Views— Part 1 Báo cáo

Gợi ý: Be more concise and correct grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid repetition, and give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Correct common errors (e.g., 'taking pictures', 'this is my passion', 'when I go out', 'cheer me up' instead of 'make my bed').

Ví dụ: I love taking pictures of different views because photography is my passion. For example, when I visit parks or city streets I usually take a series of shots to capture the light and atmosphere, and doing this always cheers me up.

Gợi ý: Answer directly with a clear topic sentence and reduce filler words. Use linking words to compare urban and rural views, and give specific reasons or an example for each. Correct vocabulary (e.g., 'views' not 'uses', 'industrial areas').

Ví dụ: I prefer views in both urban and rural areas. In cities I like the contrast of modern buildings and green parks, while in the countryside I enjoy wide fields, traditional villages and the local culture, so both offer interesting subjects for my photos.

Gợi ý: Give a clear preference and support it with specific reasons and one example. Avoid hesitation and repetition. Use linking words to contrast your choices (e.g., 'however', 'for example') and correct grammar ('prefer views in my own country', 'I sometimes prefer views in other countries').

Ví dụ: I generally prefer views in my own country because Pakistan has diverse landscapes and familiar cultural scenes. However, I sometimes enjoy views abroad—for example, Switzerland’s alpine scenery and clean lakes offer very different and striking photographic opportunities.

× Yes, I like taking picture of different views because this is a my passion and when I when, whatever and whenever I go to the outsides I take some pictures for some series because I I believe that if I take some pictures then it will definitely make my mood and make my bed.

✓ Yes, I like taking pictures of different views because this is my passion, and whenever I go outside I take some pictures for a series because I believe that taking pictures definitely improves my mood and makes me feel better.

Errors: incorrect article use ('picture' should be plural 'pictures'); redundant article 'a my' should be 'my'; 'the outsides' incorrect article and noun form -> 'outside'; 'some series' -> 'a series'. Suggestions: use plural for general activities ('pictures'), remove unnecessary articles, use 'outside' for being outdoors, and use 'a series' for a collection. Also simplify and remove repetitions for clarity.

× Yes, I like taking picture of different views because this is a my passion and when I when, whatever and whenever I go to the outsides I take some pictures for some series because I I believe that if I take some pictures then it will definitely make my mood and make my bed.

✓ Yes, I like taking pictures of different views because it is my passion, and whenever I go outside I take pictures for a series because I believe photographing improves my mood and makes me feel better.

Errors: repeated words ('when I when', 'I I'), awkward phrasing ('make my bed' likely intended 'make me feel better'). Suggestions: remove repetitions, rephrase to logical clauses, and use natural expressions ('make me feel better'). Keep tense consistent and concise.

× Uh, well, I prefer you in both areas because, uh, I, I, I believe that in urban areas there are different uses, some green trees and, uh, there is a, some, uh, like, uh, industries areas, but in the rural area we, we see that there is a lot of greenery, a lot of plants and different culture. So I prefer both views.

✓ Uh, well, I prefer both areas because I believe that urban areas have various uses, some green trees and some industrial areas, while rural areas have a lot of greenery, many plants and different cultures. So I prefer both views.

Errors: pluralization and noun forms ('uses' unclear but kept as 'various uses'; 'industries areas' should be 'industrial areas'; 'different culture' should be 'different cultures'). Suggestions: use correct adjective form 'industrial' before 'areas', pluralize 'culture' when referring to multiple kinds, and use 'many' for countable nouns like 'plants'.

× Uh, well, I prefer you in both areas because, uh, I, I, I believe that in urban areas there are different uses, some green trees and, uh, there is a, some, uh, like, uh, industries areas, but in the rural area we, we see that there is a lot of greenery, a lot of plants and different culture. So I prefer both views.

✓ Uh, well, I prefer both areas because I believe that urban areas have various uses, some green trees and some industrial areas, while rural areas have a lot of greenery, many plants and different cultures. So I prefer both views.

Errors: incorrect pronoun 'you' used where 'both' or 'both areas' is intended. Suggestions: replace 'you' with the appropriate noun or phrase ('both areas'), and remove excessive filler pronouns and repetitions.

× Uh, well, I prefer you in my own country, but sometimes I prefer to other countries because, uh, I can see that in Switzerland there is a lot of greenery, a lot of beautiful views.

✓ Uh, well, I prefer my own country, but sometimes I prefer other countries because, for example, in Switzerland there is a lot of greenery and many beautiful views.

Errors: incorrect preposition 'to other countries' should be 'other countries' (no 'to'); 'prefer you in my own country' wrong pronoun and preposition. Suggestions: use 'prefer my own country' or 'prefer staying in my own country' and omit 'to' before plural 'other countries'; add connecting phrase like 'for example' for clarity.

× Uh, well, I prefer you in my own country, but sometimes I prefer to other countries because, uh, I can see that in Switzerland there is a lot of greenery, a lot of beautiful views. Uh, but I, I can talk about Pakistan and Pakistan is there is a very beautiful country and where there is a lot of different views, different, uh, different.

✓ I prefer my own country, but sometimes I prefer other countries because, for example, Switzerland has a lot of greenery and many beautiful views. Pakistan is also a very beautiful country with many different kinds of scenery.

Errors: awkward present-tense constructions and redundant phrases ('Pakistan is there is a very beautiful country'). Suggestions: use simple present tense consistently ('Switzerland has'), remove redundant 'there is', and use clear noun phrases ('many different kinds of scenery').