Part 1
Giám khảo
Do you like taking pictures of different views?
Thí sinh
I don't. I would prefer to take pictures of myself, my friends with strangers to keep it as memory of the journey. But I am not preferring taking photos of mountains, landscapes or so on.
Giám khảo
Do you prefer views in urban areas or rural areas?
Thí sinh
Rural areas of course, in anytime and any any scenario I would prefer rural areas 'cause I was born in a village and I like this scenes of grass and green open spaces. I don't like urban areas.
Giám khảo
Do you prefer views in your own country or in other countries?
Thí sinh
We can say that I prefer some places in my country, I live in Egypt, places like South Sinai, Mount Sinai, MMM, it is uh, not many places in Egypt. We can say that I enjoy it, but we can talk a lot about it. Other countries like in Switzerland, USA, London and there is a lot.
Do you like taking pictures of different views?
Điểm: 60.0Gợi ý: Be more natural and direct: start with a clear topic sentence saying whether you like taking pictures of views, then give concise supporting reasons and one brief example. Avoid repetition and incorrect phrasing (e.g. "I don't" alone is vague; "I don't really" or "Not really" is better). Use linking words like "because" or "but" to connect ideas.
Ví dụ: Not really. I usually prefer taking photos of my friends and myself because I want to preserve personal memories of trips. However, I sometimes take landscape shots if the scenery is especially impressive.
Do you prefer views in urban areas or rural areas?
Điểm: 70.0Gợi ý: Begin with a clear topic sentence and support it with specific reasons and one concise example. Correct grammar (e.g. "at any time and in any scenario" rather than "anytime and any any scenario"). Use linking words like "because" and avoid absolute statements without nuance.
Ví dụ: I prefer rural areas because I grew up in a village and enjoy green open spaces and quiet surroundings. For example, I feel more relaxed walking through fields and small villages than in crowded city streets.
Do you prefer views in your own country or in other countries?
Điểm: 55.0Gợi ý: Give a clear direct answer first (e.g. "Both, but...") then specify which places you prefer and why. Avoid vague phrases like "we can say," filler words and unclear references (e.g. "MMM"). Provide one specific reason and a short comparison between home and abroad using linking words such as "however" or "but."
Ví dụ: I enjoy views both in my own country and abroad, but I especially like places in Egypt such as South Sinai and Mount Sinai because of their dramatic landscapes. However, I also admire the scenery in countries like Switzerland and the UK for their mountains and lakes.
× I don't. I would prefer to take pictures of myself, my friends with strangers to keep it as memory of the journey.
✓ I don't. I prefer to take pictures of myself and my friends with strangers to keep them as memories of the journey.
Original uses 'would prefer' which is acceptable but inconsistent with other present preferences; 'my friends with strangers' is unclear and needs 'and' to link; 'to keep it as memory' uses wrong pronoun and singular 'memory' instead of plural 'memories'. Use 'prefer' for general preference, 'and' to list, 'them' to refer to pictures, and 'memories' plural.
× But I am not preferring taking photos of mountains, landscapes or so on.
✓ But I do not prefer taking photos of mountains, landscapes, or similar scenes.
Stative verbs like 'prefer' are not normally used in continuous forms; 'am not preferring' is incorrect. Use simple present 'do not prefer'. Also change 'or so on' to 'or similar scenes' for clarity.
× Rural areas of course, in anytime and any any scenario I would prefer rural areas 'cause I was born in a village and I like this scenes of grass and green open spaces.
✓ Rural areas, of course. At any time and in any scenario, I prefer rural areas because I was born in a village and I like these scenes of grass and green open spaces.
Place adverbial phrases appropriately: 'at any time' not 'in anytime'. Remove duplicate 'any'. Use simple present 'prefer' for general habits rather than 'would prefer'. Use 'because' instead of colloquial ''cause'. 'This scenes' is wrong; use plural demonstrative 'these scenes'.
× I don't like urban areas.
✓ I do not like urban areas.
Contraction 'I don't' is acceptable in speech but for formal clarity expand to 'I do not'. No grammatical error beyond register; this preserves simple present negative for habitual dislike.
× We can say that I prefer some places in my country, I live in Egypt, places like South Sinai, Mount Sinai, MMM, it is uh, not many places in Egypt.
✓ I prefer some places in my country; I live in Egypt. Places like South Sinai and Mount Sinai are examples, but there are not many places like these in Egypt.
Run-on sentence with several fragments; separate into clearer sentences. 'We can say that' is unnecessary—use direct 'I prefer'. 'MMM, it is uh,' are fillers and should be removed. Use 'there are not many places' to express quantity correctly.
× We can say that I enjoy it, but we can talk a lot about it.
✓ I enjoy those places, but there is a lot to say about them.
Awkward phrasing 'we can say that I enjoy it' and vague 'talk a lot about it' need restructuring. Use 'those places' to refer back, 'there is a lot to say about them' is clearer and grammatically correct.
× Other countries like in Switzerland, USA, London and there is a lot.
✓ Other countries, such as Switzerland, the USA, and the UK, also have many beautiful places.
'Like in Switzerland' is incorrect; use 'such as' or 'for example'. 'USA' should have 'the' as 'the USA'. 'London' is a city not a country; replace with 'the UK' or list cities correctly. Finish the sentence with a clear verb phrase; 'there is a lot' is vague.