Views— Part 1 Báo cáo

Gợi ý: Be concise and avoid repetition; start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details. Use a linking word if you add another point. Also correct small hesitations and repetition ("my my").

Ví dụ: Yes, I love taking pictures of different views, especially mountains and the seaside. For example, I often photograph sunrise over the hills near my hometown because the light there creates dramatic colours.

Gợi ý: Give a clear topic sentence and then add one specific reason with a linking word to improve coherence. Avoid vague phrases like "relatively very beautiful" and unnecessary repetition like "So by all means."

Ví dụ: I prefer rural views because they are less polluted and offer more natural landscapes. For instance, fields and forests provide varied textures and colours that make my photos more interesting.

Gợi ý: Avoid fillers ("uh") and repetitive phrases. Provide one focused reason and one specific example of a favourite place or experience. Use a linking word to connect ideas for clarity.

Ví dụ: I prefer views in my own country because places like Himachal Pradesh and Uttarakhand have spectacular Himalayan scenery. For example, I enjoy photographing the snow-capped peaks around Manali at sunrise because the colours and shadows change quickly.

× My my hometown is very famous for its mountain scenery and I love it.

✓ My hometown is very famous for its mountain scenery, and I love it.

This sentence contains an unintended repetition 'My my' which is a sentence structure error (Grammar Problem Type ID 26). Remove the duplicate word to make the sentence grammatically correct and fluent. Also add a comma before 'and' to join the two independent clauses correctly. Suggestion: Read the sentence aloud to notice duplication and pause where clauses join.

× ...the pictures and the views are relatively very beautiful there as compared to the cities.

✓ ...the views there are much more beautiful compared to the cities.

The phrase 'relatively very beautiful' is redundant and awkward; this is an incorrect use of adjectives/adverbs (Grammar Problem Type ID 13). Use a clearer comparative structure such as 'much more beautiful' or 'relatively more beautiful.' Also simplify 'the pictures and the views' to just 'the views' to avoid redundancy. Suggestion: Choose a single modifier (relatively, very, much) to convey degree, and use a standard comparative form when comparing two things.

× I prefer watching these views in my country, especially in the states of Himachal and Uttarakhand, where there are, uh, Himalayas all the way.

✓ I prefer seeing these views in my country, especially in the states of Himachal and Uttarakhand, where the Himalayas stretch all the way.

'Watching these views' is an odd collocation; 'seeing' or 'viewing' is more natural. 'Himalayas' should be used with the definite article 'the' when referring to the mountain range (Grammar Problem Type ID 17/22). 'All the way' is better expressed as 'stretch all the way.' Suggestion: Use natural collocations (see/visit/view) and include 'the' before mountain range names.

× I love to visit and I love to travel to the mountains.

✓ I love visiting and travelling to the mountains.

Using 'love to visit' and 'love to travel to' is not wrong, but for parallel structure and natural spoken English, gerunds 'visiting' and 'travelling' are preferable here (Grammar Problem Type ID 8). Also use consistent spelling (travel/travelling). Suggestion: Keep parallel verb forms for smoother sentences: 'I love visiting and travelling to the mountains.'