Part 1
Giám khảo
Do you like taking pictures of different views?
Thí sinh
Yes I do. I believe that taking picture can memories the view or the the moments that you delight to remember.
Giám khảo
Do you prefer views in urban areas or rural areas?
Thí sinh
I am a outdoor person so I definitely prefer rural areas because I love to, uh, closer with the natural.
Giám khảo
Do you prefer views in your own country or in other countries?
Thí sinh
Oh I love my country scenery and it's uh, outside it is not really clear but it's just like umm, really familiar with the the buildings or the streets. So yes, I love my cities views.
Do you like taking pictures of different views?
Điểm: 62.0Gợi ý: 你的回答直接表达了喜好,但语法和用词不够准确,且句子有重复和冗余。改进要点:1) 使用正确的动词和名词形式(例如 take pictures / preserve memories);2) 去掉重复词汇并简化句子;3) 如果需要可以补充一两句具体原因或例子来丰富内容。举例练习句型:‘Yes, I enjoy taking photos of different views because it helps me preserve memories. For example, I often photograph sunsets when I travel.’
Ví dụ: Yes, I enjoy taking photos of different views because it helps me preserve memories. For example, I often photograph sunsets and city skylines when I travel, so I can look back and remember how the place felt.
Do you prefer views in urban areas or rural areas?
Điểm: 58.0Gợi ý: 回答表达了偏好但语法和表达不自然。改进要点:1) 用完整流畅的句子表达偏好(I prefer rural areas.);2) 使用正确的搭配(be close to nature / spend time in nature);3) 增加具体细节说明原因(如喜欢安静、空气清新、风景优美),并使用连接词使句子连贯。示例句式:‘I prefer rural areas because I like being close to nature; the peace and fresh air help me relax.’
Ví dụ: I prefer rural areas because I like being close to nature. The peace, fresh air and open landscapes help me relax, so I often go hiking or take landscape photos when I visit the countryside.
Do you prefer views in your own country or in other countries?
Điểm: 55.0Gợi ý: 答案含糊且表达混乱,缺乏明确对比。改进要点:1) 先给出直接回答(I prefer views in my own country / other countries);2) 提供具体原因并进行对比(熟悉感 vs 新奇感);3) 避免犹豫语(uh, umm)并保持句子简洁不超过五句。示例句式:‘I prefer views in my own country because they feel familiar and comforting, though I also enjoy foreign cityscapes for their novelty.’
Ví dụ: I prefer views in my own country because they feel familiar and comforting, with streets and buildings I recognise. However, I also enjoy views abroad for their novelty and different architectural styles.
× I believe that taking picture can memories the view or the the moments that you delight to remember.
✓ I believe that taking pictures can preserve the views or the moments that you delight in remembering.
错误类型:名词单复数及动词搭配。原句中“taking picture”应为复数“taking pictures”,因为泛指拍照这一行为通常用复数形式;“can memories”不正确,动词“memory”不是及物动词用于“can + 动词原形”,应使用“preserve”或“keep”等;“the view”与“the moments”在此上下文中应为复数“the views”或去掉定冠词都可。另外“delight to remember”搭配不自然,正确表达为“delight in remembering”。建议:注意可数名词的单复数和常见动词短语搭配,多背常用固定搭配。
× I believe that taking picture can memories the view or the the moments that you delight to remember.
✓ I believe that taking pictures can preserve the views or the moments that you delight in remembering.
错误类型:动词+ -ing 型。句首的动名词短语应为“taking pictures”,taking后接动词的动名词结构在此处作主语时需用复数名词形式(pictures)。另外“delight to remember”应改为“delight in remembering”,即介词in后接动名词。建议:注意动词+-ing在作名词(动名词)和介词之后的用法。
× I am a outdoor person so I definitely prefer rural areas because I love to, uh, closer with the natural.
✓ I am an outdoor person, so I definitely prefer rural areas because I love being closer to nature.
错误类型:介词使用不当。原句中“a outdoor”冠词与形容词位置也有问题(见下),但重点是“closer with the natural”不正确,应为“closer to nature”或“closer to the natural environment”。建议:记住常用搭配“be close to sth/ be closer to nature”。
× I am a outdoor person so I definitely prefer rural areas because I love to, uh, closer with the natural.
✓ I am an outdoor person, so I definitely prefer rural areas because I love being closer to nature.
错误类型:冠词使用错误。应为“an outdoor person”,因为outdoor以元音音素开头的单词前用“an”。此外“the natural”作为短语不完整,应改为“nature”或“the natural environment”。建议:注意以元音音素开头的单词用“an”,并确认名词短语是否完整。
× I am a outdoor person so I definitely prefer rural areas because I love to, uh, closer with the natural.
✓ I am an outdoor person, so I definitely prefer rural areas because I love being closer to nature.
错误类型:句子结构错误。原句中“love to, uh, closer with the natural”缺少动词形式和正确结构,应该用“love being closer to nature”或“love to be closer to nature”。建议:注意主句和从句中的动词形式一致,去掉多余填充词“uh”,并使用完整的动词短语。
× So yes, I love my cities views.
✓ So yes, I love my city views.
错误类型:单复数使用问题。原句“My cities views”中“cities”与后面的名词“views”搭配不自然,若指“我城市的景色”应为“my city views”或更自然地“the views of my city”或“my city's views”。建议:如果表示“我的城市的景色”,可用“my city's views”或“the views of my city”;若泛指多座城市的景色,可写“views of my cities”。
× Oh I love my country scenery and it's uh, outside it is not really clear but it's just like umm, really familiar with the the buildings or the streets.
✓ Oh, I love my country's scenery; inside it is very clear, and it's just that I'm really familiar with the buildings and the streets.
错误类型:定冠词使用与所有格问题。原句“my country scenery”更自然为“my country's scenery”;“the the buildings”重复且定冠词使用冗余,此外“outside it is not really clear”语义与后文矛盾(应为inside/外部对比),这里根据上下文改为“inside it is very clear”或“outside it's not very clear”需根据说话者本意调整。建议:使用所有格“my country's scenery”,并避免重复冠词,理清句子逻辑。
× Oh I love my country scenery and it's uh, outside it is not really clear but it's just like umm, really familiar with the the buildings or the streets.
✓ Oh, I love my country's scenery; outside it's not very clear, but I'm just really familiar with the buildings and the streets.
错误类型:句子结构混乱。原句中多处填充词“uh/umm”和重复词“the the”影响表达,句子连接不清晰。建议:简化句子,去掉填充词,用连词或分号连接短句,使主语和谓语匹配(如“I'm really familiar with...”)。