Views— Part 1 Báo cáo

Gợi ý: Be more concise and correct minor grammar/repetition issues. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details (when, what you photograph, or why). Use linking words (for example, 'because' or 'so') and avoid repeating words. Correct small errors like double words and prepositions.

Ví dụ: Yes, I do. I enjoy photographing natural scenes because they help me relax and practice composition. For example, I often take photos of mountain sunsets and forest trails with my phone, and I plan to buy a proper camera next year so I can capture higher-quality images.

Gợi ý: Clarify your meaning and avoid unclear or incorrect words. Begin with a direct answer ("I prefer rural areas.") then give specific reasons with linking words such as 'because' or 'so'. Keep sentences short and avoid vague phrases like 'the organization' and 'are blamed'.

Ví dụ: I prefer rural areas because they are quieter and closer to nature. For example, many rural spots near my town are surrounded by snowy hills and forests, so I find them more peaceful and photogenic than busy city streets.

Gợi ý: Provide a clearer structure: state your preference, then give two specific supporting details about what makes your country special. Fix repetitions and incorrect terms (e.g., 'Tharai Reason' -> 'Terai region'). Use linking words like 'for example' or 'such as' to make details concrete.

Ví dụ: I prefer views in my own country because Nepal has a very diverse landscape. For example, the Himalayan region offers dramatic mountain scenery, the hilly region has terraced fields and forests, and the Terai plains feature lush lowland forests and wildlife.

× As a nature lover, I have always found it fascinating to capture the scenery, the beauty, the landscape of the nature in my mobile devices.

✓ As a nature lover, I have always found it fascinating to capture the scenery and beauty of nature with my mobile device.

The original sentence has redundancy and awkward noun phrases ('the landscape of the nature', 'in my mobile devices'). This is a sentence structure issue (ID 26). Improve by removing unnecessary articles, combining similar nouns with 'and', using the uncountable noun 'nature' without 'the', and using a singular collective noun 'mobile device' or 'mobile devices' consistently. This makes the sentence concise and grammatically correct.

× As a child I I was not able to afford cameras but now I'm planning to buy a camera for for myself.

✓ As a child, I was not able to afford a camera, but now I'm planning to buy one for myself.

This sentence has repetition ('I I', 'for for') and article inconsistency ('cameras' vs 'a camera'), causing a sentence structure error (ID 26). Correct by removing duplicate words, using 'a camera' or 'one' for clarity, and adding commas to separate clauses.

× In my opinion I would definitely choose rural areas as it is far away from the organization and mostly closer to nature and most of the cases the rural areas, the places over there are surrounded by hills and mountains which are kept with which are filled with snows and are blamed.

✓ In my opinion, I would definitely choose rural areas because they are farther from urban development and closer to nature. In most cases, rural places are surrounded by hills and mountains that are covered with snow.

The original is confused, with incorrect prepositions ('far away from the organization' should be 'farther from urban development'), wrong demonstratives and articles, and awkward phrases ('kept with which are filled with snows and are blamed'). This fits Incorrect use of prepositions (ID 11) and sentence structure errors (ID 26). Fix by choosing appropriate prepositions ('farther from'), plural agreement ('they are'), and clearer phrases ('covered with snow'). Remove redundant words and simplify clause structure.

× I live in a country with diverse landscape.

✓ I live in a country with a diverse landscape.

Missing article before the singular countable noun 'landscape' is an adjective/article issue (ID 13/22). According to noun rules, use 'a diverse landscape' to be grammatically correct.

× Nepal is divided into 3 different regions according to the landscape and geographical structure namely hilly, Himalayan and Tharai Reason.

✓ Nepal is divided into three regions based on landscape and geographical structure: the hilly region, the Himalayan region, and the Terai region.

Errors include numeral form (use words in formal writing optionally), incorrect preposition ('according to' better as 'based on'), missing articles, a misspelling 'Tharai Reason' and inconsistent region names. This is primarily incorrect use of prepositions and sentence structure (ID 11 and 26). Also correct region names and punctuation for clarity.

× Each of each containing a different kind of different properties of natural beauties.

✓ Each region contains different kinds of natural beauty.

The original has repetition ('Each of each') and awkward phrasing ('different kind of different properties of natural beauties'), a clear sentence structure error (ID 26). Simplify to 'Each region contains different kinds of natural beauty' to be grammatical and natural.

× That's why I would definitely prefer my country over any other.

✓ That's why I would definitely prefer my country to any other.

'Prefer X over Y' is acceptable in informal usage, but the more standard and precise structure is 'prefer X to Y.' The original is a minor sentence structure issue (ID 26). Use 'to' for standard preference expression.