very professional camera with a wide lens, so I can take pictures with depth and good quality.

The original contains a redundancy and fragmented clauses ('I'm I have'), run-on structure and missing connectors. This is a sentence structure error: remove the extra 'I'm', combine clauses using 'so' or a comma and ensure the modifier 'with a wide lens' correctly attaches to 'camera'. Use parallel phrasing 'with depth and good quality'. Suggest practicing combining short clauses and checking for accidental repetitions.

× Also my mobile phone is good.

✓ Also, my mobile phone takes good pictures.

The sentence is grammatically simple but vague; the pronoun/subject is fine, but the intended meaning refers to the phone's camera performance. This is best corrected by specifying the verb 'takes' to clarify what 'is good' refers to. Suggest being specific about subjects and actions to avoid vague descriptions.

× Actually, because I live in a major Minneapolis, I live in Tehran, the capital city of Iran, and Tehran is a really polluted and crowded city.

✓ Actually, I live in a major city, Tehran, the capital of Iran, and Tehran is really polluted and crowded.

Original misuses 'in a major Minneapolis' and repeats 'I live'. This is an incorrect preposition/word choice and redundancy. Use 'in a major city' and insert appositive commas for 'Tehran, the capital of Iran'. Remove repetition. Suggest reviewing appositives and avoiding unnecessary repetition.

× I don't think there's there is there much there is much to take photo.

✓ I don't think there is much to photograph.

The sentence has repeated 'there is' and incorrect verb phrase 'to take photo'. This is a 'there be' issue combined with wrong collocation. Use 'there is' once and the correct verb 'to photograph' (or 'to take photos'). Suggest simplifying 'there is' constructions and using correct collocations.

× But when I go through rural areas, I tend to take more pictures because I like being in nature and.

✓ But when I go to rural areas, I tend to take more pictures because I like being in nature.

The sentence ends abruptly with 'and.' This is a sentence structure/fragment error. Also 'go through rural areas' is less natural than 'go to rural areas'. Remove the trailing conjunction and complete the thought. Suggest proofreading for sentence completion and choosing natural prepositions.

× I think it doesn't matter really because umm, if I go through other countries, I would take more pictures because it's unknown to me and I want to capture the moment.

✓ I think it doesn't really matter, because if I visit other countries, I would take more pictures since they are unfamiliar to me and I want to capture the moments.

'Go through other countries' is awkward; use 'visit'. 'It's unknown to me' incorrectly uses 'it' and singular; use 'they are unfamiliar to me' or 'they are new to me'. Also 'capture the moment' could be pluralized. This is an incorrect preposition and pronoun reference issue. Suggest using 'visit' for travel and matching pronouns to plural nouns.

× But when I, I'm in Iran, my home umm, country, I would take pictures when I'm.

✓ But when I am in Iran, my home country, I also take pictures when I travel locally.

This sentence is fragmented and contains filler words and repetition ('when I, I'm'). It's a sentence structure error: incomplete clause 'when I'm.' Clarify tense and complete the idea. Replace fillers ('umm') and ensure the verb tense matches the habitual action ('take' for habitual present). Suggest removing fillers and finishing clauses fully.